Flat and even is quite neat! But this poem can only be said to be a good limerick. Sorry ~ in my opinion, this poem is too unlike a man's hand. The whole poem tends to be dull, and the true feelings are completely invisible. If you give it to your girlfriend ~ .....
Moreover, although the central idea of this poem is very clear, it is not easy to make people want to produce * * * sounds with it. I suggest you write some modern poems. This may suit you better.
Hehe ~ the landlord is unreliable ~ I'm just talking about my own opinion. You don't want me to lie to you, do you? I wish you a smooth and happy love! ! ! (If possible ~ Give the best evaluation ~3Q! )