Let's enter the text to analyze it. The core of the analysis is contradiction, internal and external contradictions. Then the analysis of this paper takes contradiction as the starting point.
How bright the moonlight is at home! Quoted from the allusion "He knows that the dew will be frost tonight and the moonlight at home is so bright". In Du Fu's "My Brothers on a Moonlit Night", it shows that the tone of this article is poetic and affectionate from the beginning of the title.
The structure of this article is very clear. The first paragraph and the seventh natural paragraph are straightforward, expressing their love for the moon in their hometown, thus reflecting their love and yearning for their hometown. It's just that most students will ignore that the total sentence of the article is not simply to express his love for the moonlight in his hometown. It follows the reasoning method of western syllogism: everyone-hometown, everyone-moon, everyone = hometown ∩ moon. Strictly speaking, this statement has no causal logic. The first sentence is a fact, and the second sentence is irrelevant. Everyone has his hometown and the moon, but it can't be said that everyone loves the moon in his hometown, which is somewhat conceptual. But you don't think he is strange, but he is born. Because the description of the first sentence is to pave the way for the second sentence, not the fact. Mr Sun Shaozhen said: Reason and emotion are a pair of contradictions. Pure reason is ruthless, but unreasonable, and may be lyrical. The influence of emotions will make people's perception mutate. The so-called, a flower, someone else's tofu, is this truth. Therefore, true feelings and true feelings are contradictory in themselves. Experts should not only feel true, but also feel that they are playing hooligans! There is actually a misunderstanding in composition teaching. It is actually problematic for students to observe and describe on the spot. This will not be shown for the time being.
The second and third paragraphs introduce some interesting things about mountains and water at dusk. There are no mountains in the author's hometown, but why did he write about mountains? This is the first contradiction. What's the relationship between water and the moon? This is the second contradiction. We know that writing is only related to the theme, especially prose, not novels, and a large number of idle pens are set up to control the rhythm of the article. What you do at dusk can at most arouse children's interest and highlight their innocence and loveliness. It is not directly related to the topic. Can these two paragraphs be deleted? This is a question worth thinking about.
The fourth paragraph gets down to business, and the moon and water set each other off. How can the moon and water set each other off? Looking back now, we can find the reason. It turns out that the second paragraph and the third paragraph are the explanations of this kind of "set each other off and become interesting": after nightfall, the bright moon goes bye-bye, and the moonlight flows down the earth, and there is no obstacle in Shan Ye. Looking up at the Milky Way, you can see everything at a glance. Compared with Dongting Lake, there are vast and crystal clear rivers here. Bright moonlight, clear water, quiet countryside, unrestrained play. So the author said: although I don't know poetry yet, I feel that something is budding in my heart. How beautiful the clear water is under the moon. These descriptions in paragraph 2.3 are the following explanations of "set each other off as an interest". So what if we put the descriptions of mountains and water in the fourth paragraph?
Rewrite: Later, I went to the pit. Because there are no mountains where I live and the village is full of water, I looked up and saw a bright moon in the clear sky, which aroused my interest in the moon in the water. Although I don't know what poetry is, I feel something stirring in my heart. Sometimes I play by the pit for a long time before going home to sleep.
Although this kind of writing tells readers the environment of the author's hometown, it also loses a kind of poetry. Only cold notice, no warm description. Mr. Lu Xun said: "All the great writers who have been evaluated have explained' how to write' in their works, but it is difficult for readers to see and understand. Because on the one hand, learners must know' should not write like this', and then they will understand the original' should write like this'. " Only in this way can you change from passive to active, really enter the text and have a dialogue with it, otherwise it will only be superficial browsing.
In the fifth paragraph, many adjectives are used to describe foreign scenery, one of which is beautiful. Then there was a big turning point, saying that I like the little moon in my hometown and I want to fly back. The moon abroad is so beautiful, but the author is so eager to go back, and there is a contradiction between emotion and realistic logic. Although the beautiful scenery abroad is wonderful, I love the humble little moon more. Deeply expressed the author's eternal yearning and concern for his hometown.
The sixth paragraph depicts the moonlight scenery of Longrun Garden with rich pen and ink and exquisite words, which is picturesque and wonderful. However, here comes another one. He thought of the ordinary little moon.
Here's a question. These two natural words repeatedly express their love for the moonlight in their hometown in a contrasting way. Is the repetition of technology a rut? Can the sixth paragraph be deleted because the fifth paragraph is enough to express his love for his hometown? This is a question worth discussing. Then let's assume that because there is a summary at the end of the fifth paragraph, this summary is actually possible. The article can also end. But this is not enough to echo the beginning of the article, and then write a paragraph about your own environment in Longrun Garden, so that readers can perceive the author's feelings. At the end of the article, let's sum up that Zhang Xianzhi will handle it well at the beginning, so that it is at least structurally complete.
These are my superficial thoughts on how bright the moonlight is at home! .