Poetic Society with Beautiful Bamboo Rhyme ‖ Long River of Sunset ‖ Comments on Dou Poetry 3 1

Poetry criticism is a special column of "Bamboo Rhyme". Adhering to the principle of "fighting poems instead of fighting people", Mr. Chang He, the leader of Sunset Group, can always make incisive comments on the participating poems in an atmosphere of laughter and harmony.

Lv Qi Yesushan Temple

Lost in the darkness when the moon entered Nomura,

Get off the saddle and find the night to buckle the mountain gate.

It's a quarter past zero,

There is one cigarette left in two boxes of cigarettes.

The abbot is very kind to the waiter.

On the false meaning of barbarians in Buddhist scriptures.

I'd rather be negative in this life,

Don't forget that grace period.

Let's sing a few residual poems, and wait for Changhe to learn the best poems of bamboo poets. ...

Seven-tone tour Pingyao

The city wall is four feet high, which worries the army. Embroidered carvings listen to the rain building.

The five ridges in the old courtyard inherit the ancient rhyme, and the six beasts in the new house imitate the princes.

Tourists are like weavers, and their goods are dazzling.

Walking in the dusty street, I have been in China all my life!

1, brother: This poem needs a new rhyme! If we follow the rhyme, the "ridge house" will be lost, and the couplets will not be connected, and the old man will not be interested in going down to pay tribute. ...

2, according to the new rhyme, "weaving" is flat, the neck is six, the law is out! Weaving banners and flags is the only way. ...

3. Three joints of the first jaw and neck are suspected to be flat-headed, so avoid it. ...

The original meaning of the word "one" in the first couplet is the roof, and you say "ridge" in the couplet. The image is repeated. ...

5. These poems are sick! What makes the old lady dizzy is "I have been in China all my life"? Little brother! You must teach the old people. What does this sentence mean? Put together a sentence! Rhyme!

The overlord of Xi Chu's seven laws

Everyone says that the item is also heavy, so it is natural to bully the sky and leave.

Jumping horse, whipping knife, beheading, marching to raise the tripod to bully the wind.

The princes worship handsome and seek expensive, and the giant deer looks up and makes contributions.

The mistake is fierce, and the west Chu hates it. My concubine sings the swan song.

1, "double pupil" refers to a person with two pupils in one eye. Such people are mostly legendary saints! There are only eight pupils in history books: Cang Xie, Yu Shun, Zhong Er, Xiang Yu, Lv Guang, Gao Yang, Yu He Lv and Li Yu. But I always thought that the so-called "double pupils" were actually cataracts. ...

2. The first word "Feng" is too close and rhymes badly. ...

3. "Nature deceives the sky"? Ridiculous! "Nature" often refers to nature or fate. Nature has always been the only way to deceive people. How can it deceive heaven? For example, the poem "Watching Wang Shigu Painting Landscape Songs" in the early Qing Dynasty has the following words: "The soul wants to be quiet and natural, and the mysterious heart writes photos of mountains and rivers alone." The second sentence is a sick sentence, and "empty leaves" are purely rhyming! So break the sentence and cut it again. ...

4. Can the couplet "Dagger and Overlord Wind" be matched? Who taught you that?

5. The tie of "seeking your valuable contributions" is neither fish nor fowl. ...

6, just! I don't want to savor it. Brother: Learn the basics of couplets in your spare time! When you study this poem carefully, you will begin to use meter.

Night in Qin Yi E Village

The sound of the flute is pleasant, and the Hu Xian invites the bright moon.

Invite the bright moon, yangko go, horn cut.

Local accent, earthy plot, cymbals and gongs with drums and flutes.

Yan, farmhouse music, rich folk customs.

1, the word "beep" must be out of the law.

2. There is a "Spring Festival Evening" in the performance and a "village night" in the countryside! Let me guess: what is the occupation of brothers ... 89.64% is selling musical instruments! ! !

Flute, trumpet, cymbal, gong, drum, sheng, Xiao! Brother: Just put the piano, guitar, tuba, trumpet … all in! ! ! So "village night" is called the old lady! We can whistle, we can sing "Fairy Couple" …

4, you are more or less fooling the elderly! If a "Country Night" plays musical instruments to enhance the atmosphere, it also underestimates the aesthetic level of our villagers and friends! At least ask Zhao Benshan to have a "super-life guerrilla" and ask Lao Bi to have a "outsmart the tiger mountain" ...

5. "Local accent, local flavor, local plot" In the old lady's impression, only people who handle funerals can play musical instruments like this ...

6, brother: the theme is very good, the scene is mixed and mixed, and the idea is wonderful. Xiaque should be "empty" and combine with reality to produce aftertaste, and musical instruments should not be used to add interest and sentences. ...

Seven methods, one death, misty rain, arbitrary life.

In recent spring, new willows have sprouted and new flowers have appeared in the New Year.

The white goose down is evenly foamed, and the snow color in the river is beautiful.

How can ordinary rain fall, and how can the wind not go away?

And it's not too late to be idle, so I'll go to the end of the world with the running water.

1. New Willow Bud: What is "New Willow"? It is because of "new shoots"! The image of this sentence is contradictory. Old willows sprout new buds. ...

2. "No flowers"? Hard and obscure! Make a "flower" rhyme. There is definitely no willow flower in the "annual ticket", which was opened in March and April. ...

3. If the couplet "White Goose Down, Snow in the River" is catkin, then this poem is pure fiction! There can be no catkins in "Recent Spring"; If it refers to residual snow, it is "goose down, snow color"! Form a sentence ...

The couplets on the head and chin are obscure, and the couplets on the neck and tail have no "foundation", so I'm not interested in enjoying them. ...

Qi Lu Qihuai

A person in the west building, obsessed with the moon, surrounded by endless worries.

Laugh at depression and watch romance.

If you can follow Shui Bo in the past, you can accompany Yun Chi in the fleeting time.

I love a pen and write a poem safely.

1, "distressed thoughts"? Ill sentence! "Ten thoughts around (verbs)" and "thinking" are definitely nouns. "Thinking" is used as a noun. rhyme ...

2, the couplet "look, look" together! A blunt sentence of "gossip" ...

3. What does "follow Shui Bo" mean on the tie? Your original intention should be to "drift" with the water, but drifting is moving, stopping is static, and a word "stop" means staying! Who taught Chinese? inappropriate wording ...

4. "If you can, when you can" is very blunt when used in the neckline!

4. The tail joint is a separate product, which is acceptable. However, in connection with the last article, the context of "Clear and Safe" and the first couplet "Melancholy" is contradictory!

5, brother! Writing poetry is to pour out one's heart, not to pile up words. ...

Reflections on the Seven Laws Alumni Association

Tsinghua graduated from various places, which has been a dream for 30 years.

Cardamom's feelings are unforgettable, but Ban Jing's story is looking forward to reunion.

Mei Lan, Tao Li, Li, the end of spring, wealth and fame are instantly empty.

There, the wine is waving with peers, the mountain flowers are brilliant, and the sunset glow is red.

Note: Tsinghua is Zhejiang Qingtian Overseas Chinese Middle School.

1, almost "Tsinghua" as "Tsinghua"! Thanks to my brother's note, there is no water. ...

2. Repeatedly "Ban Jing" owes "cardamom"! Jing, refers to friends meet, * * * sit and talk. Example: Tao Qian's poem "Drinking" 15 "Ban sat quietly in Panasonic and got drunk after counting." Class: scatter; Vitex negundo (a deciduous shrub) has a verb-object structure.

3. The joints of chin and neck are suspected to be flat. ...

4, the tail is good! Although the image of "sunset red" is old, it means that youth has passed away, and it is somewhat indifferent and calm, and it also takes care of "a dream for 30 years, a cardamom feeling" ...

Although this rule is flawed, it is very compact. The neckline turns far away; The tail section is neatly collected and freely put away. Very beneficial ...

Making butterfly dance