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Mudboat
Zhang
Middle age is like a boat stuck in the mud.
No landing, no sailing.
Can't say I love you.
That is considered as dazzling fireworks.
Gone with the Wind
You can't say you love me, can you?
That will make people feel extremely heavy.
It is difficult to take a step forward
Love, not love.
One word
Be labeled countless times.
A sharp cold arrow.
The hope of shooting innocent people.
Don't love, can't help but love.
Empty years
Need to curl up in your arms
And the nothingness of the arm
Like a burning house.
In the burning fire
You looked at me and panicked.
I look at you, I can't get close.
Let the fire destroy the house.
Two people stood in the ruins.
One to the left
One to the right
Brief introduction of poet
Zhang, born in April 2004, 1976, graduated from Shanghai International Studies University with a master's degree in English and American literature. Now he is an associate professor in an ordinary undergraduate college in Wuhan. The poem "Dislocation" was selected in the 79th issue of "Good Poems of China". The poem "Mudboat" was selected as "Good Poetry of the Day" in the 224th issue of China Poetry Network.
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Taking the boat stuck in the mud as a metaphor is a metaphor for the emotional dilemma of middle age. It can be influenced to concretize the virtual object of mud boat. "Can't go ashore, can't sail" is the fate of the mud boat, and it is also the emotional dilemma of middle-aged people. How to pour out such feelings of life in a limited poetic space is also a dilemma. In the poem "Mudboat", the poet skillfully takes the eternal theme of love as the forerunner, and through the positive and negative extension of the theme, takes the amplified concrete and subtle personal feelings as the main line, and finally achieves the effect of virtual realism. The emotional dilemmas in the poem are "love, can't love" and "love without love". The author used montage to write the images of two lovers who could not get close in the burning room. Finally, "two people stood in the ruins/one to the left/one to the right", just like a sad movie story. At the end, the music starts slowly, the characters stop, the lights light up and the audience leaves. Obviously, the emotional dilemma in the poem tends to be between the sexes, but when read as a whole, it does not give people too much downward feeling, which may be due to the clever presentation of the story.
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The title of this poem gives people a feeling of "sinking in". The beginning of the poem is simply straightforward, comparing middle age to a ship stuck in the mud. This is simple and appropriate. A lonely middle-aged man, his feet stuck in the mud and his hands pushing a boat stranded in the mud. When people reach middle age, all kinds of responsibilities come one after another, personal pursuit is squeezed to a minimum, and many dreams are too late to come true, so the realistic role must be played. This is the multiple pressure of "a word is labeled with countless labels" and the heavy burden of "love, not love".
"If you don't love, you can't help loving." Middle-aged people are haggard and struggling. Whether it is "empty years" or "nothingness in their arms", the sense of emptiness of middle-aged people is doubled in their busy running. "I" and "you" in this poem can be understood as middle-aged people suffering from life in the world, and can also be understood as ideal "I" and "I", which are vacillating and unable to compromise. However, the days will go on, and those who are eager for rebirth will eventually take a step forward.
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"comment.
The poem is called the mud boat, and the image characteristics of the mud boat run through the poem. As the saying goes, "after a hundred years of harmony, the boat will cross the bridge when it comes to it." Throughout the ages, the image of the ship is often used to express the relationship between the two. Clay boats are used to describe the relationship between middle-aged couples. Boat refers to the intimate relationship between husband and wife, while mud implies impure, muddy and difficult to distinguish clearly. The relationship between middle-aged couples is like a mud boat. It has been driving for many years, and it is approaching the shore. It has been muddy and contradictory during the driving process.
The first half of the poem focuses on the slow progress and stalemate of the mud boat, and writes the contradiction in middle age. The second half mainly writes that the relationship between husband and wife has gradually become a kind of dependence and companionship from the middle age. The fire destroyed the house, which is a metaphor for the breakdown of husband-wife relationship. Interestingly, these two just let it burn, but they can't save it. The reason is probably the author's understanding of the relationship between middle-aged couples: two independent individuals have their own thoughts and are no longer as violent as when they are in love.
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