I came to the field across the bridge to see the spring scenery. I first tied the covered boat under the willow tree, and I walked from the bridge to the other side with the crutches made of the elders' quinoa.
There are all kinds of trees here. Let's talk about willows first.
The willows have sprouted. Slim leaves hang on the shore and on the river.
It smells of spring. Plum blossoms are delicate and delicate.
It opened a pink bud as jade, and the jade pink flower was fragrant and sweet, which made me completely intoxicated in the sea of flowers. Look at the grass on the ground, it has passed this hibernation, sticking out its wet lulu and green little head from the ground.
I really can't bear to leave fangs on the moss. At this time, the light rain that fell when the apricot blossoms opened in spring wet my clothes, and the gentle breeze blew on my face and I didn't feel cold.
2. Regarding the composition adapted from ancient poems, Li Bai's To Wang Lun is a well-known farewell poem.
The first two sentences are positive narratives, while the last two sentences are things rising, which turn intangible friendship into vivid images, ethereal and memorable, natural and true. "Chinese Curriculum Standard" points out that exercise teaching should "stimulate students' imagination and imagination, and encourage them to write imaginary things. "
This poem provides a foundation for students' free imagination. We might as well instruct students to rewrite this ancient poem into modern literature. Students should imagine the farewell scene between Li Bai and Wang Lun and taste the feelings between the lines of the poet according to the contents of ancient poems and their own life experience. The exercises written by students will be very interesting.
This extracurricular exercise design is suitable for primary school students in grades 5 and 6. Writing process: 1. Enter the realm of poetry and taste reading; 3. Appreciate the soundtrack animation of To Wang Lun, and the teacher tells the legend about this poem.
2. Imagine the experience of 1, "Li Bai will want to travel by boat" (3) Play the animation of "Drinking and Watching the Moon", and the teacher tells it affectionately: Seeing this, Li Bai is full of emotions and thoughts, and a scene of getting along with Wang Lun emerges: drinking-guiding students to imagine their own language, movements and demeanor. The teacher introduced the following situations in the camera for the students to imagine: in Li Bai's eyes, Wang Lun is a witty, studious and enterprising young man with similar interests, and they met late, so they can be said to have forgotten each other; In Wang Lun's eyes, although Li Bai's poems are famous all over the world, he is never arrogant. He is a charming and knowledgeable scholar and an amiable elder.
Appreciating the moon-Li Bai loves the moon very much and has written many wonderful poems about the moon, such as Silent Night Thinking, Moon Wandering in Gulang, Moon Song in Emei Mountain and so on. Students can be guided to apply them to this situation. Wang Lun recited these poems to express his admiration.
Play, play chess, fish, recite poems, climb mountains ... 2. "Suddenly smell the songs on the shore" "However, as long as China keeps our friendship, heaven is still our neighbor." —— Wang Bo "Advise Jun to drink more, and there is no reason to go out to Yangguan in the west."
-Wang Wei "Oh, ask this river running eastward, whether it can go further than the love of friends! ? "-Li Bai" Mochow has no confidant in the road ahead. Who doesn't know Jun in the world? " -Gao Shi's "Liu Yang Dongmen Tree, Qingqing Sandwiching the Royal River". I've been climbing hard recently. I think I've separated. "
-Wang Zhihuan 3, "Peach Blossom Pond is deeper than thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun" was long before I met her, but after we parted, we finally had a parting. Li Bai got on the boat, and the boat drifted away, his eyes blurred with tears. He couldn't help chanting a poem-teachers and students shouted "To Wang Lun" in unison. Third, stimulate expression, rewrite ancient poetry 1, classmates, today, we came to Taohuatan and experienced a deep farewell scene together. Can we still be indifferent? Then let's get a pen and write down this touching scene! 5. Students rewrite ancient poems, and teachers give individual guidance.
Fourth, show the works and exchange comments. 1. Who wants to read his composition to everyone? Teacher's camera comment. 2. After appreciating this classmate's composition, you can talk about what you appreciate most or are most moved, and you can also talk about your personal opinions or suggestions.
3. Teacher's summary: Students, today, we have crossed the boundaries of time and space, talked with the ancients and poets, and gained the nourishment of language, the edification of emotion and the cherish of friendship. Can you tell me how you feel in this class in one sentence? Design comments: I think it is a process of "word-meaning conversion" for students to rewrite ancient poems. Let's try to illustrate this exercise design as an example.
First, the transformation from "speech" to "meaning" as an ancient poem, how to transform "speech" into "meaning" in students' minds? In my opinion, teachers mainly guide students to penetrate the "two layers", that is, the surface layer and the inner layer of language. From the operational point of view, the first is "dialogue", which allows students to make use of their own life experience and knowledge reserves to have a "dialogue" with poets, enrich the "blank" of ancient poetry with imagination and association, and enrich the "meaning" contained in ancient poetry.
The second is "understanding". On the basis of dialogue with poets, guide students to "touch" and "taste" ancient poetry with their own senses. Due to students' deep involvement and emotional input, they entered the "connotation layer" from the "language surface" and thus entered the "artistic conception" of ancient poetry. On the basis of * * * knowledge, * * Ming, on the basis of * * * Ming is the heartbeat together.
Only in this way can ancient poetry be endowed with vivid spirituality, which is the "meaning" in students' minds. In the teaching design of this course, the teacher first leads students to "put on prose to fall in love", and through appreciation, taste and reading, students can "talk" with poets, so as to understand and understand poetry.
Then the teacher leads the students to "put themselves in the shoes and imagine the experience", and by creating the situation, the students can "recite poems and study with the ancients; Reading, reciting poems, and scheming with the ancients "(in Confucius' language), put yourself in the dialogue and communication with poets, and let students enter the situation of" making my heart into Tang's heart and making Tang's heart my heart "through imaginative experience, and reach the realm of Wang Guowei's" seeing things from me and everything is in my color ". Both students and poets have an emotional * * * sound, which leads to the psychological impulse to express their feelings.
Specifically, it is to let students and the author communicate and understand each other in the dialogue scene, stir up the life accumulation accumulated in students' hearts, touch their sensitive and affectionate heartstrings, and make them have the impulse to write, so as to let the torrent of language vent freely. Second, the transformation from "meaning" to "speech" So, how can students transform the "meaning" internalized in their hearts into "speech"? In my opinion, there will be two levels of process here: one is to transform the internalized "meaning" into the students' "oral language".
In oral expression, students can express themselves easily, because the teacher has created some situations, interesting topics, and can also use body language. The second is to transform "oral language" into "written language", that is, students should accurately and finely express the "meaning" formed in their hearts with tangible words.
In the teaching design of this course, the teacher took the students into the zone of "expressing their feelings directly, but they can't stop" and "quitting when they are moved". Ye Shengtao said: "The natural order of composition should be that I know things, I have feelings in my heart, and the waves of feelings are impacting me. When I have the desire to speak, I want to pour it out, so the article was born. "
At this point, the "meaning" in students' minds has reached the position of "be vividly portrayed" and reached the leaf.
3. How to rewrite ancient poems into articles? The ideological content of ancient poetry is basically unchanged, but the form of ancient poetry is changed into vernacular, the structure is changed and the language is reorganized.
Poetry:
Qingpingle country house
Author Xin Qiji, Song Dynasty
The thatched roof of the hut is low and small, and the stream is covered with green grass.
Drunk Wu local drunk, gentle voice, white-haired old man who is it?
The eldest son is weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream, and the second son is busy knitting chicken cages.
My favorite is my youngest son, who is lying in the grass, peeling the lotus just picked.
Rewrite the article:
In the afternoon, I walked slowly with a leisurely mood and accidentally saw a low hut. Behind the hut are green and straight bamboos and rolling mountains, revealing the quiet atmosphere of the countryside. There is a stream beside the hut. The river is clear and transparent, and all the fish in it can be seen clearly. The river looks sparkling in the sunlight.
A breeze blew, causing ripples on the river. There are several beautiful lotus flowers on the stream, some of which are in full bloom; Some are in bud; Everything else seems to be put down. White inside and pink inside, like a shy girl with a veil on her face. There are clumps of green grass beside the stream, which grow very luxuriantly. It is more beautiful and lovely against the backdrop of streams and lotus flowers.
There is an old couple with white hair in front of the hut. They just had a few drinks. From their red faces, we can see that they are all a little drunk. They are together, talking intimately in Wu dialect, and the second son next to them puts in a few words from time to time!
The old couple's eldest son is desperately weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream. How hard he works! The second son is not idle, and is carefully weaving a chicken coop with bamboo and grass, very focused. The youngest son, not yet an adult, knows nothing. He could only lie on the side of the stream and tease the fish naughtily, peeling the lotus while eating and shaking his feet. Really cute!
What a happy family! I was deeply intoxicated, just standing there, unwilling to leave for a long time …
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Override method:
1, change the style: the ideological content of the original is basically unchanged, and most of them just focus on changing the form of the original. For example, ancient poems are rewritten into words, poems are rewritten into narratives, and narratives are rewritten into expository texts; This novel has been adapted into a play.
2. Change the style: change the classical Chinese into vernacular Chinese; Change the structure, change the sequence of flashbacks, and reorganize the material;
3. Change the person: the first person is changed to the third person, and the third person is changed to the first person.
4. Change the sentence pattern: enlarge the sentence. Abbreviations, etc.
References:
Sogou encyclopedia-rewrite
Most of the beautiful West Lake is surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Visiting the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, and the warm spring breeze blew these ancient poems "titled Lin 'an House" into a composition.
Sleepy, how can you remember the lost northern territory and the reduced old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different. Lin 'an Mansion is a political satire poem by Lin Sheng, a poet in the Southern Song Dynasty, and it is also the author's only representative work. This poem is written for the dark reality of the Southern Song Dynasty. It poured out people's indignation and expressed the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
Most of the beautiful West Lake is surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Traveling around the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, the warm spring breeze makes these tourists sleepy, how can they remember the lost northern territory and the degraded old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different.
This is a poem written on the wall of a hotel in Lin 'an. This is a political satire. The appellation of Lin 'an House shows the society at that time. In AD 1 126, the Jin people captured Bianliang, the capital of the Northern Song Dynasty, and captured two emperors, Huizong and Qinzong. The territory of the Central Plains was completely occupied by the Jin people. Zhao Gou fled to the south of the Yangtze River and ascended the throne in Lin 'an, which is known as the Southern Song Dynasty. Instead of accepting the painful lesson of national subjugation in the Northern Song Dynasty, the small court in the Southern Song Dynasty became angry from embarrassment and tried to strengthen itself. The rulers did not want to recover the lost land in the Central Plains, but begged for peace, surrendered to the outside world, and brutally persecuted Yue Fei and other patriots at home. Politically corrupt and incompetent, dignitaries indulge in debauchery and pleasure. This poem is written for this dark reality. It pours out the indignation pent up in the hearts of the broad masses of people, and also expresses the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
5. Rewrite the composition of 400~500 words seen in ancient poetry-rewrite the composition of 1.
Summer dusk, the sun sets, the sky is no longer so dazzling, soft and beautiful. The red sun is like a little girl's red face. Clouds on the horizon are colorful, fiery red, golden and silver gray, just like fairies' silks and satins. Plumes of afterglow sprinkled on the sparkling lake, flashing like a layer of broken gold.
In the field, when you look around, it is green, the ears of rice are bent, and a breeze blows, and they dance happily. On the country road beside the field, small wild flowers are colorful, red, yellow and pink ... very bright. Lush trees can block the scorching sun. The river twists and turns, the river is crystal clear, and groups of small fish are alive and kicking. Smoke billows from the kitchen, and every household is cooking.
A crisp and sweet song came, and it turned out to be a dark and carefree little shepherd boy. He is wearing a straw hat, a red coat and big eyes. He rode on the back of an ox, his muddy little feet swaying at will. The old cow shouted Cleisthenes loudly, as if to accompany the little shepherd boy! A cicada was heard by the little shepherd boy, and his singing came to an abrupt end. He gently pulled the hard rope and the cow stopped. The little shepherd boy looked around with clever eyes, and suddenly a cicada appeared in his sight. The little shepherd boy jumped off the cow's back in surprise, ready to catch cicadas. The poet Yuan Mei saw this interesting scene. When he got home, he picked up a pen and wrote this ancient poem "What he saw and heard":
Cowboys ride on the backs of oxen, and songs echo in the forest. Suddenly want to catch the song of the tree, immediately stop singing and stand by the tree silently.
-what I saw in ancient poetry was rewritten into composition 2
It was a summer evening, the fiery red sun had been hidden behind the mountain, the rosy clouds had dyed the sky red, and the fishermen shook their boats and called it a day.
At this time, a clear and crisp song came from the depths of the forest. How loud it is! I saw a shepherd boy riding an old cow. You see, he is wearing a golden hat, with big black eyes flashing, and his round little face is full of bright smiles. He sat on the cow's back, his little feet were shaking happily, and he looked so lively and lovely. The old cow quietly called "Cleisthenes", as if praising the beautiful singing of the shepherd boy!
When a crisp cicada came from a nearby willow, the shepherd boy was singing happily. Cicada interrupted the beautiful and loud singing of the shepherd boy. He stopped singing and listened carefully.
The shepherd boy's desire to catch cicadas arises spontaneously. He patted the cow and pointed to the cicada in the tree. The bull got the message and approached the cicada carefully and slowly.
Near, near, only one step away from cicada. However, the cicada has not yet felt the danger coming, and still shows its wonderful voice "cicada knows cicada". The shepherd boy stood up slowly from the cow's back and approached the cicada gently with his hand. At that moment, the shepherd boy's hands folded forward, and the cicada creaked and became the shepherd boy's bag.
The shepherd boy jumped down from the cow's back with a swish, revealing a cracked hand, and said with a smile, "Ha ha ha, who let you compete with me in singing?" Now is a disaster! " At this time, cicada, how can you just give up? It kept screaming and struggling in the hands of the shepherd boy, but even so, it didn't help.
The shepherd boy smiled. He jumped on the cow's back and set foot on his way home.
6. The ancient poem "The Shepherd Boy" was rewritten into a 450-word composition. Vilen, lush with green grass, is full of vitality under the sunlight, like a huge emerald carpet stretching into the sky.
On the Yuan Ye, an old cow leisurely tasted the green grass, and the little shepherd boy ran and moved slowly and carefully between Yuan Ye under the temptation of butterfly dance.
In the evening, the sun, which has been active all day, gradually converges its light and becomes gentle, like a red lantern with a soft flame, hanging on the edge of Yuan Ye and the sky. Maybe it was suspended for too long, only to see it sink slowly and stop smoothly as soon as it touched the ground. It seems that with the support of vilen, it once again playfully jumped onto this huge green bed. The endless Yuan Ye was dyed dark green by the sunset. Looking at the sunset on the Yuan Ye, the little shepherd boy was too surprised to blink, for fear that the red lantern would be swept away by a giant hand in the blink of an eye. The little shepherd boy watched with wide eyes. Suddenly, the sunset shivered twice. Finally, like a naughty little rabbit, he quietly got into the grass with a light and agile tapping sound and said "goodbye" to the little shepherd boy.
That night, the wind blew gently again, and the clouds seemed to feel the end of the sunset glow. On the horizon, the slightly reddish clouds also dispersed. Reluctantly, he put on a black veil and walked away.
It's getting dark and the fields are much quieter.
Suddenly, with a light flute, the silent vilen suddenly came alive again. Then, the flute became louder and louder and closer. Following the sound, I saw an old cow walking slowly. It turned out to be a little shepherd boy. I saw him wearing a hat and hemp fiber, sitting on the back of a cow, playing the flute tirelessly, teasing the evening breeze, with a little coolness. The grass on the Yuan Ye seems to understand the flute and dance together in the hazy twilight. The flute went through the Woods, jumped over the Yuan Ye and drifted far away. ...
At the entrance of the village, the white-haired grandfather of the shepherd boy is waiting for his little grandson who lives alone to return from grazing. The appearance of an old man and a young man has added some warmth to the cool vilen and small villages.
The shepherd boy and grandpa are full, and it is completely dark, but there is still a faint light of the moon in the air. The shepherd boy, who had been herding cattle for a day, was already very tired at this time. Like a tired kitten, he snuggled up to the woodpile, took off his hat and hemp fiber, looked up at the moon with his beloved bamboo flute in his hand, missed his kind mother, and fell into a sweet dream country with wonderful reverie. ...
Shepherd boy (Lv Yan)
Lv Yan: Dong Bin.
The grass shop is six or seven miles away from the field, the flute is long and the night wind is three or four.
Come back from a full meal at dusk, and don't take off your hemp fiber.
To annotate ...
① Yokono: Guangyuanye.
2 get: tease.
Hemp fiber: a brown or straw-colored coat used to shelter from wind and rain.
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Green grass, vast Yuan Ye, endless. The flute sounded intermittently in the evening breeze, melodious, as if playing with the evening breeze. The shepherd boy returned from grazing and had a big meal at dusk. He didn't even take off his hemp fiber, so he lay happily on the grass on a moonlit night.
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The poem "1( 16) Pictures of Shepherd Boy's Works of Art" shows us a vivid picture of Shepherd Boy coming home at night. We saw the quiet and leisurely life of the shepherd boy. Through the poem, we also see the author's inner yearning for a happy life away from the noise: the vast Yuan Ye is covered with green grass; The evening breeze is blowing the weeds. I haven't seen the shepherd boy come back yet, but I first heard the melodious and approaching flute of the shepherd boy coming from the wind. The flute sounded intermittently and fluttered with the wind. The shepherd boy came back and had a good meal. It's already after dusk. He didn't even take off his hemp fiber, so he lay in the open field to rest on a moonlit night. It shows the carefree and innocent nature of children. There are scenes, feelings, characters and voices in the poem. This vivid scene appears in our field of vision from far and near.
The word "shop" shows the gentle comfort of the grass and grassland.
The word "Nong" expresses a kind of interest, conveying the melodious flute sound in the wind and the meaning of the shepherd boy playing the flute.
Six or seven miles and three or four sounds here do not refer to definite figures, but to highlight the silence of the vast countryside in Yuan Ye in the evening.
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Expressed the author's inner yearning for a safe and comfortable life.
7. How to write a composition about ancient poetry A few days ago, when the teacher started teaching "Into the Wine", he asked a question: What are the benefits of learning classical poetry? After going home, I thought about it, and a strange idea popped up in my mind: when did I first come into contact with classical poetry? Middle school is not. Neither is primary school. Kindergarten is almost the same! I asked my family as soon as they got off work. My mother told me that soon after I entered kindergarten, my grandfather taught me to read Tang poetry. That night, I thought about the situation at that time. Although my memory is vague, I still vaguely remember that I was holding my grandparents' manuscripts of Tang poetry, and they patiently taught me word by word. I know the bride, Chang 'e, hometown books and ode to wanderers by heart. Later, by chance, I heard my mother read Mulan Ci, which was very interesting. I asked her to teach me many times, but I can't remember. When she was annoyed by me, I finally remembered. At that time, I was only nine years old and learned several times earlier than my peers. I am very happy. My mother often says that I recite poems. The worst thing is that I only remember poems, but I don't understand the author's poems at all. Even now, I still think the author's feelings and the contents of his poems are the most difficult to understand. It turns out that three years old is eighty years old.
Being exposed to poetry since childhood has made me understand their benefits more thoroughly. They are like a paintbrush, waiting to paint for us, so that we can add a strong cultural atmosphere of China; They are sometimes like a gorgeous dress. When we put it on, it's like putting on an elegant coat with a long history of China. They are more like a pen full of ink. Whenever we quote them when writing an article, people feel that there is a little more ink in their stomachs. These long-standing poems and songs all have brilliant colors. We should study hard, inherit these treasures and make them last forever.