Nature is beautiful, and the world is beautiful.
Maybe you will hate rainy and humid weather. But looking at them with your heart is different.
It's raining outside the window and the room is quiet. At this time, you just need to calm down. Sitting on a cane chair, with spiritual food on your legs, drinking steaming scented tea, the fragrance of scented tea and the freshness of the air outside the window blend into one, and slowly and slowly sneak into your heart. Soft violin music holds your hand and takes you into a beautiful dream. When you wake up, you can put on your coat, put on your umbrella and go for a walk outside. You see, the low houses in the small village are smoking, with lights on and hazy in the drizzle. Smoke, lights and drizzle, trees and grass. Did everything in nature make you friends with them? I think this is what Mr. Zhu Ziqing felt when he wrote Spring Rain!
Of course, it can't rain every day. The sky is clear in Wan Li.
Clear sky is the pride of summer, and the sky in all seasons belongs to it. But you must be worried about the scorching sun in summer. However, as long as you make friends with them.
There are no impurities in the blue sky in summer, only lovely white clouds are dotted. Cicada sings the beauty of summer in the shade.
You can sit quietly by the stream, the tall and lush trees stretch out their arms to shield you from the sun, and the green grass weaves a fluffy and soft blanket for you, as early as spring. Lying on the blanket, you look up at the blue sky, and the stream plays Adeline by the water rhythmically for you. When you are completely intoxicated in the beautiful world, a breeze caresses your face, lifts your long hair and lets it go. At this moment, does the song of freedom ring in my ear > Do you feel that you are a member of this blue sky, dancing with the cloud babies in a cheerful and beautiful group dance? The sun has set. Let's get on our bikes and go home. In the distance, mother sunset is waving to you with a sweet smile in the colorful, beautiful and elegant sunset!
Appreciate the world with your heart. God created them with his heart, how can he be worthy of his old man's kindness?
2. What comments are there to correct the landscape composition? My hometown is in Henan, where the trees are shaded, the air is fresh and the scenery is different in four seasons.
In spring, the tree grows new leaves, which gives birth to new life. The melting river lifted the river and began to flow happily again. The hibernating frog began to play again, singing the cheerful and rhythmic song "Quack ………" … This is the spring when everything recovers.
Summer is a hot season, so my brother and I took swimming rings (actually old tires) to swim on the river bank. The water in the river bank is very clear, and we can see the sand and stones at the bottom. We played until sunset. When I get home, I eat ice cream while watching TV. When the fan is turned on, it keeps pace with the air conditioner.
This is a happy summer.
Autumn is a harvest season, and hardworking people start to work. As for me, I just wanted to find something to do when I heard my grandmother shouting, "Longlong, come on, let's go to the fields to collect vegetables!" " "I happily picked up the basket and grandma came to the vegetable garden. I saw colorful vegetable gardens, sharp peppers, pumpkins in Huang Cancan, beans as long as pigtails ... I happily took the basket and began to collect vegetables.
This is the harvest season.
In winter, it snowed, and the thick snow covered the crops with a white quilt. There was a pile of snow on the ground, and the children began to have snowball fights and make snowmen, having a good time.
This is a snowy winter.
This is my hometown.
3. Seek a landscape composition (with comments). Autumn rain hit them in the face. Piles of dark gray clouds hold the earth low. It's already late autumn, all the trees in the endless forest are bare, and the old trees stand gloomy and brown moss covers its wrinkles. Ruthless autumn stripped them of their beautiful clothes, and they had to wither and stand there bald.
Autumn comes with the sound of fallen leaves, and the morning is fresh as dew. The sky exudes soft light, clear and ethereal, which makes people want to listen to the soaring songs of larks, just like looking at the blue sea and thinking of seeing a white sail. Sunset is the wings of time. When it flies away, it will spread out for a while. So dusk.
The earth put on a golden sweater, and yellow poplar leaves and bright maple leaves fell down, as if several colorful butterflies were flying in the air. Although the frost came, Grandpa Song Qing still wore a green robe and looked greener. Chrysanthemums in the garden are in full bloom, red as fire, pink as chardonnay and white as snow, which is beautiful. All the leaves on the persimmon tree have fallen, but the persimmons in Huang Chengcheng are still hanging on their fingers, like orange lanterns of all sizes, with red begonia pressing the branches.
The language of the article is fresh and lively, and the description can grasp the main characteristics of autumn. Short and pithy, it is worth reading.
The language of the article is easy to understand, and the anthropomorphic language makes the article more vivid and friendly to read.
4. The scene of composition comment in class describes "Come on, come on!" The playground was filled with cheers. It is Class Four (1) and Class Four (2) who are having a tug-of-war nervously.
In the first two games, the two sides drew 1-1. At the beginning of the third game, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them make full efforts like little tigers, holding the rope with both hands, leaning back and kicking their legs hard. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the rope was dragged inch by inch. "Come on, Class 4 (2)! Four (2) classes come on! " Shouts broke out on the playground. Suddenly, I don't know where I came from. Class 4 (2) students, some gritted their teeth, some tightened their faces, some held their breath, all stared round and exhausted their strength. I saw the big rope moving in the direction of Class 4 (2) bit by bit. Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game came to a deadlock. At this time, there was a sound of refueling on the playground. The encouraged students waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically, "Four (2)! One, two, four (2)! One, two! " After about seven or eight seconds of stalemate between the two sides, Qi Xin and Xie Bi, students of Class 4 (2), produced a great force and suddenly pulled the rope, and the red sign suddenly crossed the river boundary. "Class two won! Class two won! " The students sang and danced, and they were very happy.
5. The composition in the fifth grade of primary school is about the scene of rain.
I like the cold of winter, the heat of summer and the coolness of autumn, but I prefer the tenderness of spring and the continuous drizzle of spring. The spring rain came, and I walked on the path, breathing fresh air and touching the breath of spring, feeling particularly comfortable. Light rain, as thin as a needle tip, as light as a cow's hair, as smoke and fog, falls silently and drops on my face and body. The buds on the branches leaned out of their cute little heads and looked at me quietly and smiled. Light rain fell naughtily on them. Ha, what a beautiful beaded dress! The wind doll is so naughty, blowing rain everywhere, falling on the tree, on the grass and on my face. Inadvertently looked up and saw a new green in the distance. That's a tree, that's grass, and that's the messenger of spring. I can't help walking there quickly. Hey, where is the grass? I want to know, why are they missing? A closer look reveals a smile on her lips. The grass is too small, it is light green from a distance, but it is not clear when you look closely. I took a deep breath and was intoxicated. How charming this strange scenery is! Looking up, I saw a layer of aperture on the edge of the cloud, which was the light of the sun. Oh, how strange and wonderful the scenery is! Rain, falling quietly. This spring rain has driven away the traces of winter, made spring more beautiful and made people love spring more. Look! Trees shoot green buds, grass drills out of the ground, and even buildings seem to straighten their backs. What a refreshing experience! In spring, when the first spring rain comes, we don't need to worry about unpleasant things, because when the first spring rain comes, people's hearts have been washed. Isn't it? The first spring rain represents a new beginning. There are all kinds of rains all year round. However, I only loved the first affectionate drizzle that spring. ...
6. How to teach a good composition class? I think the current composition lecture has the following shortcomings: First, the theory is abstract and the terminology is cumbersome. Some teachers downloaded various theories about writing from materials and online, such as "momentum theory" and "ethereal theory", which made students confused. What's more, mechanically tell students the concepts and terms that they don't understand and digest.
Teachers should use their own words to express their understanding when quoting theoretical terms, and try to choose some incisive and vivid examples to help students understand. For example, the teacher talks about "image" and interprets this concept with "scenery in the heart" and "scenery that can convey feelings", which is much simpler than the definition in the textbook.
Second, the example is perfect, so that students stay away from it. The examples chosen by teachers are almost perfect and amazing, and the faces of students often show surprise and envy. Such examples can undoubtedly stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing, thus broadening their knowledge, broadening their horizons and providing typical materials for students' writing, but such examples often make students feel unattainable and unable to follow suit.
For example, a teacher talks about "detailed description", and he quotes many classics, from Fortress Besieged by Qian Zhongshu, Flowers Bloom and Flowers Fall by Lu Xun, to Chekhov's Death of a Civil Servant and Charlotte's Jane Eyre. The classroom has a large capacity, and the wonderful and moving sentences are rich and colorful. The students were fascinated by this pious worship and applauded frequently. After class, I asked the students, "Do you know how to describe the details?" He said: "The teacher did speak beautifully, but I don't understand how these good examples were conceived and written."
Therefore, composition evaluation must be based on students' writing examples. Too perfect examples will make students feel distant and dampen their self-confidence. Third, indoctrination and explanation, students lack the opportunity to participate and think. Writing needs comprehensive ability, and the formation of ability can not be achieved only by knowledge accumulation. Teachers must let students think in practice and improve themselves through participation.
In some composition classes, only the teacher always dominates the podium and controls the right to speak in class. However, many teachers rely too much on lesson plans and online materials when preparing lessons, and rarely read, think and practice. There are few original elements in classroom language and opinions, and teachers are only the memory, transmitter and spokesperson of knowledge. Over time, the writing knowledge taught by teachers in class has become more and more old-fashioned and outdated.
This kind of lecture and evaluation is small in information and single in form. Often just superficial, lack of interest and interest, and low efficiency. Fourth, find fault with students and seriously suppress their enthusiasm for writing. Some teachers insist on this and that in writing, deliberately setting up various obstacles for students' thinking; When summing up students' compositions, they talk about seemingly endless problems and faults exposed in their compositions, and even accuse students of low level and poor ability with a little ridicule; The composition is a shocking red pen comment.
When students see that what they have worked so hard to write is so bad, what else can they have but loss and inferiority? There is no doubt that composition evaluation should point out the existing problems, but it should also provide specific and effective improvement measures and methods. Some problems are hard to recover and need repeated training and persistence to be fundamentally solved, such as the development of thinking, the conception of examining questions, the expression of language, the layout of articles and the skills of writing.
Five, the same old tune, lack of new ideas For a long time, composition teaching in middle schools has no special guidance materials, no clear provisions on what must be taught, no orderly and effective training questions, no excellent compositions that can be directly used for student guidance, and no evaluation criteria for evaluating students' compositions (the only criterion is the examination outline of the college entrance examination). In short, the current composition teaching is arbitrary, subjective and personalized.
Since the implementation of the new curriculum standard, compared with the previous Chinese textbooks, writing guidance is still a "hard bone" and a "fatal weakness". Many teachers learn their writing knowledge from college textbooks, but many new concepts full of the flavor of the times have not been absorbed by front-line teachers in time. Even some teachers don't read as many extracurricular books as students. In short, there are only a few poor writing terms that have been repeated countless times, not to mention that students sound tasteless, and even teachers themselves have already experienced aesthetic fatigue.
A teacher said, "Students' compositions can be improved not by teachers' teaching, but by reading and writing more." Practice has proved that this laissez-faire approach is an important reason for the "less delay" in composition teaching.
I think the following methods can improve students' writing level: 1. Summarize the existing problems in students' work and put forward effective improvement measures. This will not only enable students to understand the grading standards, matters needing attention, and the reasons for mistakes, but also enable them to draw inferences and understand the writing of a class of articles. For example, when reviewing students' compositions, I found that the common problems of students' relationship topic compositions are: I don't understand that the central argument of an article must be the relationship between concepts, or write only one aspect, or write alone, or start a new stove; I don't know what kinds of common logical relationships are; Lack of analytical ability, unable to judge and reason.
Accordingly, in the composition evaluation class, I will focus on training students' ability to judge the relationship between things and explain the reasons, and then ask students to write compositions on such related topics as "action and result", "idolization and self-cultivation" and "center and edge", so that students' argumentative writing ability can be effectively improved from one article to another, from writing to guidance and then to writing. Second, examples to prove ideas should come from textbooks and students' own exercises as much as possible. If you choose extracurricular examples, on the one hand, students will feel strange and need time to understand. On the other hand, because some examples are too old or difficult to connect with ideas, it will bring difficulties to teachers in preparing lessons.
If you choose the examples in the textbook, students can quickly understand and learn to look at the learned text with a new eye. For example, the "face" of the "combination of point and face" in argumentative argument is to take a familiar example word in the form of arrangement, which can not only enhance the momentum of the article, but also show the author's profound knowledge.
7. Write a landscape composition of about 500 words, with comments (comments), paragraphs and full text. Starting from home in the morning and going out to breathe fresh air can bring endless good mood to the day.
My father and I went for a walk in the Martyrs Cemetery. Those ants were the first good friends I visited. They bent down and stared at the round body divided into three sections, working day and night. What are they for? It must be for their families! Provide food for the queen ant and better breed new small ants. If I were a little ant, I would also be busy for my family.
Every stone here is my self-knowledge. I picked up one and tapped it. I heard the infinite echo of time, leaned against a big tree and looked at the sawn tree as if I were a big tree. My blood keeps flowing in the wheel of age, which makes me stronger. My hands turned into branches, and with the help of leaves, they turned green; My feet are like roots, which plunge into the ground and rocks; My head is like a tree crown, growing rapidly under the sunshine; My body has also become the trunk of a tree, providing nourishment for my whole body and supporting that huge body. I seem to have explored the philosophy of life in the depths of nature. Time keeps flowing back and forth in a hurry. How many of my previous 4,000 days and nights were spent in study?
Students, time flies, the sun and the moon fly like a shuttle. We can't idle away our time like this any longer.
We should learn from those male ants and learn from their selfless dedication and unrequited spirit. Their home is equivalent to our motherland, and we should also contribute to the country. Nature, I respect it and love it, so I will protect it.
8. Evaluation of primary school students' writing [Evaluation of primary school students' writing] 1, and the effort will eventually pay off; 2. Persistence is victory; 3, you are a smart boy, as long as you refuel, you can succeed; That metaphor is very subtle, even better than the idea of a clever fox; A layer of dry skin, peeled off, no blood and no meat. Why don't others feel bad when they see it? 6 young people who don't work hard are sad; 7. The topic is marked with ellipsis, vivid and fresh, like a green leaf. Evaluation of primary school students' writing.
Your article is like a withered flower, with no fragrance at all. Think about how to make flowers smell sweet again; 9. The content is specific, but unfortunately there are too few natural paragraphs. Are you afraid of spending money and reluctant to divide more paragraphs? 10, there is a sentence in the composition that I don't understand, just like you told me to breathe with my ears, which makes me feel puzzled.
1 1, some things seem to be made up by you, which is not true, so when I read them, I couldn't help but put a question mark in my heart. 12, your exercise is no longer like boiled water, but now it has a little sweetness. Keep working hard and I will cheer for you! 13, the sentence is not smooth, like my cousin's face is covered with small pimples, reading makes me uncomfortable.
14, the focus is not very prominent, just like a water fight, the water splashed everywhere, but the target of the attack could not be found. 15, when the dragon and phoenix dance, the handwriting flies. Maybe you want to be a cursive calligrapher? 16, there are too many typos, like sesame seeds on sesame cakes. Can we try to photograph the sesame seeds on the sesame cake? 17, the handwriting is very crowded, aren't you afraid of burning? 18, the phenomenon of losing words is serious. I wonder if you often break your umbrella in rainy days? 19, the content is as dry as dead leaves in autumn, how can people be willing to watch it? Read more extracurricular books to ensure that the dead leaves turn green again next spring.
20. There are so many typos as a hornet's nest ... I'm a fourth-grade student. How to use pinyin instead of words that can't be written? Is your dictionary sleeping? 2 1, the content of this article is vivid, and it feels like just eating a piece of fresh milk cake, with endless aftertaste. Pupils wrote "Pupils Write Essays to Comment on Scenery". 22. Actions are rarely written, like branches in autumn, with no leaves.
23. Your sentence is a dead goldfish in a jar, not alive at all. Punctuation is well-behaved, like a smooth floor tile.
25. The handwriting is scrawled like grass on the ground, wobbly and unable to stand straight. Although the article is short, it is very vivid.
Delicate description, strong flavor of life, accurate wording and sentences. At the end of the article, it is revealed that the central sentence is really a clear stroke, and the summary is short and powerful.
The music is beautiful, so is the language of this article. Poetic language and fantastic imagination, how beautiful! The reading of the article is closely related to feelings. Examples describe actions, which touch people's hearts at the beginning and have real feelings.
The structure of the article is concise and reasonable, and the author's understanding of the original text is also very profound and thorough. The full-text language is forceful, hit the floor, exciting and exciting.
Although the language of this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, with rich and true emotions, and it is interesting to read. A large number of spoken English in life is used to make the article more natural and close to the people.
The ending is clear and meaningful. This composition has novel materials, wonderful ideas and lively language.
There is a fresh breath of life and children's interest between the lines. Blessing online articles describe things in the order of development, with fluent language and clear levels, which makes them feel very happy from beginning to end.
The article is full of respect and gratitude from beginning to end, affectionate and touching, which is the shocking force of this article. The tone of the whole article is relaxed and humorous, full of fun, which makes people fondle it.
The author is ingenious in conception, good at choosing points to expand, and his writing is ups and downs, which is intriguing. The language is lively and interesting.
Although the story is ordinary, it is sincere, rich and touching. The end of the article is unconventional, giving people the feeling of wanting to rest.
The examples are vivid and concrete, and the words and deeds of the characters conform to their respective identity characteristics. It can be seen that you are a conscientious person in life.
The article comes from life, so the language is not so beautiful, but it is really interesting and well written. The full text is fluent in language and free and easy in writing, which can be called a relatively successful work.
Composition evaluation: What is failure? Nothing, just a step closer to success; What is success? That is, after all the roads leading to failure, there is only one road left, and that is the road to success. .
9. The scene of the composition review in class describes "Come on, come on!" The playground was filled with cheers. It is Class Four (1) and Class Four (2) who are having a tug-of-war nervously.
In the first two games, the two sides drew 1-1. At the beginning of the third game, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them make full efforts like little tigers, holding the rope with both hands, leaning back and kicking their legs hard. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the rope was dragged inch by inch.
"Come on, Class 4 (2)! Four (2) classes come on! " Shouts broke out on the playground. Suddenly, I don't know where I came from. Class 4 (2) students, some gritted their teeth, some tightened their faces, some held their breath, all stared round and exhausted their strength.
I saw the big rope moving in the direction of Class 4 (2) bit by bit. Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game came to a deadlock. At this time, there was a sound of refueling on the playground.
The encouraged students waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically, "Four (2)! One, two, four (2)! One, two! " After about seven or eight seconds of stalemate between the two sides, Qi Xin and Xie Bi, students of Class 4 (2), produced a great force and suddenly pulled the rope, and the red sign suddenly crossed the river boundary. "Class two won! Class two won! " The students sang and danced, and they were very happy.