On the night when the village road was opened, I followed my grandmother to the road that once left a painful memory for our family, only to find that the street lamps on both sides of the newly-built road were on. The sidewalk paved with colored floor tiles looks particularly beautiful under the illumination of light. Under the bright street lamp, a paved asphalt road stretches into the distance.
Grandma kept saying, "The road is finally repaired, the road is finally repaired …" When I looked up, I saw two lines of tears rolling down my grandmother's face. I know grandma is thinking about grandpa again. More than once, I heard my grandmother talk about the past 20 years ago. Grandma cries every time she talks about it. It was a dark rainy night twenty years ago. Grandpa suddenly became seriously ill. At that time, the only modern means of transportation in the village was tractors, and the road leading to the city was a bumpy dirt road. On a sunny day, the road is full of mud and it is raining heavily. When people drove their tractors to take their seriously ill grandfather to the hospital, it was too late. Grandpa has stopped breathing. The doctor told grandma regretfully that it would be nice if it could be delivered a few minutes earlier ... From then on, grandma had a wish and looked forward to repairing the road to the city one day earlier, so that the villagers in the village would no longer have this regret.
Today, 20 years later, not only the roads have been repaired, but also the means of transportation have undergone great changes. The original tractor was replaced by a car, and every family installed a telephone. If there is a patient at home, just call the emergency number 120 and the ambulance will arrive in a few minutes. The villagers will never regret this road and transportation again.
Flashback is used at the beginning of the simple comment article. First, grandma and I will take a look at the repaired road. Then the little author remembered a story that grandma told him 20 years ago: Grandpa died before seeing a doctor because the road was difficult, and this road became a pain in grandma's heart forever. At the end, I returned to reality and wrote about the great changes brought about by the road to the village. Echo from beginning to end, highlight the center. Although the language of the full text is plain, it is sincere, rich and touching.
In the vast and bright night sky, surrounded by stars, crystal clear. I looked up at the stars in the sky, and it seemed to say to me, "Do you have a wish, son?"
Yes, do I have a wish? I looked at the sky and the twinkling stars. It's like talking to me, eager to be friends with me, listening to my wishes, helping me, and letting me fulfill my wishes with me. It is like a lamp, illuminating the calm night sky and embellishing the silence of that night.
A wish is a person's future dream. I have many wishes, such as: I want to have a pair of flying wings and fly freely in the air; I want to be a teacher and irrigate the flowers of the motherland. I want to be an astronaut and enjoy the magic of heaven and earth and the vastness of the universe in the mysterious space. Although these are far away, I will work hard for them. People often say: don't laugh at yourself in life, don't be self-defeating We should have an ideal lighthouse and work hard. Success will wait for you at that moment, cheer for you and cheer for you. ...
Recently, I may have made a wish. It is to lay a good foundation in study, study and discuss with freshmen, enjoy happiness in cooperation, enhance friendship and improve their academic level. People often measure a person's comprehensive quality level by his achievements, and I am certainly not to be outdone. Because I have a wish, I will strive to improve, and I may experience setbacks and hardships from it. This is not terrible. As the saying goes, "failure is not terrible, what is terrible is that it is difficult to extricate yourself from failure." Sometimes, I will use the song "Sunshine is always after the storm" to encourage myself to go forward bravely. Therefore, because I have high self-confidence, my wish will always accompany me, accompany me through many spring, summer, autumn and winter, share happiness with me, take responsibility and help me solve problems. ...
I have another wish, that is, to enjoy happiness. As the saying goes, "smile is ten years old." Of course, happiness is very important, it is like a mirror, reflecting your mood; It is like a book, telling you whether you are happy now; It is like a candy, so sweet ... Happiness will affect your friends and relatives around you, and your happiness is their happiness-happiness is an ocean of joy.
Let's ride the wings of singing, step on the melodious dance, and walk into the inner world of you, me and him with a steady rhythm, and feel different life dreams and happy experiences. Communication is an important bridge between our hearts. Let's follow the moving melody to understand each other's wishes and become friends with them.
Find my dream and realize my wish. Hope to grow up with me.
A brief comment: The beginning of this article is novel, which endows natural scenery with human behavior and leads to the topic very cleverly. After asking questions, the author first lists the wishes of others, then makes preparations, and then writes down his two wishes clearly. There are many advantages in structure, and the language needs to be improved.
I am a bird, and my host and hostess are very busy and often not at home. They have a daughter who is a senior three student in the city. Maybe it's to relieve my daughter's boredom. A year ago, my master bought me home from the market.
The host has a good temper. He comes to see me on the balcony every day and feeds me. Doby loves me. But because he was very busy, he seldom had time to take me out for a walk, so I stayed in the cage all day and sang to kill time.
One evening, there was a chirping sound in my ear, and I was shocked-a large group of compatriots flew back to their nests in the sky, laughing and laughing at the same time, very happy. I couldn't help flapping my wings to fly with them, but I was quickly bounced back by the cage. I looked up at the deep blue sky and made a wish: I want to fly back to nature.
Maybe the sound of me hitting the cage alarmed the young master. She came to look at me and said bitterly that it was just you and me at home again tonight. Actually, I know you want to fly out, so do I. After that, I'll go back to my house and do my homework. Although I don't quite understand what the young master means, I know that she must be as eager for the blue sky, freedom and sunshine as I am. In this way, looking at the vast blue sky outside the cage every day, I made a wish, and a year passed. ...
The young master was admitted to the university. On the day of receiving the admission notice, she came to the balcony with a lot of books. She tore those textbooks into pieces and threw them downstairs. Then she took a deep breath and screamed at the sky: ah-ah-she screamed for a long time. After venting, she turned to suppress her joy and said to me: I'm leaving, going to college in other places, and finally I can fly! I am really happy for her when she looks happy, but I also want to shout out my wish: I want to fly, I want to have a real flight. ...
Comments: The wish of the brook is to run to the sea, the wish of the bird is to fly to the blue sky, and the wish of the students is to be the first. It is easy to write the wish, but it is difficult to write it well. This paper does the opposite, seeing the world through the eyes of birds, telling sadness through the language of birds, and comparing the pain of being imprisoned with the success of young master. In fact, anyone with a discerning eye can see that birds are people and people are like birds. The junior high school students who sprint for the exam are even worse than birds. The author's feelings are buried in the plain narrative, so there is no need for romance; Studying tonight, there are only two of us at home again. Who wouldn't be in the same boat? Look at the textbooks that have been torn to pieces. Who doesn't feel carefree! Wen Xi likes watching mountains, but he doesn't like peace. A good article will not leak the news. A good article is a bright future after the restoration of mountains and rivers. A good article is to pave the way for rendering and cause * * * sound. Finally, I want to fly, and I want to have a real flight ... with a long aftertaste and amazing taste.
I don't remember my wish when I was four hours old. Maybe I want toys, maybe I want to be the director of a toy factory, maybe I want snacks, maybe I want to be a cake manager, which I have completely forgotten.
Let me listen to my heart again and think about what my wish is. On second thought, my wish is to have pocket money.
Because I found a big problem in the third grade. Everyone in our class has pocket money, but I don't. It tickles my heart to watch my classmates buy their favorite things with pocket money in their hands. There is an indescribable envy in my heart. I wish I had pocket money, too
When I came home to express my thoughts, my mother simply turned me down. The reason is that I am too young. /kloc-started giving me pocket money when I was 0/2 years old, and I was disappointed.
When I was in the fifth grade 12 years old, I made the same request again. Mom turned me down again. I asked, why? Mom said that if I give you money every day, you will misunderstand the money and think that it is hard-won and you will waste it. Besides, our money is hard to earn, not from the strong wind. Wait till you grow up. For an instant, I was speechless, with a dull pain in my heart and very unhappy.
Desire is something everyone must have, because it will give you the motivation to move forward.
Teacher's comment: the content is true and the narrative is clear. The little author told his disappointment and disappointment stories again and again. Mom won't let your wish come true, because she wants you to know that happiness is never easy to get, it is the compensation for your efforts. It's very well written When everyone is writing to realize their wishes, you have found a new way to write an unattainable wish, which is true and lovely! Nice composition!
In the silent night sky, I saw a meteor passing by, illuminating the earth. When the meteor falls, I gently close my hands and put them on my chest, silently making a wish: if there is an afterlife, I would like to become a bird and stay with my mother forever.
Because I owe my mother so much. ...
When I cry, my mother will always accompany me to comfort me, so my mother became the God of my life and gave me all my maternal love.
Once, I only got 89 points in math. I handed the test paper to my mother in dismay. Mom saw the score on the paper, and her smile suddenly converged a lot. I know it is going to rain! I humbly said to my mother, "Mom, you, you, you hit me." I failed the exam. "Mom looked at the paper, suppressed her anger and asked," Is it useful for me to hit you? "I don't believe a scholar is under a stick! I have never been in favor of force ... Look at these topics, you can do it, how can you do it wrong? " "Careless!" "Look at you, you are all very careless. If it weren't for carelessness, it would have been 100 ... "Mom paused and asked," Do you know you are wrong? " I looked down and said, "I know I was wrong!" " ""well, just admit your mistake, which means you still have a conscience. Reflect on yourself. "Everything my mother said deeply hurt my heart: what a tolerant maternal love!
Another time, I had a stomachache. My mother sent me to my home in a hurry and took care of me at home, regardless of the business in the store. She kept asking me, "Is my stomach better?" After a while, he asked me, "What's the matter? Does it still hurt? " At this time, I was moved to tears.
However, as we get older, our wings become harder and harder. Sometimes, I do something wrong, but I will still defend myself; Sometimes I lose my temper with my mother when she won't let me play computer. ...
I owe my mother so much that I can't pay it back in my life. ...
If there is an afterlife, I would like to turn into a bird and stay with my mother forever and sing for her. If there is an afterlife, I would like to become a bird and stay with my mother forever to make her happy. If there is an afterlife, I would like to become a bird and stay with my mother forever, listening to her talk about her troubles; If there is an afterlife, I would like to become a bird and stay with my mother forever to make up for what I owe in this life. ...
A brief comment This is an article describing wishes. From your article, the teacher knows that you are a grateful child. The article reveals deep gratitude to your mother between the lines, such as "When the meteor falls, I gently close my hands and put them on my chest, silently wishing: If there is an afterlife, I would like to become a bird and stay with my mother forever". The full-text language is fluent and natural, and the feelings are sincere, which is a good exercise.
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