Is there any metrical problem with my poem?

= =In fact, there is a problem...

Generally speaking, "two, four, six, and six are distinct", and the oblique and oblique characters of "two, four, six, and three" must be opposite, otherwise the reading will lack phonological beauty. . Moreover, the rhyme and rhyme are not particularly perfect... The rhyme of ancient poetry is not exactly the same as the modern pronunciation. There are many words that sound similar but actually have the wrong rhyme. Another important point is that in quatrains, people are generally very careful not to use repeated words, and words like "bu" should also be avoided as much as possible, except of course for elaborate ideas formed by special use of repetition (a frequently cited example is "Phoenix" "Phoenix Tour on Taiwan" or something...)

There are actually many fixed rhythms in ancient poetry. If you must use them, I suggest you check them out yourself. My knowledge about this is limited, I only know the most basic things, but there are a lot of them circulating on the Internet. Personally, I don’t think these things matter. For most people in modern times, they don’t pay much attention to these things. Even our Chinese teachers say that modern people don’t pay much attention to things like oblique and oblique. It doesn’t matter if you don’t need to be too neat. .

The most important thing is that if you really come up with a good sentence, it doesn’t matter if you throw away all the formatting.

Anyway, please keep up your efforts and don’t give up...Having a love for ancient literature is the most important thing. My personal suggestion is that instead of working on the rhythm, it is better to focus on conception and calligraphy, as well as thoughts and feelings. Improvement and improvement in all aspects, after all, formal things are dispensable, language is more important than form, and ideological aspects are the most important.