"Ding Ling-",the bell rings for the morning reading class, but the teacher is late for class. As The monitor on duty, I looked anxiously in the direction where the teacher came.
suddenly, there was a "cluck-cluck" hurried footsteps in the corridor, followed by a loud "report!" When I looked back, it turned out to be Zhang Qing, a neighbor of the Chinese teacher. I saw her face flushed and she said breathlessly, "Oh, no, the Chinese teacher-she is ill-can't come to class." I listened, and my heart was like a mess. What can I do? The classmates also talked with each other, and the class was "boiling".
My brain is racing: "What should I do now that the teacher is away? I'm The monitor on duty today, and I should take care of the class. Now ... Yes, that's it! " So, I cleared my throat, quickly stepped onto the platform and said loudly, "Now please be quiet!" " Everyone stopped talking at once, and 55 pairs of eyes in the class looked at me uniformly. I stood on the platform like a little teacher and directed everyone. "Xiaofen, you read it!" "What's the lesson?" "lesson 17." As a result, the students began to read early loudly, and suddenly, the sound of books in the classroom was loud and clear.
although the class has settled down temporarily, I am still extremely anxious. Because after the morning reading class, it is the morning exercise class. Without a teacher to lead the team, I am afraid that the students will be confused. It's almost time, and I'm so anxious that I stamp my feet. Why hasn't the teacher come yet? When the bell rang, I had to bite the bullet and say to everyone, "Classmates, the teacher didn't come today. I will lead the morning exercise class. I hope everyone can do this class well in an orderly way." "Yes!" The students answered in unison. In spite of this, I still can't worry about it, for fear that something will go wrong. But my worry is unnecessary-the students are disciplined, the team is neat, and the actions are consistent, which is even better than when the teacher is here! A stone in my heart finally fell to the ground.
when I took the team back to the classroom, I found that the teacher was already waiting for us. There was a gratified smile on the teacher's face, and I was happy from the bottom of my heart.
Wonderful click
① The deduction is accurate, and the time range is "when the teacher is away".
② Clear and coherent, clearly describing that I boldly and properly handled two things when the teacher was away-morning reading and morning exercises.
③ The narrative is proper, and the psychological activities and events of the characters are true and natural.
determine the number of composition topics
and specify the number of selected materials. You must pay attention to the topic when reviewing it, and you can't choose the topic beyond the scope. Too many materials are selected, not only failing, but making mistakes.
Wonderful exercise
One thing that happened after the exam
After the mid-term exam, Mr. Meng asked Li Haixia, the squadron leader, and I to grade math papers in the office. Dig out your own papers, go on with the standard answers, and finally get a total score of one plus 98 points. My heart is full of sweetness. But when I think about it, I will correct my own papers, and others will definitely say this and that when they know it. So, I asked Li Haixia to review it for me. Li Haixia read it again and said, "Yes, it is 98 points. It seems that you are the first in your class. It's really not easy! " I said, "I haven't finished approving it yet. Maybe there is a better answer than me!" " But I was secretly happy in my heart. Well, if it weren't for the first place, how could I be a representative of this math class?
while humming a song, I continued to correct it. Suddenly, I found a paper with a score of 99. Look at the name, it's Li Shihua, the representative of Chinese class! I really don't believe my eyes-Li Shihua Chinese is better than me, but math is not as good as me every time. How did it climb on my head this time? I stare big eyes, facing the standard answer, and check the questions one by one again, even without letting go of a decimal point. But I really can't find a place to deduct points. I thought to myself: a math class representative, who usually ranks first in the class, failed the Chinese class representative this time, which is too embarrassing. What will teachers and classmates think of me in the future? Thought of here, my heart crossed, I deducted 2 points from an answer and changed Li Shihua's total score to 97 points. I thought to myself, just don't let you surpass me!
after this, somehow, my heart was always uneasy, my face was feverish, my head was sweating, and my hand holding the pen trembled. Li Haixia is still absorbed in correcting. I leaned over and saw that she had typed a bright red "x" on a scribbled number. I said, "You are too strict. This figure is correct, but it is not clearly written." I said, and opened the paper. It turned out to be Li Haixia's.
At this moment, I felt my face burned even more, and I dared not look Li Haixia in the eye for fear that she would find me in a mess. I quickly turned out Li Shihua's paper and changed the score from 97 to 99. Then I breathed a sigh of relief, and the stone on my heart finally fell to the ground ...
Wonderful click
① The title of this composition stipulated that "one thing" should be written after the exam, so the author only chose one thing to write.
② The story is vividly written, which is enough to reflect the author's psychological process from "vanity" to "vanity", and the language expression is true and vivid.
Determine the scope of person
Some essay topics are defined for the writer. When examining the topic, you should determine the scope of person according to the requirements, and make it clear whether you are writing yourself or others. If you want to use the first person, you must never use the second person or the third person.
Wonderful exercise
My deskmate
"Bad luck, bad luck!" At the beginning of the new semester, the head teacher transferred a boy with poor learning to my side and sat at my desk. I was really angry at that time, because he knew nothing, so I hated him and wanted to stay away from him all the time.
His name is Mao Hongwei. He has a round head and a round brain and looks silly. Every morning when I come to school, this "nuisance" is already in my seat. When he saw me coming, he said with a smile, "Wu Yao, you're here!" However, I am ungrateful and always give him a hard look. Many times, I threw the waste paper after wiping the ink into his desk. He never said anything, but simply smiled at me and threw the waste paper into the dustbin. So, I pretended that I couldn't see the words written by the teacher on the blackboard, so I stood up and deliberately squeezed towards him. I often squeezed him to the ground and broke his ass. But he still smiled carelessly and got up from the ground.
Last Wednesday, at the end of the third class, a classmate asked me to explain a question to him. When I finished the topic and walked to my seat, the teacher was already handing out homework books. There are two books, one good and one bad, on our desk, and Mao Hongwei is sitting in the seat. I wanted to run over and grab the good book, but I was afraid my classmates would laugh at me, so I had to admit that I was unlucky, thinking that a pain in the ass like him would definitely grab the good book. But the situation is just the opposite. Mao Hongwei's move surprised me. He did not hesitate to take the "rotten" book with a big tear and write his name in the past, and put the intact book on my desk. What an amazing move! His behavior made me ashamed and my heart pounded. You know, this is not a simple action, it contains a sincere feeling and embodies a noble quality.
My deskmate, he really impressed me! Compared with him, I look so small. Although he can't get ideal grades on the examination paper and publish excellent articles in the composition selection, I can see from his behavior that he has a shining heart.
Click
① "I am me, he is him" in the text, and the person usage is accurate, which meets the requirements of the title.
② use the contrast between "I" and "He" to highlight the selfishness of "I" and the preciousness of "He". Very infectious and persuasive.
determining the scope of the premises
some topics specify the scope of the premises. This requires us to grasp the place where things happen in accordance with the requirements of the title, and not to take what should happen on the playground out into the wild.
Wonderful exercise
Singing and dancing party in the kitchen
One night, I was sleeping in bed. Suddenly, the sound of "Ding Dong Ding Dong" in the kitchen woke me up. I got dressed, quietly came to the kitchen door and opened the door a little. Through the crack of the door, I saw a big song and dance party with pots, chopsticks, spoons and bowls. Unexpectedly, the director was Mr. Pot, and even more unexpectedly, the table became the stage for this grand party.
"Now, the party officially begins," said Miss Spoon, the host. "First of all, Miss Chopsticks and Mr. Bowl will perform a dance-tango dance." That couple really danced very well. They held their heads high and held their chests high, and they danced really well, which won applause from the audience.
Miss Spoon came to the stage, made a beautiful appearance, and said, "Next, please ask Mr. Cup to tell you a story." Mr. Cup speaks vividly and deserves to be called "the king of stories".
"Next, the cooking performance of Mr. Pot and Little Shovel!" The host said. Pots and shovels are the best cooking brothers and sisters. They cooked braised pork and green vegetables for the audience to taste. After tasting the perfect dishes, the host said, "Let's break up in the song!" "
at this time, the night is already deep, and I should go back to sleep. I didn't expect that the elves in the kitchen were so versatile.
Wonderful click
① This is an anthropomorphic fairy tale with strong interest. It can be seen that "dreams" can also become compositions!
② The author inspires imagination and delights the soul through fairy tales. Good!
③ "premises" are centralized and reasonable. "Kitchen" is the theater, and "pots, bowls and spoons" are the actors; It is most suitable for these "actors" to act in the kitchen.
determine the "title eye"
"title eye" is the key word in the composition title, which is the core of the meaning of the composition title and the focus of the specific content to be reflected in the composition.
We should grasp the key points when studying and doing things. When this principle is applied to composition, we should grasp the key point of "problem-solving".
Wonderful exercise
An interesting story
Every Spring Festival, my father has to bite his teeth and go to the barber shop to be "generous". This year's Spring Festival is coming, and my mother bought a full set of hairdressing appliances in anger, ready to "self-reliance".
Dad came back, and my mother echo each other and I treated him "both hard and soft": from the expensive haircut outside, we talked about the importance of saving every penny for the family's economic take-off. With a golden tongue, we finally defeated dad. My mother and I pushed him into the chair, and my father looked up and sighed, "Well, throw caution to the wind!" " There is quite a heroic spirit of going to the disaster.
with the click of mom's scissors, dad's hair was cut round and round. At this time, my mother said, "You are behind your back. It's too out of fashion. Change your bias!" " "ok!" Dad agreed. After a while, my mother said to herself, "Why not change to' inch plate'?" Dad looked helpless and said with a wry smile, "It doesn't matter, it's just a bald gourd ladle!" "
"it's finished!" Mother shouted. When I look at dad's head shape, poof! The water I just drank in my mouth sprayed out, and I squatted on the ground and laughed out of breath. Dad's head is like a piece of watermelon skin, and it's crooked. Dad looked in the mirror and fondled the pitiful hair with great treasure. He jokingly said, "Now, let me lead the new hairstyle." Mother muttered, "It's just that the scissors don't work well, and besides, it's not the same as shearing wool." Holding back my laughter, I hurried to make an appearance: "All right, the business is successful, the first customer is free ..."
Wonderful click
① The exercise was written about a very common thing-my mother cut my father's hair, but it showed the happy atmosphere of a harmonious family.
② "fun" is manifested in: Dad's spirit of "going to the disaster bravely", his helplessness to baldness and his simple and humorous language. These are all derived from the careful observation of daily life by the little author.
③ From this article, we can understand that as long as we carefully observe and understand, we can extract interesting things from many ordinary things in daily life.
determining the meaning of metaphor
Metaphor, that is, analogy, is a commonly used rhetorical method. This rhetorical method is helpful to illustrate the problem vividly. Many of the essay questions we usually see use this rhetorical method. Therefore, it is very important to understand the metaphorical meaning of the title. For example, the title "unforgettable scene", in which "scene" should refer to the performance on the stage. But it is metaphorical and can be used to illustrate a glimpse, a shot, a scene and so on in life. Therefore, before writing a composition, we must first determine its figurative meaning to increase the connotation of the article.
wonderful exercise
unforgettable scene
that was last year. At noon on a Sunday, my grandmother took me to the street to play. When I came home, we waited for the bus at the bus stop on Renmin South Road.
with a bang, an uncle spat. Thick sputum silk hung on the flower bed by the roadside, which made everyone feel very uncomfortable. At this moment, an old woman on duty came along. She said, "Young man, you have violated the regulations of city sanitation management. Please clean up your spit and fine 5 yuan." The uncle tilted his neck and said, "Who spit? Did you see me spit? " Grandma patiently said, "Everyone saw it!" The uncle refused to admit it and quarreled with his grandmother. Suddenly, the noise stopped. I followed everyone's eyes and saw a little boy carefully wiping the sputum with a piece of paper. He is about four or five years old, with a red face, wearing a grass-green military uniform and a toy pistol pinned to his waist. People are stunned. After cleaning, the little boy crossed the slow lane and threw the paper into the garbage bin. Then, he went up to her and said slowly, "Grandma, I have no money. Can I give you this gun?" Grandma stroked his head and said, "Good boy, you didn't spit. Why do you want your toy gun?" The little boy said, "My father spat, and I paid for him."
The uncle's face turned red with a brush. He hurriedly took out five yuan from his suit pocket, stuffed it into the grandmother's hand, turned around and dragged the little boy away in a hurry, and disappeared into the crowd ...
Wonderful click
① This "scene" reflected by the little author in his composition is a real scene in real life, and it is an irritating thing that happened on a specific occasion.
(2) In this "scene", a scene of "father-son confrontation" is reflected-the vulgar father is ashamed in front of children with childlike innocence, compact and vivid, which reveals the problems and makes this "scene" rich and valuable.
2. Material composition
What we talked about above is the examination of proposition composition, and I hope children can grasp it well. Here, let's briefly talk about the examination of material composition. There are two main aspects in the examination of material composition. I sum them up in two ways.
1) "inseparable" method
This method requires that the center of the exercise and the ideological content of the material be "inseparable". For example, to rewrite, expand, abbreviate, supplement, continue and imitate a narrative, we must understand the six elements of time, place, people, events, causes and consequences, as well as the central idea of the material. Only in this way can we write a good one.