I'm going to take part in a Chinese-English poetry reading contest and choose the poem "Inner Music". I don't know which word to raise and which word to drop.

Life ... what is this?

See it/in the colors of autumn,

Mild snowfall/winter,

A shower/spring,

Summer sunshine.

Look at it/in the laughter of young people and old people.

Know it/be full of hope,

A generous blessing.

What is life?

It is happiness, consciousness,

And/music/inner.

Inner music

Life/what is it?

It/immersed in colorful/autumn colors,

Floating in/soft and silent/winter snow,

In the spring rain,

On a gorgeous summer day.

It is contained in the old man's hearty laughter.

Still hiding in/children's innocent play.

It/surging/people's hopes,

It ripples with good wishes,

What is life like?

This is happiness, this is understanding,

It's the music in my heart.

That's it. I hope it helps.