Wenying is passing by. Come in and have a look. Teacher Deng's Seven-Rhyme Poem attracted applause and flowers because it was selected as a good poem of the day by China Poetry Network. But there are also a few people who disagree and have different opinions. Wen Ying read this poem carefully several times. I feel that truth is often in the hands of a few people. I think this poem is really one of the seven laws written by Teacher Deng, but unfortunately it was chosen. Therefore, it is normal to raise objections. Why is this poem poor? First of all, it has nothing to do with it. It is suspected of the title party. Topic: Spring Sleepiness. Teacher Deng's Note: The spring sleep in the poem is actually an emotional sleep. Whether it is spring or emotion, you can't rely on comments, but on words.
First of all, analyze this poem: the first couplet: after the plum blossoms wither, the apricot blossoms are fragrant, but they cause leisure and drunkenness. Beginning sentence: After the plum blossoms wither, the apricot blossoms are fragrant, and it is already spring. When spring comes, it should be a hundred flowers, not only apricot flowers, but also peach blossoms, pear blossoms and so on. Why write apricot flowers alone? Because apricot is neat and appropriate. Sentence: but it makes you feel carefree and intoxicated. Cut to the chase. Worry about nothing. This is the "mental pain" mentioned by Mr. Deng himself. Get it drunk. Drunk hometown seems to make sense. Because the word dream should be used in the conclusion sentence, the word drunk is chosen here. Although couplets are common, they make sense.
The jaw association should write about spring or emotional depression, but what Teacher Deng wrote was: a ray of literary heart invades pride, and a few branches cross the residual wall. That's completely beside the point, Wan Li. And the confrontation is unstable. Wen Xin is obvious to Qiong Rui, and pride is obvious to the residual wall. The word Joan of Joan Rui is vulgar.
Necklace: listening to the sound of rain and bananas behind closed doors, the wind and the moon are cool. Regardless of the rainy day, where is the moon shadow? It's also irrelevant to the theme to finally get together. There is no shadow of spring and no emotional difficulties.
The end of the couplet: No matter whether the dream is difficult or not, try again and again. Because there was no foreshadowing before, this sentence suddenly came here, which really made readers fall into a dream, and they didn't know what to say. Mixed feelings, long eyes Try to rhyme. Humble opinion! Haha, please forgive me for taking the liberty! By the way, Mr. Deng also wrote many good poems, which are still appreciated and respected today. Poetry has nothing to do with others. If there is anything wrong, please also invite poetry friends to criticize and discuss.
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