Looking for the negative comments on Zhang's "Moonlit Night on a Spring River" in history.

I don't think so. You can read Mr. Cheng's Textual Research on Ancient Poetry. There are two articles about this poem. I think the biggest negative comment is that some people misunderstand this poem as a "palace poem", such as Wen Yiduo. See the Palace Redemption Poem in Tang Poetry for details. However, Mr. Wen spoke highly of this poem, saying that it is "the poem in the poem, the peak in the peak".