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At this time, a magical picture flashed through my mind: a golden full moon hung in the deep blue sky, and endless green watermelons were planted on the sand by the sea. Meanwhile, a boy of eleven or twelve, wearing a silver ring around his neck and holding a steel fork, tried his best to stab a horse, but the man twisted and ran away from his crotch.
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This picture shows a young man stabbing a melon on a moonlit night. Through the description of "deep blue sky", "golden full moon" and "endless green watermelon", a handsome and lively teenager leaps over the earth.
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In the boundless darkness, clusters of bonfires are burning. Soldiers who have been rolling in the mud for several days in the wind and rain are talking and laughing around this raging wildfire. A layer of fog rises from wet clothes, and wild vegetables in foreign porcelain bowls are ringing. ...
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This description of the environment highlights the happy mood of the Red Army soldiers after the bonfire party, and shows that the unknown soldiers played a great role with seven matches saved by their lives, bringing warmth and strength to the troops and comrades, thus praising the revolutionary quality of the unknown soldiers and highlighting the central significance of the whole article.
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The twinkling stars in the sky are like jewels on a black curtain. They are so close to us! Black mountain peaks stand in front of us like giants. The surrounding mountains surround the valley like a well. There are several fires up and down, and comrades who are awake from the cold are whispering around the fire. In addition, it is silence. My ears are full of unpredictable sounds, some are far away and very close, and some are extremely heavy and thin, like spring silkworms chewing mulberry leaves, like wild horses galloping on the plains, like mountain springs whimpering, like rough waves.
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Write what you see first, and compare all three kinds of scenery. Stars are compared to "gems decorated with black curtains", peaks are compared to "giants standing in front of them" and valleys are compared to "a well". Then write and listen, the sound is difficult to write, and the metaphor is very intuitive: "Like spring silkworms chewing mulberry leaves, like wild horses galloping across the plain, like mountain springs whimpering, like rough waves." Strange mountain scenery, how beautiful! what is the purpose? In order to set off the optimism of the Red Army soldiers.
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Walking across the wooden bridge and the soldier-dodging hole, a group of monkeys came to see the peak. The surrounding peaks are like monkeys with different postures, either naive or stubborn, or embarrassed or angry, as if welcoming tourists from afar. They are the solidified sounds of nature and the philosophical heritage of the original flavor of Yang Zhe Mountain. -According to records, Zhang Sanfeng lived here after he lived in seclusion. Zhang Sanfeng is a Taoist immortal, and there are many relics here. For example, he flew to the precipice, the poems carved with his fingers, the footprints on bluestone, and the place where he ascended to immortality. —— Exit the Tibetan Sutra Cave, cross the vast forest, and look up. The sky in the distance is faintly visible, which makes people wonder whether there is a sky beyond that sky.
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Taking the transfer of scenic spots as a clue and the tour as a sequence, the author connects the beautiful scenic spots and historical sites in Yangzheshan, and makes appropriate details of many scenic spots, some of which are full of colors, while others are brushed aside. And add legends to add fun.
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Even if you don't go out in Beiping, you can rent a shabby house and live in the sea of people in the imperial city. Get up in the morning, make a bowl of strong tea and sit in the yard, you can see the high green sky and hear the pigeons flying in the blue sky. From the bottom of Sophora japonica leaves, counting a ray of sunshine leaking to the east, or in the broken waist, facing the blue morning glory like morning glory, you can naturally feel the autumn breath.
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It's like a landscape painting. The most prominent feature is that the author has grasped the characteristic scenery and the characteristics of the old capital autumn scenery. Whether it is a detailed description of "high blue sky" or a detailed description of "morning glory-like blue morning glory", the images are vivid and lifelike, rendering a quiet atmosphere and reaching an implicit artistic conception.
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Seen from a distance, Tianshan Mountain is beautiful and colorful. Long-term snow hangs high on Yunfeng, like the pearl crown of Uygur girls dancing in groups, shining with silver light; Colorful and continuous mountains, like a proud peacock, are gorgeous and charming.
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This is a picture from a distance. The author points out the characteristics of Tianshan Mountain in color and shape by using two metaphors of "crown of pearl" and "complacent". With the words "sparkling silver" and "gorgeous and charming", the whole picture is filled with a happy and peaceful atmosphere.
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To the north is the rolling Yanshan Mountains, and to the south is the endless Bohai Sea. The Great Wall of Wan Li rushed down from the Jiaoshan Mountain, a branch of Yanshan Mountain, and plunged into the Bohai Sea.
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From north to south, from far to near, the author wrote the majestic danger of Shanhaiguan from the terrain and momentum, and expressed his feelings of going to Shanhaiguan.
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Looking south from the pavilion, I saw dozens of buildings springing up on both sides of Zhengyangmen, adding a brand-new style to this ancient city. Looking east, everything looks softer and more transparent in the sun; Looking west, the White Pagoda on Nagong Island experienced a small disaster caused by the earthquake, holding its head high in the blue sky and pure as jade. Looking back at the north, the drum tower and the bell tower behind it are now quietly dormant there, but people will inevitably think about how the morning bell and the evening drum have marked the lonely rhythm of daily life for hundreds of years; Behind the Bell and Drum Tower, the Yan Mountains lying across the sky are blue, just like the barrier of this ancient city.
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Based on Wan Chunting, the author clearly changes the four observation directions, in which "Wang" and "Wang" are used to express the distance of the scenery in a measured way. In addition, the Yanshan remnant veins behind the Bell and Drum Tower are written from far to near, and the scenery combination is patchy and clear.
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It rained heavily, and heavy thoughts hit three red oil-paper umbrellas, making a lively and thick soup sound, corresponding to the sound of running water in streams and mouths. Looking from the umbrella, flowers are blooming on the hillside in the rain. In the lush thatch, beside the green trees, clumps of lush wildflowers are as red as flames. In the paddy field with the north wind on its back, the dense seedlings are like a well-woven dark green carpet. When the wind blows, the tender seedlings are overturned to one side, and the rice fields turn into light green silk.
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This description is really vivid, dynamic and static, with depth and density, hearing and vision, far and near, high and low. The author organically interweaves several loose azaleas on the hillside with dense seedlings in the field. In order to add vitality to the picture, the author uses a series of dynamic descriptions of "the wind is blowing", "the boat is capsized" and "the waves are shaking" to turn the originally quiet seedlings into light silk. The collocation of colors is also quite clever; The thatch is green, the young trees are green, and the seedlings are like dark green carpets, swaying into light green silk with the wind. In this green ocean, several clusters of azaleas as bright as flames are carefully decorated, which is refreshing and full of spring.
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There is a red sun in the sky, without a cloud, and it is very hot. On the day of the trip, all the roads were rugged paths, with mountains in the south and mountains in the north, but eleven soldiers were supervising. They walked more than twenty miles. The soldiers are thinking of enjoying the cool under the Liu Yin tree. Yang Zhi hit them with a cane and shouted, "Go! Teach you to go to bed early! " When all the soldiers looked at that day, there was not a cloud in the sky. In fact, it's very hot. At that time, Yang Zhi urged a group of people to walk on a quiet road in the mountains and watch the afternoon sunshine. The stone is very hot, and my feet hurt so much that I can't walk.