From the perspective of formal poetry, this poem is very problematic.
First of all, rhyme must be balanced, so the word "noisy" does not rhyme, and "newspaper", "smile" and "treasure" do not rhyme.
Secondly, according to the first sentence of this poem, it is monosyllabic, that is, the rhyme of the first sentence is not needed, and the format is as follows:
Flat and light, flat and light.
Plain, plain, plain.
Flat and light, flat and light.
Plain, plain, plain.
It can be seen that there are still some problems in leveling.
Third, in the case that other couplets cannot be guaranteed, the neck couplets must be aligned. As far as this poem is concerned, it seems that the first three sentences have the possibility of confrontation.
In the first couplet, "Shili" and "Wu Jia" don't match.
In Zhuan Xu, "blooming" and "thousand red" are not comparable, and "fragrance" and "charm" are not comparable.
There is nothing wrong with the neckband, "tourists are woven" and "gardener's hard work"
Let's talk about some other problems. Generally speaking, when rhyming quatrains are unintentional, it is necessary to avoid the same word in the same poem, but it is not good for the word "flower" to appear in the first sentence, joint sentence and neck joint sentence of this poem.
In addition, personally, it is not good to have the homonym of the world and things in one sentence of the first couplet, and it is not good to have the six characters and thirteen characters in the same position in the neck couplet.
That's about it. Personal thoughts and shortcomings are welcome to exchange.