Talking about writing old-style poems, we should also start from the 20 17 Wangjiang Forum. At that time, Mr. Zheng's office had written poems in Wangjiang Forum. He told me something, so I also registered to join the forum. The moderators of poetry in the forum, such as hanging pot and grassroots, are very enthusiastic. Whenever novices release exercises, they will point out the problems in the rules and regulations and encourage them. Judging from the earliest works preserved in the forum, it is "Reflections on Rebuilding Leiyang Academy (New Rhyme)" written by June 1 1 and 2065438. This is also the starting point for me to write old-style poems.
Later, I had some exercises and wanted to find an expert. So seven poems were published in Song of the Thunder Pool. That's because colleague Mr. Liu Xinxuan asked his father-in-law Mr. Tan Zhong to correct it. Later, it was posted directly in Song of the Thunder Pool. Maybe Tan has always wanted to encourage the younger generation. I also noticed that he also made some small changes for me. And record as follows:
There are:
See the new rhyme in the middle?
The pool in Kowloon is full of water, fish are jumping and kites are flying day by day. The sky closes its eyes, and Teng Jiao rises from the phoenix to depend on you.
There is also a poem by Mr. Shen in the Time column, which is temporarily recorded here, indicating that not all the poems in Song of the Thunder Pool are "retired cadres", and everyone with a discerning eye will know:
Foundation laying of Wangdong Yangtze River Bridge
Clouds are full of thunder pools, water is full of rivers, but clouds fly and water goes without borders. Tao Qian can't sleep worrying about the wind and waves, and Bao Zhao is sighing. The sea is full of vitality, and ichthyosaurs dream of neon. The clear smoke wafted from the trees in the distance, and the sound of the waves was fragrant.
Jiangshan Range Rover owns:
Journey to the West
Castle Peak winds to the west, and the stone carvings in She Yan are amazing. The secretariat archway is an official rank, and buildings in Ming and Qing dynasties are rare.
There are:
Cowherd in the rain
It's foggy and rainy, so farmers can't be idle in growing rice. Elves and imps help with housework, and they like bullfighting and climbing trees best.
Four poems about things and feelings:
Liu Xin
Suddenly I saw willow goose yellow on the roadside, bathing in spring and wearing brocade. Dance, reminisce about youth, rekindle dreams and pursue spring scenery.
Cinnamomum camphora
A gust of wind leaves floating, tirelessly secretly metabolized. Cherry blossoms only laugh in the spring breeze, and green leaves are only beautiful in the four seasons.
Ode to the flower of smile
A tree is full of silver flowers, and the wind is cold in Leng Xiang. Don't say decadent, don't give up, birds are singing everywhere in spring.
Purple leaf Li Song (new rhyme)
A crescent moon contains a yellow halo, and several lone stars shine. Purple leaf plum stayed in the lonely field and was indifferent to her hometown all her life. You can't complain because your heart is warm and fragrant. It is common to be with you when it is cold in summer and to work hard.
I keep this group of poems because it contains some of my life feelings. The first is the feeling of being a teacher. Ba Jin said that our mind needs to develop and blossom, otherwise it will dry up. In life, everyone's occupation, after a long time, will have their own feelings. We have been teaching all our lives and know ourselves well. Although agriculture, medicine and teachers were all unpopular majors at the beginning, the profession of teachers was particularly calm and indifferent. Like Yan Hui, he was miserable and never changed back. But teaching and educating people for a long time naturally has its own unique experience and feelings, and has its own fun. These self-knowledge joys and sorrows are exactly what the poem "Singing Purple Leaves and Plums" wants to pin, that is, the so-called "only the heart is warm and fragrant, and you can't blame God." Most of the "four-character poems" have entrusted this emotion.
Childhood is worth remembering, because even poverty is happy and interesting. This is a cow in the rain. I think I have a special fate with Wang Zhong. As a Wang Zhong, I naturally feel like a Wang Zhong. The first sentence of "Looking at the New Rhyme" describes the profound connotation in the middle, the second sentence describes the change and development (these two years are "growing day by day"), and the third sentence is a transitive sentence, which not only inherits the above, but also describes the beautiful picture brought by development, and also places more hopes on the later display, because development is forever. ...
To do one thing, you must be interested first, and then you must have courage. The same is true of writing poetry. I remember that China organized a trip to the West, and Mr. Zheng and I both wrote two old-fashioned poems, which were quoted in my book "Spring Breeze Passing to the West"-I felt that his writing style was good. Speaking of courage, I also want to mention taking part in a poetry contest. I just started learning to write, and actually contributed to the competition. Xiangxian Lu, a senior judge of the Modern Poetry Competition, actually selected my poem "House Price" from four or five thousand submissions as one of the 300 works approved by the initial evaluation. I think it may be that my poem only writes about the housing price that everyone is most concerned about from the content, which has certain practical significance. Attached poem "House Price":
When house prices rose, people everywhere complained all over the sky. Accumulated half a lifetime of pure blood and sweat, two waves rise from Sichuan.
By the way, I also want to introduce two other poems:
selling vegetables
Sorting out miscellaneous vegetables along the road is too busy to answer.
Weigh the years by weight, and weigh three meals for all.
A trip to Meiling Palace
Always because of the liberation of reputation, the beautiful image is calmly handed over to dignitaries.
Why don't people stay in a castle and let them read lonely articles one after another?
There are one or two sentences in Selling Vegetables that describe the traditional scene of selling vegetables, which is the basis of emotional growth later. This scene is commonplace, but what makes people feel is that this is not only a side dish in their hands, but also the life of these vegetable sellers. Perhaps in the eyes of some people, their life is as trivial as a side dish, but even great people can live without their vegetables for three meals a day. And then what? Therefore, it is said that "the suppression of three meals concerns the whole people", and the word "suppression" shows its importance! Every ordinary job of ours is like this, and selling vegetables can also express our grassroots feelings!
In addition to grassroots, I also turned my attention to important people in history. Whether I visit the beauty salon in Lushan Mountain or Meiling Palace in Nanjing, I have a feeling: Why did the first lady's mansion of the Kuomintang survive despite the defeat of the Kuomintang in Taiwan Province Province? Apart from the intention of the producers, it also shows that these historical sites have unique preservation value. Both buildings are named after "Meiling", which also reflects Song Meiling's personality charm! It is said that Roosevelt was her good friend. The beauty in history is famous not only for their looks, but also for their important role in history and unique political role. Most of the four beauties are Shi, Shen Dawei and Wang Zhaojun! So I said that "fame always spreads because of difficulties", and the struggle with whom in the "Xi incident" should be a highlight in her life, which makes people want to see the scene of "beautiful image calmly facing the powerful". The people of Sri Lanka are gone, and the castle will last forever! Every day, tourists come one after another to taste Song Meiling's "lonely story" and her endless beauty!
Joining various poetry WeChat groups and contributing micro-journals is an exchange and an improvement. The poetry groups I participated in mainly include the voice group of Deng's disciple Liang's poems, Wangjiang's poetry friends group, poetry anthology group and poetry anthology group, among which the teacher played a certain role. The members of the Voice of Poetry Group come from all over the country, mainly from the northwest. The members of Wangjiang Poetry Friends Group are mainly poetry lovers in this county, including retired county leaders and leaders of various bureaus, as well as retired teachers and workers in various industries, including leaders of the Cultural Bureau. The poetry collection is organized by a teacher who teaches poetry in a university in Beijing, and the backbone personnel in it have a certain level. The essence of poetry is even more important. What rhymes, squeezes, bumps and rhymes are used in the Ten Commandments, and what rhymes prohibit crossing hands and cutting heads. Although there is some truth, it is too restrictive after all, which is not convenient for people to express their feelings and even damages the content for the sake of form. At that time, I found some poems by famous people and even deputy editors (some of them are employed by colleges and universities) in this group, pointing out that they sometimes have taboos, forcing Wu Beizi, deputy editor (), to publish the following "Ode to Sima Xiangru" in this micro-journal:
Many poems have been published in Selected Poems and Purple Stone Yueyun. For example, I wrote a classic long poem and recited the Bible in our school, as well as Spring Day, Night of Repetition Class, Opening of the Civil Air Defense Park in Huangjunshan, Frog Rang, Expressing My Sense of Age, etc ... Later, I was afraid that it would affect the teaching.
The reason for writing old-style poems is that there is appreciation of classical poems in Chinese teaching in senior high schools, which is a key and difficult point in the college entrance examination. The ancients said that it is better to know the mountains and have tigers than to walk on them. Wang Anshi also said that the wonders of the world are often far away, but people are rare. I write old-style poems with a sense of victory, but also to overcome the common fault of being too arrogant. It is also because of this that I take students to write old-style poems and want to solve the problem of appreciation of ancient poems. Because The Poet's Language has special grammar, such as the dislocation of words, flexible use of parts of speech, intertextuality and so on, especially the dislocation of words, which is sometimes meaningless from the perspective of modern Chinese grammar. It is this kind of rhythmic beauty that classical poetry pursues.
Guiding students to write old-style poems is also largely promoted by Jiang Sheng, a Chinese teaching and research researcher. Because he wanted to organize students' works to participate in the competition, he followed me and asked students to write poems. In fact, students' writing of old-style poems largely depends on the teacher's revision. Students determine a theme according to their own life or interests, write a draft, and then the teacher considers the revised rules and language, how to upgrade and write a little artistic conception! This aspect is very tiring work for me, but it is also an exercise. The knowledge of classical poetry appreciation has been consolidated and applied here. Choosing words and making sentences, tempering words and various expression techniques can make us realize the hard work and fun of creation. In 20 18, two classes I taught published 89 poems, and later won prizes in various competitions or published them in some journals. These students' exercises are recorded as follows:
Yongmei-Shen Xuan
If the dark clouds cover the top, the future snow will be full of meaning. I am angry in the cold winter, and I hope to stay in the dark and fragrant night.
Twilight? —— Yang Jing
As the sun sets, the breeze winds around your fingers, and the molten gold is always returned. The roadside hibiscus is carmine, whispering that the bell is far away and near.
Sunset? Xujiahui
Leaning against the railing, I hope the twilight will shine and the vines of the old tree will break. A few wisps of emotion bring dreams, and the autumn wind sends the old man back.
A party? -Fang Jingjing
June by the window is beautiful, and students get together in August and September. Sweet and sour * * * three years, friendship is comparable to Sanjiang.
Vacation-Sun Jingjing
As soon as the bell rang, everyone was happy and the school was full of traffic. There are picturesque green hills outside the window, and birds are dancing.
Looking for poetry? -Guo
Sitting quietly in the book porch, thousands of lights. Looking for poetry pushes people to look at distant stars.
Wang, a chant for Lingling.
Bajiao Temple has a thousand cups of wine, and a small fire shakes the wall three times.
There is no limit to talking to yourself. If you avoid snakes and hate them, it will be difficult to sell them.
Ode to Wu Changshi-Wang
It is said that there are three unique things, and there are very few people who are embarrassed.
Long history books are claws, and anger tears floating colors and cracks dust.
Chibi-Yu Chengxing
Under the chain of the great river, Liu Wu jointly captured this room. With the help of the atmosphere help Yu Liang, Qi Wang is also played by Qiong Huan.
"Looking at the tide? Wangjiang (published in the name of Yu Chengxing, it is really a poor work, mainly to get familiar with the rhythm of poetry)
? In ancient times, it was called Leishu, and today it is passed down to three filial piety. The name of Leichi is widely known. Beautiful scenery, magnolia, etiquette, reading. Grow high-quality cotton. Wuchang produces big crabs and giant shrimps. Be polite to guests, and count the berths of whitebait. ?
? The thunder and water in Mingshan Mountain are crystal clear, beautiful and full of legend, which has been praised by generations. Qu Gong, noble honor, bright stars. I caught the bus today. The bridge connects the north and the south, and merchants settle down. Make the park industry bigger and have a bright future. ?
Attention:? (1) Wangjiang, during the Jin Dynasty, set up a big thunder garrison (2) Qu qū Xinling, about Zhenyuan before and after his death. In the first year of Zhenyuan (AD 785), he was a scholar. As the county magistrate of Wangjiang County in Zhou Shu, he has a good policy. (3) the crane pickaxe, refers to Shen He pickaxe, kangxi Jinshi. ? Ren Lun, a native of Wangjiang, was a scholar in the 19th year of Yongle in Ming Dynasty. ? Wang Rui was born in Wangjiang, Anhui Province. Ming Xianzong Chenghua five years Jinshi, official worship official department. (4) Bridge, counting on the East Yangtze River Bridge, the first bridge on the upper reaches of the 800-mile Wanjiang River, opened to traffic at the end of 20 16.
Yu Chengxing's Red Cliff is an embedded poem, and it is his creativity to embed my name in the poem.
(By the way, I also instructed Yu Xu to publish three new poems, "Thunder Pool". Yu Xu won the first place in liberal arts with a score of more than 6 10 in the 20 18 college entrance examination, and his single subject score was above 1 15. )
The most unexpected thing is that two small poems by He Guo won the bronze prize in the global poetry contest jointly organized by Luzhou Municipal Government and Poetry Journal of Chinese Writers Association, with a prize of 5,000 yuan each, two bottles from LU ZHOU LAO JIAO CO.,LTD Co., Ltd. and a trophy certificate each. (See "China Poetry Network 20 19-09-05" for details. )
There is also a little word to guide Xie Wanyu, a senior one student at that time, who won the third prize of the county in the first half of 20 19:
well
Smoking in the mouth, yellow teeth glaring for a long time. I want to ask smokers to stop smoking. Return to the road, return to the road, and remember the suffering of people around you. (? /kloc-Xie Wanyu of class 0/03? )
19 18 The works of the second modern poetry competition I participated in were included in the Collection of Excellent Works of Modern Poetry Competition, and there were comments from the judges.
Chinese New Year (the feeling of empty nesters)
The firecrackers are full of annual flavor, and they will return to the lively door in a few days. My widowed mother is in her seventies, busy with rice, and a pot of bitter water is boiled at dusk.
Luo Yunfeng commented that a few days of excitement set off a year of loneliness, and it was embarrassing to have a pot of bitterness and a pot of music. The "lively doors" are slightly together.
In 20 19, I also participated in the third modern poetry contest, and one of my words is a freehand brushwork, Partridge Sky? At present, "Qingming Festival" has entered the final evaluation by the judges, and there are comments from the judges-the judges selected 300 anonymous words, which were divided into 7 grades, and the scores were 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6 and 7 in turn, and the judges wrote comments for works with 6 or 7 points. (See the note in Figure 26 below)
Although I feel that my old-school poetry writing level has improved in communication and competition activities, I see my own shortcomings more. Seeing that there are mountains outside the mountain, climbing the "mountain" requires endurance and tests our feet. Let me extract two poems worth learning:
Bodhisattva is full of hometown
Everyone says that hometown is good, and no one wants to be old. Counting from west to east, 10 rooms are 90% empty.
The water in the pond in front of the door once reflected the beauty at that time. I came back today, and Bai Yutang left.
Qing ping le Lao Wu
Qingsiwuwa, silent in the oblique light. The antique stars are released today, and the past is sealed.
Cages are used to catch shrimps, and baskets are decorated with haze. A dragonfly in the corner flew over the branch.
? By the way, an old-fashioned poem "A frog in a quiet night" was used in the essay "A frog in a quiet night" published by Anqing writers. In fact, the prose "The Frog in the Quiet Night" is an expanded version of the poem "The Frog in the Quiet Night" in a sense. That's why I write poetry when I don't have time to write prose. After all, an essay usually needs more than a thousand words, while a poem only needs four or eight sentences.
Qu Zi said, "Everyone has his own happiness." ? Life and work also need adjustment. For me, this is also a temporary interest! What's more, it is related to Chinese teaching! It can even be said that this is part of Chinese teaching!
2020. 1.9 lunar calendar 2065438+twelfth lunar month 15, 2009
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