A gust of autumn wind blew, making Zhang Ji tremble with cold. He went back to the house and took out the cotton-padded jacket that his mother sewed for him before he left. I can't help thinking of my old mother and my long-lost hometown. Deep homesickness deeply troubled him.
I want to write a letter to my family when I pick up a pen, but I can't write it in a thousand words. There's so much to say and know. Zhang Ji finally began to write, enthusiastically telling his feelings of parting with his family. After the letter was written, Zhang Ji's mood was still unsettled for a long time. In his dream, he returned to his hometown and met his elderly mother.
The next day, at sunrise in the east, Zhang Ji couldn't wait to come to the messenger's office and handed the letter to the messenger. And repeatedly told him that he must send the letter home intact. Just as the messenger was about to leave, Zhang Ji, who was uneasy, hurriedly took the letter back from the messenger. Open it carefully and read it carefully over and over again, for fear that I have something unclear. This just carefully handed the letter to the messenger.
The messenger rode across the horse and galloped away. Zhang Ji watched him until he disappeared into the sky.
The vine is dead and the tree is old. At dusk, crows crow in the empty sky. It's noisy, but it makes me jealous. Crows have homes, too, but what about me? The river flows quietly and crosses the long bridge. In the hut, the whole family sits around and enjoys family happiness. I was walking on the old road with a thin horse, and the west wind blew against my face, making people feel chilly. The sun was setting and the day passed. The joy of my life is over, waiting for me, but I miss my punishment and I am deeply saddened. From then on, I was desperate.
2. Regarding the composition adapted from ancient poems, Li Bai's To Wang Lun is a well-known farewell poem.
The first two sentences are positive narratives, while the last two sentences are things rising, which turn intangible friendship into vivid images, ethereal and memorable, natural and true. "Chinese Curriculum Standard" points out that exercise teaching should "stimulate students' imagination and imagination, and encourage them to write imaginary things. "
This poem provides a foundation for students' free imagination. We might as well instruct students to rewrite this ancient poem into modern literature. Students should imagine the farewell scene between Li Bai and Wang Lun and taste the feelings between the lines of the poet according to the contents of ancient poems and their own life experience. The exercises written by students will be very interesting.
This extracurricular exercise design is suitable for primary school students in grades 5 and 6. Writing process: 1. Enter the realm of poetry and taste reading; 3. Appreciate the soundtrack animation of To Wang Lun, and the teacher tells the legend about this poem.
2. Imagine the experience of 1, "Li Bai will want to travel by boat" (3) Play the animation of "Drinking and Watching the Moon", and the teacher tells it affectionately: Seeing this, Li Bai is full of emotions and thoughts, and a scene of getting along with Wang Lun emerges: drinking-guiding students to imagine their own language, movements and demeanor. The teacher introduced the following situations in the camera for the students to imagine: in Li Bai's eyes, Wang Lun is a witty, studious and enterprising young man with similar interests, and they met late, so they can be said to have forgotten each other; In Wang Lun's eyes, although Li Bai's poems are famous all over the world, he is never arrogant. He is a charming and knowledgeable scholar and an amiable elder.
Appreciating the moon-Li Bai loves the moon very much and has written many wonderful poems about the moon, such as Silent Night Thinking, Moon Wandering in Gulang, Moon Song in Emei Mountain and so on. Students can be guided to apply them to this situation. Wang Lun recited these poems to express his admiration.
Play, play chess, fish, recite poems, climb mountains ... 2. "Suddenly smell the songs on the shore" "However, as long as China keeps our friendship, heaven is still our neighbor." —— Wang Bo "Advise Jun to drink more, and there is no reason to go out to Yangguan in the west."
-Wang Wei "Oh, ask this river running eastward, whether it can go further than the love of friends! ? "-Li Bai" Mochow has no confidant in the road ahead. Who doesn't know Jun in the world? " -Gao Shi's "Liu Yang Dongmen Tree, Qingqing Sandwiching the Royal River". I've been climbing hard recently. I think I've separated. "
-Wang Zhihuan 3, "Peach Blossom Pond is deeper than thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun" was long before I met her, but after we parted, we finally had a parting. Li Bai got on the boat, and the boat drifted away, his eyes blurred with tears. He couldn't help chanting a poem-teachers and students shouted "To Wang Lun" in unison. Third, stimulate expression, rewrite ancient poetry 1, classmates, today, we came to Taohuatan and experienced a deep farewell scene together. Can we still be indifferent? Then let's get a pen and write down this touching scene! 5. Students rewrite ancient poems, and teachers give individual guidance.
Fourth, show the works and exchange comments. 1. Who wants to read his composition to everyone? Teacher's camera comment. 2. After appreciating this classmate's composition, you can talk about what you appreciate most or are most moved, and you can also talk about your personal opinions or suggestions.
3. Teacher's summary: Students, today, we have crossed the boundaries of time and space, talked with the ancients and poets, and gained the nourishment of language, the edification of emotion and the cherish of friendship. Can you tell me how you feel in this class in one sentence? Design comments: I think it is a process of "word-meaning conversion" for students to rewrite ancient poems. Let's try to illustrate this exercise design as an example.
First, the transformation from "speech" to "meaning" as an ancient poem, how to transform "speech" into "meaning" in students' minds? In my opinion, teachers mainly guide students to penetrate the "two layers", that is, the surface layer and the inner layer of language. From the operational point of view, the first is "dialogue", which allows students to make use of their own life experience and knowledge reserves to have a "dialogue" with poets, enrich the "blank" of ancient poetry with imagination and association, and enrich the "meaning" contained in ancient poetry.
The second is "understanding". On the basis of dialogue with poets, guide students to "touch" and "taste" ancient poetry with their own senses. Due to students' deep involvement and emotional input, they entered the "connotation layer" from the "language surface" and thus entered the "artistic conception" of ancient poetry. On the basis of * * * knowledge, * * Ming, on the basis of * * * Ming is the heartbeat together.
Only in this way can ancient poetry be endowed with vivid spirituality, which is the "meaning" in students' minds. In the teaching design of this course, the teacher first leads students to "put on prose to fall in love", and through appreciation, taste and reading, students can "talk" with poets, so as to understand and understand poetry.
Then the teacher leads the students to "put themselves in the shoes and imagine the experience", and by creating the situation, the students can "recite poems and study with the ancients; Reading, reciting poems, and scheming with the ancients "(in Confucius' language), put yourself in the dialogue and communication with poets, and let students enter the situation of" making my heart into Tang's heart and making Tang's heart my heart "through imaginative experience, and reach the realm of Wang Guowei's" seeing things from me and everything is in my color ". Both students and poets have an emotional * * * sound, which leads to the psychological impulse to express their feelings.
Specifically, it is to let students and the author communicate and understand each other in the dialogue scene, stir up the life accumulation accumulated in students' hearts, touch their sensitive and affectionate heartstrings, and make them have the impulse to write, so as to let the torrent of language vent freely. Second, the transformation from "meaning" to "speech" So, how can students transform the "meaning" internalized in their hearts into "speech"? In my opinion, there will be two levels of process here: one is to transform the internalized "meaning" into the students' "oral language".
In oral expression, students can express themselves easily, because the teacher has created some situations, interesting topics, and can also use body language. The second is to transform "oral language" into "written language", that is, students should accurately and finely express the "meaning" formed in their hearts with tangible words.
In the teaching design of this course, the teacher took the students into the zone of "expressing their feelings directly, but they can't stop" and "quitting when they are moved". Ye Shengtao said: "The natural order of composition should be that I know things, I have feelings in my heart, and the waves of feelings are impacting me. When I have the desire to speak, I want to pour it out, so the article was born. "
At this point, the "meaning" in students' minds has reached the position of "be vividly portrayed" and reached the leaf.
Most of the beautiful West Lake is surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Visiting the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, and the warm spring breeze blew these ancient poems "titled Lin 'an House" into a composition.
Sleepy, how can you remember the lost northern territory and the reduced old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different. Lin 'an Mansion is a political satire poem by Lin Sheng, a poet in the Southern Song Dynasty, and it is also the author's only representative work. This poem is written for the dark reality of the Southern Song Dynasty. It poured out people's indignation and expressed the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
Most of the beautiful West Lake is surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Traveling around the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, the warm spring breeze makes these tourists sleepy, how can they remember the lost northern territory and the degraded old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different.
This is a poem written on the wall of a hotel in Lin 'an. This is a political satire. The appellation of Lin 'an House shows the society at that time. In AD 1 126, the Jin people captured Bianliang, the capital of the Northern Song Dynasty, and captured two emperors, Huizong and Qinzong. The territory of the Central Plains was completely occupied by the Jin people. Zhao Gou fled to the south of the Yangtze River and ascended the throne in Lin 'an, which is known as the Southern Song Dynasty. Instead of accepting the painful lesson of national subjugation in the Northern Song Dynasty, the small court in the Southern Song Dynasty became angry from embarrassment and tried to strengthen itself. The rulers did not want to recover the lost land in the Central Plains, but begged for peace, surrendered to the outside world, and brutally persecuted Yue Fei and other patriots at home. Politically corrupt and incompetent, dignitaries indulge in debauchery and pleasure. This poem is written for this dark reality. It pours out the indignation pent up in the hearts of the broad masses of people, and also expresses the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
4. Rewriting poetry requires rewriting a poem into a composition, an ethereal fairy mountain, telling us his ancient memory ... perhaps there is too much helplessness to bear. It has stood there for thousands of years and faced everything calmly with an inclusive heart.
As a result, the misty clouds rose from his peak, and the mountains and rivers played an eternal swan song: every fairy ganoderma lucidum and every plum wife crane were born for you. How can I tell when he walks in and passes through all these clouds? Perseverance; He walked into the profound tacit understanding of literati in past dynasties.
With a sickle in my hand, I left without hesitation to find my own day, a free day. Seclusion, a desirable word, how many vagrancies, how many prosperous honors and disgraces, all dissipated in this nothingness and merged into real freedom.
Maybe one day, under a vigorous pine tree, a mortal child who is looking for you carefully knocks on dimension door. It seems that everything will change because of this, but this is just a door left unlocked. No one will see you come back. You passed the world by, leaving visitors with only deep helplessness.
Who is reciting that unique ancient song: When I asked your student under a pine tree, "My teacher," he replied, "to collect medicine," but in which corner of the mountain, how can I tell through all these clouds? ?
5. How to rewrite ancient poems into articles? The ideological content of ancient poetry is basically unchanged, but the form of ancient poetry is changed into vernacular, the structure is changed and the language is reorganized.
Poetry:
Qingpingle country house
Author Xin Qiji, Song Dynasty
The thatched roof of the hut is low and small, and the stream is covered with green grass.
Drunk Wu local drunk, gentle voice, white-haired old man who is it?
The eldest son is weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream, and the second son is busy knitting chicken cages.
My favorite is my youngest son, who is lying in the grass, peeling the lotus just picked.
Rewrite the article:
In the afternoon, I walked slowly with a leisurely mood and accidentally saw a low hut. Behind the hut are green and straight bamboos and rolling mountains, revealing the quiet atmosphere of the countryside. There is a stream beside the hut. The river is clear and transparent, and all the fish in it can be seen clearly. The river looks sparkling in the sunlight.
A breeze blew, causing ripples on the river. There are several beautiful lotus flowers on the stream, some of which are in full bloom; Some are in bud; Everything else seems to be put down. White inside and pink inside, like a shy girl with a veil on her face. There are clumps of green grass beside the stream, which grow very luxuriantly. It is more beautiful and lovely against the backdrop of streams and lotus flowers.
There is an old couple with white hair in front of the hut. They just had a few drinks. From their red faces, we can see that they are all a little drunk. They are together, talking intimately in Wu dialect, and the second son next to them puts in a few words from time to time!
The old couple's eldest son is desperately weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream. How hard he works! The second son is not idle, and is carefully weaving a chicken coop with bamboo and grass, very focused. The youngest son, not yet an adult, knows nothing. He could only lie on the side of the stream and tease the fish naughtily, peeling the lotus while eating and shaking his feet. Really cute!
What a happy family! I was deeply intoxicated, just standing there, unwilling to leave for a long time …
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Override method:
1, change the style: the ideological content of the original is basically unchanged, and most of them just focus on changing the form of the original. For example, ancient poems are rewritten into words, poems are rewritten into narratives, and narratives are rewritten into expository texts; This novel has been adapted into a play.
2. Change the style: change the classical Chinese into vernacular Chinese; Change the structure, change the sequence of flashbacks, and reorganize the material;
3. Change the person: the first person is changed to the third person, and the third person is changed to the first person.
4. Change the sentence pattern: enlarge the sentence. Abbreviations, etc.