I like sunshine very much.
But the impetuousness and noise of the city make me not in the mood to pay attention to the sunshine that has been lingering in my heart. Besides, there are many disgusting smells hidden in the sunshine of the city, which are ambiguous, greedy, ugly and noisy. Until one day, I really couldn't stand the smell of sunshine and decided to pursue it. Pursue the long-awaited pure sunshine.
I boarded the train to the south. ...
The first destination is Dali, on the way. I have imagined the beauty there countless times, but when I got there, I still felt it deeply. I went to a coffee shop by a side street, chose a window seat, ordered a cup of bitter black coffee, and then took out a book and put it on the table, so that a large area of sunshine could be sprinkled on my book freely and the cello music played in the store could arouse my thoughts. At this moment, I seem to have formed a world. In this world, I laughed and cried, without sadness, parting, greed and noise, only crying and laughing.
The second stop is Hainan. I came to the beach to watch the sunrise. There are not many people with me, but the spectacular sunrise really touched me. The radiant light of the sun shone directly into my eyes through the clouds, but I didn't hide it because I enjoyed it. The morning sunshine is full of vigor and vitality, but it is not toxic and full of morning breath. I danced and laughed heartily at the seaside like a child, watching the broken reflection woven by the rising sun and the gorgeous sunshine in the water, jumping and laughing, just laughing, simply laughing.
My life is like a piano in a cafe, winding and winding, and like the reflection of the sun on the sea. Although sparkling and dancing, it is broken. A lonely soul covered by gorgeous appearance once looked at youth and burst into tears, but now I won't cry, because I have found a suitable home to starve myself.
My journey will continue and will not end. ...
Comments:
Advantages:
1. The language is fluent, the sentences are fluent, the ideas are lofty, and the article is complete (with some rhetoric).
2. The article narrates in the first person to better show the author's psychology to readers.
3. This paper compares my life with the piano sound in a coffee shop, vividly showing the author's bumpy life and the troubles caused by noise, and then compares the broken but gorgeous life with the reflection of the sun on the sea, leaving the reader with infinite reverie.
Disadvantages:
1. The article is a little dull, a little narrative for narrative, not very touching.
2. come to an abrupt end. Where is the destination?
There are some contradictions at the end: travel is to pursue the long-awaited pure sunshine. The penultimate paragraph has said that you have found a home. Why do you still describe travel?
2. General Comment on Junior High School Composition Some people say that life in junior high school is like a big step for a boy, full of endless pride and timeless elegance.
In my eyes, my junior high school students are like a symphony with only six words: temper, test and challenge. Tempering is always accompanied by opportunities.
Six years of hard study at the cold window finally paid off. Until last September, I finally stepped into the door of Qiushi Middle School and took the second step in my life.
Seeking truth is the basis of cultivating talents, and they appreciate talents. Here, seeking truth has taught me a lot about being a man and enriched my life experience.
Test is more tiring than tempering, but it often gains more. I am the monitor, in charge of class affairs.
While managing others, I must do better than others in order to make others believe in me as the monitor. Usually, I devote myself to class work and have a serious and responsible attitude, so I often work late for the tasks assigned by the school, but this is a test for myself.
I believe that the long-term test will make me invincible and let me shine among the stars forever. There are tests, tests and, of course, challenges, especially challenging yourself.
Because challenges are tests that have been honed and tested. Seeking truth is a good school in sifang district and a place where experts gather.
Life in junior high school will be more challenging and * * * if there are masters. Driven by the pressure, the students are all involved in the intense review, and the competition will be more confusing. Who will win is still unknown.
I will also devote myself to various competitions and exams with a positive attitude, so as to reap my efforts and sweat. On the stage of junior high school life, we all show ourselves heartily.
I may not be the brightest among the stars, but I will still shine my own unique light. My junior high school life will be full of wind and rain and sunshine.
3. Junior high school 600-word composition with comments to encourage yourself.
I am a happy boy. When people ask me the secret of happiness, I always smile and answer "cheer for myself". For me, it is mainly "Song".
(ask questions at the beginning, lead to the following, and cut into nature, just right. )
My songs always ripple on the road, at school and at home, which can make me face life happily every day. Once again, I am optimistic about life and always attract attention. )
I still remember that time, I participated in a competition organized by my school. Everyone thinks I will win the championship. But when things changed, I failed. At that time, I was like a deflated ball, shutting myself in my room, and tears burst through the gate and poured down. At this time, it was this song that made me regain my confidence. I picked up the pen container and stood on the balcony, facing all the people downstairs. After a prologue, I began to indulge in it and sing to my heart's content. My dream, smile and be strong, sing loudly, cross the vast ocean, my dream! Smile and be strong. The world is full of imagination and flies with music. After all the happiness and sadness, thank you for being with me. Happiness is my energy, lighting my own light, singing whenever I want, singing loudly, not afraid of wind and rain. Happiness is my energy, lighting my own light, and every expectation is witnessing my growth ... I can't help crying when I sing here, but this is not for disappointment, but for my own strength. I taste salty tears, but they are my sweet life experiences. Let me be more and more brave in my later life, so I keep encouraging myself to get out of a small puddle of life and find happiness and confidence again.
With my own personal experience, I explained the important role of encouraging myself and deepened the theme, which was convincing. )
Friends! Come on! Let's cheer ourselves up in our own way. It is like a navigation mark in the sea to stop you from wandering; It is like a beautiful melody that makes you forget the sorrow; It is like a gurgling spring, which makes you strong again.
Beautiful language, once again sublimated the theme of the article, convincing. )
Come on! Let's hold high the banner of encouraging ourselves, cross many difficulties and sail to the other side of success.
The language is concise and full of * * *, which conforms to the author's happy lifestyle. )
4. A junior high school composition and the full text of the metaphor in the book do not need suggestions and modifications at all. Maybe I didn't write as well as this one at first. Strive for innovation. I really can't bear to delete some metaphors in two paragraphs. This beautiful writing can be written by everyone, and it is also a masterpiece that can stand out from the crowd. Combined with some specific books, everyone writes in a very strange style:
First of all, this article will be more organized, and contemporary is still narrative-oriented. Although this may fail many times, I ran for a summer vacation and saw too many such words; Just as eating too many delicacies will make you feel uncomfortable, they not only echo each other, but some sentences do seem dispensable, so you will never be so persistent. Then you read some books. From the perspective of ing~, the title of "A Scholar Accompany Me" must be quite a study of classical literature. Although literary and artistic, there is a feeling of eloquence and worship ~
The above is just a personal opinion. If you score, it is a narrative, and it is also a high score of about 48. Personally, I think 1, everyone will generally think of writing what books they read since childhood. The landlord writes better than me. At this time, the landlord wants to talk about his views on this book in an all-round way, but as a book reviewer or reader.
As for which parts of this article need to be deleted! I mentioned many books that I also like very much. If you have a different understanding of books, you can try to write another one according to the above suggestions. Even if it is the same model, it lacks a little innovation and has a classical style. The writing style of the landlord is still relatively fresh. It is suggested that the landlord choose the most mature point of view, but personally, the landlord still needs to train narrative skills, which is the most novel. If you don't have a deep affection for books since childhood, every point will be empty after writing for a long time. I remember when I wrote this article before.
The last few paragraphs written by the landlord are really good. Perhaps in the author's own opinion, reading is changing. Although beautiful, the description of the scenery is reduced and the details are not divided. This will be more specific, from the heart and people are growing, and it is easy to make the article unfocused.
The landlord must have read many books. The teacher said that the better the tea, the better the fragrance, which also applies to books. I am not qualified to comment ~ but I still want to say a few words briefly, please give me your advice. You can also write the story between yourself and the book. It is really beautiful and the most sure one to write it in detail. It's perfect, but there seems to be no specific example, just a little vague and gorgeous. The teacher will think that you are not only a literary talent, but also a dream of red mansions, and you have written it for yourself. In fact, most people will make this kind of trouble when writing this kind of article, lyrical. I like the beginning and end of the landlord very much. Although you have a good foundation, if you have any naive ideas besides prose, the landlord's fresh and delicate description and articles on the same subject have brought this appropriate feature to the extreme! I hope the landlord can reply. Personally, I suggest you try other styles after class.
Secondly, people with ideas. As for other aspects, it is easy to get bored just by passing the exam, and everyone is making progress. Well, times have changed, but it's hard to stand out all the time.
5. Excellent composition should be accompanied by comments on junior high school composition topic: write an article of no less than 600 words with the topic "My favorite Chinese class". Writing true feelings, creative content and expression can get 1-5 points. (40 points)
Wonderful analysis:
This is a slow and steady composition topic, without ups and downs and ups and downs, but when writing, we should be innovative, surprised and brilliant, and strive to be a "crane" in the "chicken"
Good at telling stories. This Chinese class must be a Chinese class with stories, otherwise "My Favorite" will not be published. It may be that an episode of a classmate in the class aroused everyone's interest, that a question carefully designed by the teacher ignited the sparks of students' thinking, that the teacher's ingenious activity design made me realize the fun of Chinese learning, that the teacher's affectionate reading, humorous remarks and novel blackboard writing made me remember it vividly, and that the cooperation, innovative thinking and * * * debate between classmates made me unforgettable and like it.
Describe the details carefully. The lively scene of group cooperative learning in class can be summarized, while a classmate's personality language, emotional changes and typical actions need to be carefully carved; When the teacher read Haiyan, we were immersed in the artistic conception of the text. In the classroom, only the teacher's voice echoed, and the students held their breath, especially "let the storm come more violently!" " The strongest sound needs to be rendered in many ways and carefully portrayed.
Exquisite crested leopard tail. You can start by saying, "This is my favorite Chinese class." Compared with the beginning, "Chinese is a fragrant green tea, which makes people feel refreshed;" Chinese is a leisurely white cloud, which makes people think deeply; Chinese is a big river, and the waves splash, which makes people excited. China people, my favorite. "Lead to the following narrative of this lesson at the end, deepen the center, and point out why I like this Chinese lesson best in a few words.
Full marks composition and comments:
My favorite Chinese class
In the examination room, when I saw the composition topic, my thoughts returned to the Chinese class that impressed me deeply-
The classroom became noisy as soon as the bell rang. The students nervously recited the "I love this land" they learned yesterday. I looked at the door nervously with my back on my back, praying that the teacher would be late.
At this time, the Chinese teacher came into the classroom, and I was extremely nervous: "It's over, I forgot all about it this morning ... If I ask questions later, it will be miserable ..."
The teacher cleared his throat and everyone stopped reciting. Sure enough, the teacher said, "Let's check the text recitation." His sharp eyes were mixed with a little encouragement to scan the class, and the classroom was silent, even quieter than when studying. I secretly looked around, and everyone's heads were almost low on the table, nervously looking at the book. The teacher suddenly added: "Today, my classmates will ask me questions."
Our heads were lifted in an instant, and our eyes were fixed on the teacher. We were both monks-scratching our heads. I cast my questioning eyes on the same place, and she whispered, "What medicine is the teacher selling in the gourd?"
The teacher went on to say, "Reciting has always been an arduous task for students. A classmate asked me when I was reading this morning. Teachers always ask students to recite. Can I recite it myself? " I suddenly realized that in order for students to recite the meeting, teachers should first set an example, so I decided to recite this lesson by myself. "
We suddenly got excited, looked at the textbook carefully and checked whether there were any mistakes when the teacher recited it.
"If I were a bird/I would sing with a hoarse throat …" The charming voice of the teacher echoed in the classroom, and we were brought into a brand-new world of poetry. In this world, there are poets who deeply love the motherland, hate the invaders, deeply love the motherland ravaged by Japan's iron hoof, and are passionate about contributing to the country. ...
After the teacher recited, we were still immersed in eloquent recitation. Then, thunderous applause rang out in the classroom. The teacher's face burst into a happy smile. Outside at this time, the wind is rustling and birds are singing.
This is my favorite Chinese class.
comment
Start naturally. Introduce the memory of a favorite Chinese class from the real situation and flash back to nature. The ending is "This is my favorite Chinese class" and the beginning, and the topic is pointed out.
A vivid description. The penultimate paragraph gives a comprehensive and profound explanation of the artistic conception of poetry, suggesting the reason why "I like it best". In addition, the sentence "His sharp eyes are mixed with a little encouragement to scan the whole class" vividly describes the characteristics of the teacher's eyes, and the language expression is excellent.
The scenery contrasts sharply. The scenery description in the penultimate paragraph "Whispering in the wind and singing birds" has set off the students' happiness well.
6. Junior high school composition and comments This is something that happened to me. Whenever I see someone giving up their seat on the bus, I will recall it.
This incident not only made me feel ashamed, but also made me admire a complete stranger. One Sunday morning a year ago. After class, I went to my father's office by bus.
As soon as I got on the bus, I quickly grabbed an empty seat and sat down without looking. Then I looked into the carriage, and there were really many people in the carriage. The whole carriage is like a sardine can, side by side, crowded.
I was sitting leisurely, looking at the beautiful scenery outside the window, when an old woman got on the bus. "When I walked to my row of seats, I thought: There are still many stops from my father's unit. How tired it is to be crowded in the crowd after giving up your seat.
Do you want it or not? Just as I hesitated, a young man stood up and said to his grandmother, "Grandma, you can take my seat." Then, he carefully helped the grandmother to sit down, and he always leaned back in the seat, holding on to the handrail with one hand and struggling in the crowded place.
Seeing that grandma had a seat, I didn't think about anything in my heart and continued to enjoy the scenery. After several stops, only the people who came up from the front door did not see the people who went out from the back door, and the carriage became more crowded.
I saw that the young man was squeezed with sweat all over his face, his back gradually bent and he stood very hard. Finally arrived at the terminal, many people got off, and the young man and I were also ready to get off.
Everyone pushed me to the car door. Suddenly, I don't know who hit the young man's leg. The young man "ouch", gritted his teeth and got out of the car with a painful expression, covering his legs.
I feel very strange in my heart: can a bump hurt like this? I walked out of the bus with a "question mark" and saw the young man sitting on the side of the road, rolling up his trouser legs to check the wound. Ah! It turned out to be an injured leg, and the knee was tightly wrapped with gauze. He's hurt! I stood there, stupefied, looking at the red scarf on my chest and feeling warm on my face.
I think: I am a young pioneer. Do I deserve a red scarf? I'm ashamed. Although it has been so long, I still remember it clearly.
This matter has always told me that being a helpful person can only be happier if you help others. Today, my mother and I went to the country. I walked alone on the path in the field.
Walking, a small animal crawling slowly caught my eye. On closer inspection, it turned out to be a small snail.
It suddenly occurred to me that I want to walk with this little snail. So, I walked slowly, for fear that the little snail could not keep up.
I walked a few steps and looked back. The little snail was so far away from me. I pushed behind it, but it still crawled so slowly.
I urged it, I bluffed, I blamed it, and the snail looked at me apologetically, as if to say, "I have tried my best!" " "Snails can't climb fast, but they still climb. In order to get where you want to go, in order to complete the goals set for yourself.
What's our goal? How do we achieve these goals? Snail achieved its goal by its own efforts and the spirit of never giving up. We should learn the spirit of snails and accomplish our goals! Life often gives people inspiration, however, life will not take the initiative to send "inspiration" to your door.
Life goes on according to its own appearance and laws, and everyone has the right to get inspiration from it. It gives everyone a chance, but the question is whether we can find "enlightenment" from it.
People who are diligent in thinking, in a sense, are people who try to find inspiration-looking for it with unsolved mysteries and various doubts. Think about life itself and all kinds of phenomena in life, and you will receive the gift of life.
I like the charm of nature best. When you see the beautiful scenery of nature, you will be impressed by its charm. Here, you can forget the complicated and noisy urban area, feel the beauty of nature with your heart and feel the tranquility of nature.
When we went to Yuan Ye, we saw endless green grass with gorgeous wild flowers. The grass on the Yuan Ye is like thousands of greenguard, guarding the attractive flowers.
No matter how people trample on them, the grass will never lower its noble head. This is the charm of grass. When we throw ourselves into the arms of the mountain, the mountain is not high from a distance. When you come to the foot of the mountain and look up, you know that the mountain is so magnificent.
The mountains are huge, regardless of wind and thunder, sun and rain, forever.
7. Excellent Senior High School Entrance Examination composition evaluation imitated the excellent compositions and comments of Yangzhou Senior High School Entrance Examination in 2007. This year, the essay topic for the senior high school entrance examination in our city is "eat", which may be one of the words that we contact most and pay most attention to.
Eat, wear, live and travel, and "eat" is the first. Grandpa likes salty food, and dad likes sweet food. People in Jiangsu like to eat rice, while people in Shanxi like to eat noodles: "Eating" can reflect life and society, and may also contain philosophy and culture.
Please fill in the appropriate words on the line after eating, complete the topic, and then write an article of not less than 600 words. Demonstration: ~ Watermelon, ~ Interesting things, ~ Dining hall days, ~ Changes, ~ In Yangzhou, ~ Faded, ~ Fragrant, ~ Losing is a blessing.
Don't be limited to examples, you can fill in other words according to your own needs. ) requirements: 1. There is no limit to style except poetry.
2. Please do not copy. 3. The real name, school name and place shall not appear in the text.
This year, the composition topic of the senior high school entrance examination in our city is in the form of semi-proposition, and the topic is "Eat _ _ _ _". The text in the horizontal line is filled in by the candidates, making it the topic of the composition they want to write. Because this essay topic is very close to life, and it is very open and highly technical, it is no wonder that it has won praise from all walks of life.
We are familiar with eating three meals a day. Eating is also an important topic in our daily life. There is no limit to what you eat (real or imagined) and there are many things to write, so even students who regard composition as "afraid of the road" on weekdays will not have long worries about writing. Because of the high degree of openness and wide choice, candidates can choose their own topics of interest, which reflects the spirit of caring for and respecting students.
However, just because everyone has something to write does not mean that everyone can write well. The marking teacher will examine from the perspectives of conception, language and structure to see who writes generally, who writes better and who writes best, so that there will be a certain degree of distinction.
That is to say, take Taste of Eating as an example, those who only write "taste" belong to "staple food", those who write "taste" are in the middle, and those who write "taste" are excellent works. Everyone has something to write, but there is a certain degree of distinction when marking papers. This year's senior high school entrance examination composition questions can be said to be very brilliant.
At present, some essay questions are too poetic, too mysterious and too erratic, which is far from the examinee's life reality and ideological reality. This seems to be the "fashion" of the current essay proposition. In fact, such a topic is not conducive to testing students' ability, nor is it conducive to allowing students to express their true feelings.
I think junior high school students' writing should be rooted in the soil of life, learn to observe life keenly, think deeply about life, express life artistically, and learn to write an understanding and evaluation of life from a deeper level. This year, the composition of the senior high school entrance examination in our city did not catch up with "fashion" and returned to real life, which undoubtedly played a guiding role in the composition teaching of junior high schools in our city.
It is really "difficult" to write a well-written composition for the senior high school entrance examination with characteristics. Too vulgar, too shallow, too deep and too mysterious is not good. But just because it's difficult doesn't mean it can't be done.
In my opinion, in theory, we can get rid of ideological shackles, proceed from students' real life, proceed from the original characteristics of the composition, and proceed from the purpose of the exam, and settle down to draw up a suitable composition topic. Here, the proposer is very important to the concept of composition teaching and its "student view"
This year's senior high school entrance examination composition questions are very common, but unpredictable; It doesn't matter if you can't guess, there will always be endless writing. "Eating _ _ _ _", though plain, does not hinder innovation or the galloping of ideas. Such a proposition idea has indeed reached the ideal state of proposition, and students are very lucky! Parents are very lucky! The teacher is lucky! Composition 1: Eat your own food instead of your parents' "sweat, eat your own food and do your own thing."
Relying on the sky, people and ancestors is not a hero! Zheng Banqiao's words warned us that we should stand on our own feet and not rely on others in life. However, not everyone can do this.
Nowadays, there are more people in society who "enjoy themselves and work for their parents". They are called "neets", that is, people who rely on their parents and are unwilling to stand on their own feet.
Most of these people don't look for jobs after graduation, but only know how to eat their parents. I remember such a scene: in the talent market, an old man actually filled out more than 60 job applications, only to find that he was here for his 26-year-old son.
At the moment, my son is playing cards at home. Imagine, which household unit would want such a person? Even he doesn't need talented people.
Self-reliance is one of the basic conditions for people to stand on the society. People who can't stand on their own feet will be eliminated by society. Maybe some classmates will say that we are all middle school students, and we are not adults yet. At this time, we should eat our parents' meals.
Don't! Strictly speaking, we are also "neets". Don't think it is right to reach out to your parents. Parents only have the obligation to raise you, not to provide you with pleasure.
Besides, your parents can't support you forever. Once your parents are gone, you won't stand on your own feet. How do you live? Maybe some people say, aren't you a "neet" too? No, I can make money from my brain. I can get a scholarship with excellent results every time I take the school monthly exam.
After a semester, the income is still quite rich. Today, I used my scholarship to buy stationery for the exam, which didn't cost my parents a penny.
I am proud of this: I am a self-reliant person from the beginning. Of course, it is impossible for every student to get a scholarship, but don't forget that we are all sixteen or seventeen years old and can already do some work.
I'm going to work at McDonald's in the summer vacation. A philosopher said that a self-reliant man will never be defeated, because he will stand up again.
We should also move towards self-reliance, no longer rely on our parents, and hold up our own sky. Be self-reliant in life.
We teenagers should learn to stand on our own feet and lay a solid foundation for becoming social people in the future. At this moment, I looked up and saw the bright national flag in the classroom. I really want to announce to the world loudly: I want to eat my own food, not my parents; I want to be a self-reliant person and make contributions to society! Comments: Living by someone or something is also called "eating".
"Eating parents" means living by parents. The ancients said, "A scholar doesn't eat fireworks."
It is always shameful to get something for nothing. The examinee called on us young people to stand on our own feet and not "eat our parents".
This paper analyzes the advantages and disadvantages of this problem, and advocates "no longer relying on parents, propping up a sky of our own", with a clear view and straightforward attitude.