Beautiful Butterfly and Life Is Not Over.
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First, "Beautiful Butterfly"
1, comments: the central word is beauty, the beauty of life. Grasping the central word will grasp the theme of the article; The inscription and ending echoed from beginning to end, profoundly pointing out the theme of the article.
2. Original text
Beautiful butterfly
Life is short, but the beauty of life is eternal.
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The shower gradually stopped, so I went out of the stuffy room to get some air. My eyes suddenly lit up, ah! A colorful butterfly! Blue skirt, white ribbon, butterflies flying like fairies. Not far away, it is such a gorgeous flower that presents a different kind of beauty in the washing of rain. Butterflies are flying among the flowers, which disturbs my vision. Suddenly it flew again and landed on the trunk of a big tree next to me. Is it showing off its beauty to me? I stopped to watch.
"poof!" The butterfly was hit by a raindrop and fell into a puddle under the tree. I froze. I don't know if I should hold it. My weak wings flapped feebly in the water. I suddenly found that my breathing was shortness of breath. Gradually, gradually, a miracle appeared. It climbed up to a small flower in a puddle bit by bit, erected its wet wings and trembled slightly in the wind.
My heart is full of joy. The tenacious life finally overcame the bad luck. Suddenly a breeze blew and countless raindrops fell on the trees. The butterfly was unfortunately hit again and fell miserably. My heart aches. There are shallow ripples on the water, and this little life is still struggling and alive! I seem to feel the throb of powerful life! Pick it up carefully at once. Trembling wings open and close slightly, and my heart falls with them. Weak butterfly, can you survive?
Another gust of wind blew, the sky cleared up and a rainbow hung in the sky. The brave butterfly tried several times and finally jumped out of my hand and flew to Ran Ran. ...
I stood still and looked at it. Respectable butterfly, for the sake of beauty, break the shackles of silk cocoon, for the sake of beauty, overcome the hardships of wind and rain, isn't it explaining to me the eternal beauty of life?
Second, "Life is not over"?
1, comments:? The author selects three representative figures and their touching stories-writers and scientists; There are China and foreign countries; There are famous ones and ordinary ones-from which I summed up my own point of view: "There is no distinction between high and low in life, they interpret immortal legends in their own different ways", and at the same time, they take care of the topic. What is commendable is not only the author's proper choice of materials, but also his mastery of materials, such as exact time and quotation of figures, which shows that the author has made solid efforts in his usual accumulation.
2. Original text
Life is not over.
A great soul stopped thinking in a new country apartment on the mainland of Shanghai and closed his eyes forever. However, more than 70 years later, his voice and smile still appear in front of people, who are bathed in the brilliance of his thoughts all the time and will never feel his existence.
He fought all his life, using a pen as a gun and tirelessly challenging the old forces; He is willing to be a willing ox and always cares for young people selflessly. People are often horrified when reading his works, because they often find their own shadows in the characters in his works. It questions people's conscience like a whip, "as if to squeeze out the little things hidden under the fur robe", which makes people feel ashamed and urges them to turn over a new leaf.
The poet praised him for "someone died and he is still alive"; In the hearts of the broad masses of the people, he represents soul of china! He is Lu Xun.
He is a billionaire and an outstanding inventor. He devoted his whole life to the cause of human science, and only obtained 255 kinds of patents, and left a will behind him, dedicating all his property to the cause of science in return for future generations.
Therefore, every year in 65438+February 10, a simple and grand award ceremony will be held in Stockholm, Sweden, to reward those who have made great contributions to human physics, chemistry, medicine, literature and peace in the world in the past year, and the bonus amount is very rich. He is a Nobel Prize.
He is an ordinary little boy, and people have long forgotten his name. At the age of twelve, he was unfortunately terminally ill and died soon. However, on his deathbed, he offered to donate his cornea to patients in need. "So I can see you all the time, Mom," he persuaded Mom. Mother agreed to his request with tears in her eyes. The little boy left peacefully, but a lucky man saw the light again.
There is no distinction between high and low in life. They interpret immortal legends in their own different ways.