-Never home.
Then it is autumn.
Waiting for you to go from enthusiasm to fullness.
From a branch that changed its mind.
Throw yourself into my arms again
Let's open it in autumn.
You don't have to stand out.
Don't compete with them for a season.
Wait quietly,
Leaves turn golden! The road turns golden.
I opened it and it turned yellow.
flower
Comment 1. Reading poetry has become a brain teaser. I want to curse when I watch it late at night! Come on, write a poem like this, which girl will have a crush on you?
Comment 2. : I feel that the whole is incomplete, and the last emotion has not been fully expressed, so I quickly turn to the next emotion. And the expression and language are not as good as before, just like splashing water, putting on airs and littering.
Comment 3: The first paragraph is not bad. There are beautiful girls who take over and describe the scenery to express people's visual sense. The second paragraph seems to be talking about another thing, getting ready to blossom. Why does it bloom?
2. Flowers that don't bloom in spring
-Carmel
It's not just spring
Let the four seasons prevent it from sprouting.
In a despicable way,
Don't ask to be treated gently.
I just hope I don't see the deeper suffering in the world.
transcend time and space
Named after the flower of the soul
Comment 1, wouldn't it be better to delete the last two sentences
Everyone is mortal, why borrow the name of a saint!
I hate such poems, especially the last two sentences.
Comment 2: Staying on the surface of expression seems to be just a perfunctory response to the topic, and I can't see the real heart and the author's self at all times.
Comment 3. Spring doesn't bloom, so it hides in other seasons. This is a good way to express your inner needs.
-Coloured glaze
Children in spring get happiness from contact with this land.
Childhood is rooted in its mind.
It seems that everything has sprouted since then.
From then on, stand on tiptoe to see the world.
High mountains and flowing water.
Regular terraces are quiet and wonderful.
"Come on" a voice like a drop of water into its heart.
Like a long ripple, eager to unfold.
The swaying branch twisted a bud.
The dark village head couldn't resist the joy and lit up the moonlight.
Butterflies wake up and look for memories of the past.
It looks at the waves, and the past is a long-lost fragrance.
Comment 1. This poem, except the sentence: "Let's do it this way", sounds like a drop of water in its heart, with some inexplicable agility. Everything else is dull, or that's what the author wants. But don't say that plain is true. Although the theme revolves around blooming, in the state of writing, the feeling gradually withered.
There seems to be no tortuous or touching story in the background except the dark village head. Does a poem need a story? Not necessarily! Do you need twists and turns? Not necessarily! Does it need to move? That's needed!
Comment 2: In contrast, a long poem is a little fuller than the previous ones. In line with the theme, it writes about the blooming and beauty of spring, but it has a vague feeling. Overall, it's not bad.
Comment 3. Spring is full and poetry is in full bloom. I hope I can realize my dream and live the life I want.
Flowers that don't bloom in spring
-Boring
Don't need light.
Not anymore.
Break into a non-flowering spring
Crawling and fleeing all the way to worship
But died at dawn in winter.
Thousands of bodies are hidden under the snow.
Seems to forgive everything.
In the turbulent spring, I wear biting cold.
Walking barefoot in the frozen deep sea
Passion whirls at your feet.
Put a burning cheek
Buried in soft snow
Beautiful flowers bloom on the chest.
Bloody thorns
Flowers that don't bloom in spring
Wrapped in every leaf
Waiting for the kiss of raindrops.
Give off fragrance
Comment 1. The expression of the first feeling is too blunt. I think it can be concise, and some deliberately decorated branches and leaves can be trimmed to make things quiet. Second, it is still necessary to segment, otherwise the sense of compactness, disorder and emotion will distract the aesthetic feeling of the poem.
For example, the last four sentences are divided into a short paragraph, which is quite aesthetic. Let's go
Comment 2: Emotion exists and is very strong, but it seems that the strength between words and sentences is a bit too strong. Flowers that don't bloom in spring, I like this topic very much. It doesn't necessarily mean spring or flowers. It may be an unattainable person or thing. It can be frustrating. Maybe it's sadness and despair. This may be an impenetrable fog and night. In short, you can write a lot, but stick to it. The beauty of the topic cannot bloom. Did you freeze to death in winter?
Comment 3 From darkness to light, I embrace love and forgiveness in the cold land full of thorns. No one knows how I was traumatized in this world. Around the theme, the description is profound.
Flowers that don't bloom in spring
-sunflower
Sometimes the wind feels close to me.
Just like your breath.
Some warm current permeates every life line.
However, this is not my tender season.
There is endless darkness waiting for me to melt.
My mind froze to frost.
Gather into a river.
A mobile and barren place
Flowers can bloom once a year.
Once every ten years.
Or never see it in a silent world.
Its withering
Comment 1. Spring is not important, flowers are not important, coming or going is not important, darkness and desolation are not important, and this poem does not highlight any key points. It's a little subtle to read, like a slowly blooming flower, blooming alone.
Comment 2: This is a better one for me, no matter in writing, language, expression and emotion. Unlike the previous songs, which went straight to the theme from the beginning, the opening of this song seems to be far from the topic, but the emotion contained in the poem is in line with the theme.
Comment 3: This poem seems to have profound implications. My lover is not full, I am warming everything; Miss you in thousands of ways, you can meet or not.
Comment 1: Realistic poetry is most afraid of narrative without stories.
What the poem of the story fears most is that philosophy exists in the form of preaching.
Of course, any form is just a skin, and the interesting soul is a peerless beauty. This poem written by heart lacks a beautiful skin. Start (a disease)
Comment 2: The opening is very realistic, and I was also delayed by the sandstorm that raged in April. Ha ha ha ha. A poem that is very popular among Miao people. Let's go
Comment 3: This poem can write the reasons why flowers don't bloom, giving people a sense of time and space cycle. Personally think it can be better.
7. Flowers that don't bloom in spring
-Love comes last
night
It's night again
Spring is covered with a layer of yarn.
His hesitant and sensitive nerves.
Everyone is bubbling.
There is a future in the bubble.
There is darkness.
When the wind blows away his dreams.
He muttered to himself.
Comment 1. This poem is written in detail, and subtle expressions can be seen from/yarn/nerves and bubbles. The text is slightly rough. The last sentence, which should be safe all year round, seems a bit vulgar.
After removing it, the reading effect is really better, and there is more room for substitution.
Start (a disease)
Comment 2: The whole feeling is scattered, weak and empty. A few short sentences can't support the whole poem and theme. Well, although the integrity of a poem has nothing to do with its length. Anyway, come on.
Comment 3. It seems that I haven't finished writing, and I haven't felt the unopened flowers yet.
8. Flowers that don't bloom in spring
Smiling eagle
Not all flowers
It is crowded in spring.
The beauty of time blooming
Actually, it's just
Your love, I really want to
Comment. Ruth's poems are philosophical, easy to understand and concise. Many sentences are like philosophical remarks, which are worth pondering.
Comment 2: Although the space is short, it has changed, and the change from scenery to emotion is not particularly abrupt.
Comment 3. Sometimes it's really hard to get the fate that you love me, but flowers are never late, and spring flowers will never come. Although the poem is short, it makes people think deeply.
9. Flowers that don't bloom in spring
Jim
Water drops are dripping from the clouds all over the sky.
Drill into the soil and store the extra sky.
The sun scratched the night on the cracked wound.
Life leans outward and flows to the light.
The branches grow into a poem by themselves.
Every complete bud is a packaged secret.
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Comment 1, I have to say that the first few poems have a strong sense of picture, and the core theme of this poem is not prominent, but the expression of idle clouds and flowing water is worth learning from students who write stiffly.
Comment 2: This poem is great. There seems to be a lively spirit in it.
Comment 3. The description is very beautiful, worthy of being a poem, and the artistic conception is wonderful. After the rain, the buds are on the paper.
10. Flowers that don't bloom in spring
Yanzi
You gave me a seed one day in a certain year.
I buried it in the ground that day.
Slowly sprout, take root and grow.
Several spring and autumn seasons have come and gone in a hurry.
It is still a grass.
A grass that won't bloom.
Grow up quietly
I still expect it to surprise me.
Open a flower
Although as small as moss.
Comment 1: Some grasses can blossom, but this one really can't. This poem, the focus is not on spring, not flowers, but on grass, plus the author's little expectation, so it digresses and is a bit random.
Comment 2. On the whole, the whole poem is peaceful, just like telling a story. It follows its consistent thinking, but the leap of the poem is also its unique aesthetic feeling. Start (a disease)
Comment 3. This poem also directly describes the unopened flower, quietly waiting from the seed, waiting for the flower or him?