Dear friends, what do you think of this poem? Give me an opinion, I'm just a rookie ... Can you comment more? Please be more detailed and get extra points.

You don't look like a novice here! ? It's well written and well organized, and your logical thinking is strong! Pay more attention to the number of words, the number of words is a bit uncoordinated, dear, a paragraph should be almost the same number of words per line to look good! Come on, come on. Little poet, come on! (It's really good! Guilt ~ ~ Guilt ~) Ask for adoption ~ ~ Ask for adoption ~!