2. "blink of an eye for a thousand years." . . Millennium. . . Exaggerated. . . Exaggeration is a technique, but don't overdo it. . .
3. "I let the years take away her black hair.
I let time take away her health.
I let the sunset lengthen her figure. "
You look cruel when you write like this! Torture your mother like this! You have no ability to let time, years and sunset do anything! It would be better to remove "I let".
4. "I grow up slowly, and she gets tired slowly." This sentence should be changed to "my mother grew old in the passage of time, but I grew up happily and healthily." Probably the whole meaning will do.
5. "Children want to raise and not wait for their relatives, while trees want to be quiet and the wind will not stop." Do you know the meaning of this sentence? The first half of the sentence said that I want to support my parents, but my parents are gone, which is a deep regret! You should have chosen this sentence to set off the theme of the topic! It's better to change it to "but how much love there is in the inch-long grass, and I won three wisps of spring scenery"!
6. "When the years are like songs, do you still remember your parents? I have always had an expectation that you will not look old. " Your sentence is very good! Why not change the theme of the composition to "I hope my mother will never get old"? !
7. "I am about to graduate now, but I can describe my mother as senile and hale and hearty" with serious problems.
High spirits: refers to the spirit of the elderly, old and powerful, yet elegant.
Old age: describes old age, physical decline, and inflexible actions.
What do you want to express?
8.。 In fact, parents need your return. . . No matter what the reality is, teachers will be more eager to see that great contribution, such as what your parents have done for you, but the topic still doesn't require you to return. You got it?
9. Emotional cards need infinite feelings, as well as words that can touch people's hearts and make readers move or even cry. If it doesn't reach that level, it looks fake.
10. The wording and sentences of the whole article are not smooth, and the meanings are contradictory. . . Awkward. . .
You can keep asking me questions. If you are satisfied, please set it as the best answer, thank you!