Can Bing Xin's poem be written in four or five lines?

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Spring water!

Another year,

Still blowing slightly like this.

Can I take another photo?

Thank you for the quiet spring water. I said:

"My friend!

I never left a shadow,

Not just for you. "

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Lone star!

Still like yesterday,

Still flashing slightly like this.

Can it be a little brighter?

Lone star quiet blinked:

"My friend!

I have never won glory with the sun,

Not just yesterday and today.