How to write scenery and send feelings in metrical poems

The majestic Zhenshan Camp overlooks Fiona Fang for hundreds of miles. Six colors and five colors, nine layers of octagonal ancient style; Hovering up and down the stairs, around the sides of Wang Ping. At night, the stars are pleasing to the eye and majestic in the coal city! -Kuixing Building, located at the top of Longshou Mountain in Liaoyuan City, Jilin Province, is the latest symbol of this city. The editor's note describes the Kuixing Tower from the perspective of distance, but the ancients wrote scenes and blended with them, which made the poem full and lyrical indifference was a big shortcoming of this poem. Say hello and be happy every day)-Thank the editor for his outspoken comments in the book, but we can honestly exchange different opinions. I think the idea of this poem is to describe the image of this Kuixing Tower, and "emotion" is completely contained in the words used to write the scenery. After reading it, I will praise myself and criticize myself. A short eight-sentence metrical poem is not allowed to separate "emotion" from "scenery" Yes, as the ancients said, people today are also talking about "blending scenes." Is this poem really cold? You mean there are no special lyrics? One of the strongest "feelings" is the enthusiastic description and praise of my hometown "Kuixing Building". I don't object to your conclusion here, just exchange views. I don't know how flat it is or even how big the rules are! However, in order to learn, can I take this poem to Jiangshan Poetry Style and let everyone scrutinize it comprehensively, which may benefit me a lot! Friend in 2008: I have different opinions to discuss with you. Please enlighten me on fallacies. First of all, I invite my friends to read a well-known ancient poem "Jueju": two orioles singing green willows and a row of egrets soaring into the sky. The window contains thousands of autumn snows in Xiling, and it is at the gate of Wan Li, Wu Dong. This is a seven-character quatrain written by the poet [Tang] Du Fu while living in Huanhuaxihu, Chengdu, which describes the beautiful spring scenery around the hutong. A large number of color adjectives are used in the poem, such as "yellow", "emerald", "white" and "cyan", which make the picture colorful and show the beautiful scenery in spring. Through the description of the vibrant spring scenery in the poem, we can easily understand the cheerful feelings hidden between the lines of the poet. Although it doesn't directly write "love", it is still a good poem of "observing things and sending feelings" and a model of "blending scenes". Of course, there is a difference of 108,000 miles in my seven laws "Kuixing Building", and its writing methods can be compared, because they all express their feelings from the perspective of scenery writing. Such as: Haoran majestic town mountain camp, overlooking Fiona Fang Baili. Six colors and five colors, nine layers of octagonal ancient style; Hovering up and down the stairs, around the sides of Wang Ping. At night, the stars are pleasing to the eye and majestic in the coal city! Here, it is "majestic", "overlooking a hundred miles of countryside", "innovative and beautiful", "old-fashioned", "the stars are pleasing to the eye at night" and "majestic and towering like a coal city!" ..... without admiration and praise? This admiration and cherish is not only for this "building"! ? How can you see the indifference of love? I hope you can give me specific suggestions and communicate with me! Second, the artistic conception of "artistic conception" and "scene blending"-that is, the atmosphere realm formed by scene blending. It is the condition provided by poetry itself, which constitutes a new realm of image environment in readers' minds. It has been promoted to a new level in both connotation and extension. There is a comprehensive expression of emotion (thinking) and scenery (picture). According to the author's creative purpose and theme, narrative or lyric, structural arrangement, the writing method of the work is determined, but there is no fixed routine. This is why it is called "creation" to appreciate the artistic conception of a work, which has a certain relationship with readers' quality, literary accomplishment, habits, ways of understanding or attitudes. Some people often explain their "mistakes" in worshipping people, flatter them, or deny the "originality" of anonymous people as "sick", which is also a phenomenon that can be seen in works criticism. In the same way, celebrities are "models", but anonymous people are different. It is either a snob or a "celebrity effect" (this is not aimed at anyone, it is its phenomenon). Thirdly, "expressing emotion with scenery" is a common way to write metrical poems. Writing about the beauty of the moon "reveals a smiling face" here contains praise; Writing about the moon's "misty eyes" is also an expression of the author's sadness, and it is "lyrical with scenery", which is a common sense in literature. Here is a joke: Du Fu's quatrain "Two orioles sing green willows", and some people use natural logic to deny that it violates the laws of nature. How do green willows coexist with snow ("the window contains thousands of autumn snow in Xiling")? Liu Cui is in spring and summer, while snow is in winter! So I changed "green willow" to "weeping willow", but it was not recognized by future generations. In fact, there are mountains covered with snow all year round, and there are two kinds of climate under the mountain. I think there may be a "celebrity effect" here. If ordinary people write like this, they may come to another conclusion. Because a metrical poem (for example, seven verses) is defined as eight sentences and fifty-six words, it is necessary to outline the image as clearly as possible within the constraints of metrical rules, give readers a complete image (especially the view of things), and let readers feel immersive, and their feelings can only be reflected in the combination of words (or between words), such as Du Fu's quatrains. I have been learning to write metrical poems for many years, and I feel that its norms require a lot. How difficult it is to put what I see and feel into it under the restriction of the number of words and sentences, and under the constraint of flat and even rules! Writing a metrical poem takes more effort than writing several ancient poems. Right? Ask friends who write metrical poems to talk about their creative experience! This is not to flatter others, but to get an evaluation that the public thinks is fair and has specific basis, and to be inspired and guided. In order to correct the future, only * * can communicate and discuss. I sincerely hope that my friends can point out the problems frankly.