Analysis: Oral English is full of short sentences, repetition, confusion and verbosity. It has a special geographical and crowd style, and it has a tone.
The shortness of speech shows Mr. Yao's wit.
Goo goo chicken, please, very please.
Use dialects, Deng Anqing. People use dialects whenever they talk. It is also a way to shape character. Language is the external expression of human spirit and thinking.
Use punctuation to express feelings.
Record conversations in life by recording. Life is the best teacher.
2. Westerners' worship of big eyes and long eyelashes was introduced to China, and Mrs. Yao copied it with a faithful and fluent translation pen. Yao's model beauties are never in danger of falling behind. Step by step, suitable for the needs of the times, is really exquisite, heaven and man induction.
Analysis: A good metaphor is a multi-level similarity.
Translation itself is starting from scratch, and so is having a baby.
Translation is based on the original text, but the translated works are naturally different in different languages. Although children are born according to western aesthetics, the children born must still be oriental faces and oriental races.
A good translation should be faithful and fluent, faithful to the original text and well integrated into its own language. It is not only in line with western aesthetics, but also the beauty of China.
Translation, Haruki Murakami, I am a novelist by profession, and I also talked about the great influence and change of translation on my writing.
The last sentence, a good sense of language, catchy, neat and scattered, patchwork, full of music. Never deformed, beautiful model, step by step, delicate and natural, human induction. There are long sentences in the middle.
The daughter's family is tired and loses money, but the beautiful daughter has never been like this. But it depends on
Analysis: Putting forward a meaning, denying it first, is the arrangement of the author with ulterior motives, creating an ambiguous feeling, which makes the reader confused, specious and interesting.
4, three dynasties back to the door, clank off the green fox coat, wearing mud gold satin short-sleeved cheongsam. Like gardenias in a golden vase. Pale oval face, although single eyelid, eyelid slightly swollen, but it is a pair of beautiful eyes.
Qu Qu is half a head taller than Cheng Cheng, with a plump figure, Fiona Fang's face, a pair of bright rectangular eyes and a little beauty in precision.
Yan Yan pulled her hair back, revealing a pointed face. I don't know if it's rouge on my cheeks, but my sideburns are always red. Wu Nong's smiling eyes, like a flower, splashed under his eyes and condensed into a small dimple.
Miss Yue Ming: Miaomiao is different from Emily. She is a beauty recognized by foreigners in China, because she doesn't succumb to oriental aesthetics or western aesthetics, and she follows the cat's appearance completely. Short round face, pointed chin, dripping almond eyes, Mongolian pleats as deep and beautiful as cat's two eyeliner, thin double eyelids, light eyebrows, Hirayama roots and pointed ears, very energetic. The skin color is dark, but it is flawless and shiny, and it is praised as "black beauty" by Chinese people. She doesn't accept the local flavor of foreign companies and doesn't need an English name, but her real name is "Miaomiao"-the name is just like a cat.
Analysis: The descriptions of looks are different and impressive. Different from old novels. Worth reciting.
On the silvery blue night when the frost is thick and the moon is thin, only one or two shops are lit with strong electric lights, and piles of yellow soap are piled in the crystal glass windows, like a fortress made of gold bricks in fairy tales.
Analysis: the description of the scenery should not be too long, properly sandwiched in the narrative, and adjusted.
Thick frost and thin moon, moon, silver, night, y sound, parallelism, such as pride and judgment, reason and emotion.
6. Qi Kui drank too much wine and was tired. He crossed his fingers and stopped on his shoulders, his chin resting on his back.
As soon as he spoke, the hot air blew under clank's ear, which made him itch a little.
Analysis: Intimate interaction should be detailed enough, preferably concrete actions. It is useless to express and describe without shame. Empty adjectives should be used with caution.
Put your arms around her throat and gently touch her chin.
7. Surprised, busy, angry, loud, laughing, squabbling, laughing, hating the track, softly, laughing,
Analysis: Need to overlay patterns. Don't show the dialogue directly.
8. Xiong tried several times to find a better position for his husband, but his daughter-in-law stopped him in a few words.
Analysis: I don't have a few words to write how to stop it, mainly to prevent the spread of side branches.
Choice is her own choice.
If you have a feeling of spoken English, it will look good if you modify it properly.
He stood up, holding a warm teapot in one hand and a mouth in the other, stroking leisurely, just like a farmer holding a chicken.
Analysis: The metaphor of style contrast is typical. Ontology metaphor is multiple, except for action image, teapot and chicken are warm.
I'm afraid it's not easy to visit fortune-teller.
Appreciation, Shanghai dialect, dialect. Add color to the article, because Mandarin is not enough.
10, Mr. Yao had no choice but to call his daughter and say a few words. He pushed the door and went in, only to find Wang Junye standing outside the window with his hands behind his back. Old newspapers flew all over the floor, and they squatted on the ground to tidy up, with oily apricot rouge on their mouths and cheeks. She wore a single gown of ivory crepe, which stuck to her body like a layer of milk film, with a little rouge on her shoulders.
Appreciation, the eldest daughter wrote in front, went back to the door three times, in the car, the second daughter wrote in the hidden side, and the third daughter reported afterwards, not in the progressive tense.
Ququ walked behind him and scratched his ears with a bright red nail tip.
Qu Qu glanced at the mirror, opened the cupboard and took out a coat.
1 1. Face the mirror with your heart, pick your hair to the front, cover your face in the dark, comb it left and right, but don't talk.
Analysis: Observe the real actions of people in real life at ordinary times and remember them at any time. Don't imitate second-rate works.
12, put down the peach blossom celluloid comb.
Xinxin covered her throat with her hand.
Analysis: Celluloid is a transliteration of plastic, which is consistent with the style of the full text. Conciseness does not mean verbosity.
13, the heart is kicking.
Analysis: Detail description. Kicking one's own feet indicates anxiety, which is the externalization of emotions. Anxiety is an internalized writing style. For example, it is better to describe tension "Adam's apple moving up and down" than "swallowing". Pay more attention to observing people's subtle movements.
14, I feel sick all day and my face is ugly. Unexpectedly, Mr. Yao caught up with her and fell ill first.
Analysis: How to change the scene is a good reference. Very smooth. Heart disease is the foundation.
"(clank) crying with his face in his hands" has a strong sense of picture. Do more editing of people's daily actions and behaviors.
Walking, talking, doing things, body posture.
15, when she woke up, the clank disappeared. She cried a big piece on the mattress, which was as cold as a child drowning and stained the bed.
Analysis: emotional description, suggestion.
Long-distance love, the kissing scene in little reunion hints at the future plot. The future of two people is uncertain.
Mr. Yao is in a bad mood and annoyed, but the child still needs to clean up when he is drowning in bed, so the emotional implication here is that he will support himself to help his daughter solve this problem, which is very wonderful.
16, relatives said, "Come on! Mr Yao will celebrate his 50th anniversary next year, just in time for an Eight Immortals to celebrate his birthday! " But Mr Yao is worried that he can't wait. He thinks he won't live long.
Relatives joked with Mr. Yao with the words "Nongzhang, a tile maker" and called his wife a "tile kiln". "Ours are glazed tiles."
Analysis: echo and contrast.
Echoing the beginning, there is an obvious sense of closure, a contrast between heaven and earth in mentality.