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Essay 1: I changed the color of life
If there is a lotus in the pond, if there is a lotus in the heart, it will grow long
——Zhang Xiaofeng
A strong wind blows in the face, and the shower begins to subside.
Walking alone in the half-acre square pond with rolling green clouds, I let the sorrowful rain wet my fragile mood.
In the green lotus pond, the red lotus has become a silent scenery, smiling lightly and gracefully. Pour out wisps of fragrance in the colorful raindrops
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Looking at you quietly, thinking about having the same tranquility as you.
In the terrible campus, you are buried in a boundless sea of ??questions, but when you look up, you are still in a dead classroom. The daily struggle is always not satisfactory. There are always too many unexpected failures. The darkness of life seems to make me vulnerable...
It’s been quite a while. Time, because of the pressure of further studies, I stayed away from you. The silence in the examination room countless times, the great joy and sorrow after countless exams - I was defeated in my own world. Although the reasons for struggle and struggle are lingering in my ears, the upward courage no longer comes to me in person. I have become indifferent to countless beatings, and the melody of life is far away from the ups and downs and waves... I can't help but start to envy you, the one who has a carefree life.
It is late at night again, very quiet. It was so quiet that I could only hear the sound of the moonlight dripping, and only the sound of thoughts breaking on the water...
It wasn't until that rainstorm that I realized that living with you is not always sunny. Raindrops like wild beasts are raging towards you, and strong winds are hitting you in waves. I think your life will end here?
One sunny day, passing by quietly, I saw the petals of the petals being rudely blown away. Destroyed, the emerald-like green leaves dispersed everywhere, the branches
were messy but not broken, barely holding up a bright cluster in the breeze.
The light pink color is still there, still blooming after the heavy rain. What about me? Will I only face one storm? Life has never allowed me peace. As long as it is blooming, there is no reason to cry. The dissipated green leaves are like broken wings, folded.
Holding the dream of a season.
The flowers may not bloom all summer, but we can smile for a lifetime. Staring at your blooming figure, I learn to change the color of the storm like you, and smile in the rain like you.
A pond of lotuses, a pond of silent songs - singing the most elegant melody in the wind and rain.
That touch of light pink - the whole lotus pond is colorful, swaying with poetic dreams!
Test question analysis: This essay question 1* **There are five segments, the first four are materials, and the last one is prompts.
I will analyze it one by one:
The first paragraph: When a contradiction is raised, the little oak tree looks sad because it sees others blossoming and bearing fruit, but does not know what to do.
Second paragraph: The opinions given about apples and roses actually hide two common attitudes towards life, but they are exactly what the essay writer is opposed to. The first is Apple's attitude, which only knows how to blindly work hard and completely ignore other factors. The second is Rose's attitude, which blindly determines the pursuit of life based on whether it is easy or not.
The third paragraph: List the little oak’s handling methods, divided into three steps: ① Calm yourself down; ② Listen to your inner voice; ③ Determine your mission and clarify what this mission has. Social value. Obviously, these three steps are progressive and a step-by-step process.
The fourth paragraph: Describing the results of the little oak tree after doing this, there are two points: full of strength and happy growth.
The fifth paragraph: It is a prompt, which should be centered around the need for growth.
After interpreting the above paragraphs, most children can understand that to grow up, they need to find their own goals and find a path that suits them. With ideas like this, the key is how to write in depth? I personally think that based on the prompts of the proposer, we might as well develop around the following two sub-arguments:
1. To grow, you need to listen to your inner voice;
2. To grow, you need to be clear The value of one's own mission;
These two sub-themes are centered around the central ideas of "establishing one's own value", "seeking one's own goals" and "finding a path that suits oneself", but they also combine these The central point is refined into two steps:
The first step is internal, that is, you must first clarify what you want, not what others say or do. This is an opinion for apples and roses of. When writing this sub-point, you should highlight the key role that your own individual needs play in your growth and highlight your "own inner voice."
The second step is external, that is, establishing your own sense of mission is not a completely personal behavior. You must highlight the social nature of this mission, that is, what Little Oak said in the material, "My mission should be long-term." It must be tall and straight to provide habitat for birds and shade for tourists.” Therefore, when writing this sub-theme, you must connect your mission with social needs.
By dividing the topic into these two steps, you should be able to express the main idea in a more in-depth way.