2010 High School Entrance Examination Essay Writing Guide and Full Score Essay Selection - A Landscape
[Essay Question]
Read the text below and compose according to the requirements.
A patch of tender red, a curved blue stream, a cloud, a chirping of birds, a clump of reeds in the wind... it is a pleasing landscape;
A hymn to life, A frame of activity silhouette, a style display, a public service advertisement... is an evocative landscape;
A philosopher said that your soul is a selected landscape.
Perhaps, there are more landscapes in your eyes and heart...
Please write an article with the title "A Landscape".
Requirements: ① There must be true feelings and plagiarism is not allowed; ② There is no limit to the style of writing except poetry; ③ No less than 600 words; ④ Real place names, school names and personal names must not appear in the text; ⑤ The writing must be correct and Standard and beautiful.
[Introduction]
The essay "Starting with a Smile" that was written in Nantong City last year without prompts and had a full proposition was well received by teachers and students because of its strong literary color and large space for development. This year, the prompt + full title format is used, which not only maintains the strengths of last year’s proposition, but also carefully adds new elements to make the proposition more perfect. The "question eye" of the prompt - "in the eyes and in the heart" perfectly hints at the two forms of existence of "landscape" and provides a frame of reference for candidates to conceive their ideas. The question "A Landscape" itself not only tests the candidate's ability to go into nature and appreciate various beautiful points, but also tests the candidate's ability to think about life, pay attention to society, explore the essence, and discover the "soul". These all give the proposition a certain degree of significance. Difficulty is conducive to raising the grade of the composition. To write this full-title essay, you must pay attention to three points.
1. Understand the intention of the proposition. A low threshold for review does not mean there is no threshold. First of all, the "landscape" in the title should be beautiful and touching, whether in the "eyes" or in the "heart". You should also pay attention to the quantifier "一道", which gives a quantitative limit. If your article only lists a few scenery lines without internal connections, and there is no sublimation text that collects these scenery lines and attributes them to "一一", Then you will enter the misunderstanding of the topic.
2. Choose a good idea angle. There are generally three conception angles: focusing on reality and moving from reality to virtuality; focusing on virtuality and gradually deepening it; combining virtuality and reality to complement each other. You can write good articles from any angle you choose. The key to whether you can write something new lies in the breadth of your accumulation and the depth of your thinking. Generally speaking, it is easier to create something new by starting from the real to the virtual, combining the virtual with the real, and working from the outside to the inside. For example, if you write about a trip to Huangshan and only write about the "four wonders" of Huangshan, it is likely to be generalized; but if you have accumulated insights about the Huangshan tourist area cleaners as "beauticians", you can combine the beauty of nature with the beauty of the soul. Written together, the article will easily enter the "soul" and reveal new ideas. If you write a prose that combines fiction and reality, and there is more than one person and thing when "dispersing", then you must disperse the form and gather the spirit, and when closing, you must boil it down to the "one" that embodies the sublimation of the theme.
3. Face the hot spots calmly. This year's high school entrance examination faces many hot topics, including ice disasters, earthquake resistance, and the Olympics... Candidates have stored a lot of materials. When I saw the title "A Landscape", I felt that there were too many "landscapes" in the material, so I took out one piece at random without thinking, and "copied" and "clone" the original material. Of course, the result could only be "human beings". "I have it, everyone has it", resulting in frequent car crashes. The key to writing new ideas about the hot "landscape" is to have a unique entry point, personalized understanding and refined description, so that the personnel and events written are the same as those of other candidates, but the entry point and understanding come from your own creation.
[Full score essay selection one]
A landscape
□Nantong No. 1 candidate
In the center of the Juegang Theater Square in Rudong County, There is a bronze bull sculpture on a huge oval column. "One side of water and soil creates a side of spirit." The Haizi cattle that breed and work on the beach tidal flats are willing to carry heavy loads, fight diligently through wind and waves, and are good at pioneering after long journeys. They are a unique landscape of our South Yellow Sea.
Looking from a distance, you can see a gray-black buffalo standing on a stone slab. It looks so ordinary and simple, but also reveals a bit of compelling heroic spirit. The base is trapezoidal, and there is also a stone tablet, which makes "Haiziniu" appear rough and honest, which is very similar to the character and quality of our Rudong people, the sons of Hai. As I got closer, I took a closer look at this sturdy buffalo, and I saw: thin textures appeared on the black stone, showing the buffalo's unique skin full of wrinkles and vicissitudes of life very realistically; and the slightly raised skin The two horns that look diligent and down-to-earth fully reflect Lao Niu's tenacious will and unpretentious style; look at the slightly opened lips, which seem to be uttering a heavy low groan; the eyes full of warmth seem to be grateful He looked at the passers-by; the huge nose with a nose ring seemed to be blowing out hot air, looking tired as if he had just returned from a hard day; and the strong body and thick hooves reflected the old cow's wind and knife rain. Jian Xin Bu Jing's hard-working spirit is just like the hard work, selflessness and no regrets of those pioneers.
Looking around Lao Niu, pots of flowers are in full bloom, as gorgeous as clouds, as elegant as clouds, and as passionate as flames, which adds a bit more splendor and elegance to the landscape. Standing in front of the cow sculpture, I suddenly thought that the "Haiziniu" must be watching every passerby every day. If you don't believe it, its eyes are clearly filled with blessings, and it is clearly looking forward to the hearts of every Huanghai person. There is a more beautiful scenery!
Yang Ting, a native of the Qing Dynasty, once wrote a poem called "Sea Riding on an Ox Cart": "I was slightly drunk and boarded the ox cart, and the clouds suddenly became dim. There was no one on the beach, and the sun set on the back of the ox." chanting this unique regional feature. The characteristic landscape poems, admiring the simple, concise and rounded Hai Ziniu sculptures in front of you, full of the spirit of "doing it without waiting for the whip to work hard", a spirit of perseverance and self-improvement arises spontaneously - this is the heart of millions of people in the Yellow Sea. What a scenic line!
[Comments] Paying attention to, exploring and utilizing local cultural resources are new requirements put forward by the new curriculum standards. The valuable thing about this candidate is that he has extensive knowledge of marine cultural resources and meticulous observation. The ancient poems can be read at your fingertips. The texture, horns, lips, nose, eyes and hooves of the cow sculpture are all vivid and interesting. Not only that, while describing the visible appearance, the author also puts his brushstrokes into the "landscape". The spiritual level naturally reveals the inner beauty of the ox carving, showing the ocean-like vigor of the hometown people and the Haizi ox-like enterprising spirit. Such a close blend of virtuality and reality, and such a strong local flavor, is indeed a unique landscape in high school entrance examination compositions.
[Full Score Essay Selection 2]
A Scenery
□Nantong No. 1 Candidate
I remember when I first entered junior high school, I was very disappointed with the school. The etiquette team felt strange and curious. As soon as I walked into the school every day, I felt that there were more than ten pairs of eyes watching me on both sides, so I felt uncomfortable all over, my face felt hot, my eyes did not squint, my heart beat faster, I couldn't help but speed up under my feet, and I hurried forward with my head lowered. But somehow. A feeling of envy also arises in my heart: every morning I put on a red ribbon with yellow characters and stand at the school gate, watching so many classmates passing by, shouting "Good morning, classmate", what a beautiful sight it is. The scenery!
Sure enough, all my wishes came true. It was only one month since school started. The head teacher walked into the classroom holding a stack of ribbons and said that our class also wanted to select etiquette players. I was so stubborn that I was finally selected. Although our etiquette team does not have suits, ties, or cheongsams, and although all we do is say hello to teachers and classmates at the school gate every morning and noon, I still feel heavy holding the newly issued ribbon.
The next day, we came to school early. Because it was the first time, several girls struggled for a long time to put the ribbon on correctly. We couldn't hold back our excitement, jumping to the school gate like little birds. Some students have already entered the school one after another. "Hurry up and stand in line!" "Shout or not?" "Shout!" The classmate who led the team took a deep breath and shouted loudly for the first time: "Good morning, classmate!" "Good morning, classmate!" —" But we shouted with varying degrees of hesitation and hesitation. "What happened!" Everyone was secretly worried. Soon the leading classmate shouted again: "Good morning, classmate!" This time everyone was more coordinated and shouted in unison: "Good morning, classmate!" When seeing the teacher, in addition to shouting "Good morning, teacher" , but also make a real 90-degree bow in unison. The teachers also got out of the car one by one and nodded kindly: "Good morning, classmates!" The kind words made us feel warm and proud.
Now, every morning, when I push my cart into the school, the first thing I see is always a beautiful scenery - the students of the etiquette team standing on both sides of the gate. They show you a civilized, polite, healthy and progressive campus style. At this time, there will always be a crisp voice: "Good morning, classmate!" My heart warms and my spirit is lifted, giving me a good mood for the day. I realized the civilized fashion of the campus, and the fine traditions of the Chinese nation's etiquette country are also carried forward in this continuous landscape.
[Comment] "Good morning" and "Hello, classmates" are indeed warm notes in the campus symphony and a striking scenery. The "uncomfortability" at the beginning, the "heavy feeling" in my heart after joining the etiquette team, the nervousness, excitement and pride when I was on duty for the first time, are all filled with campus atmosphere. They are all based on personal experience, and the writing is natural, true and delicate. The key point at the end of the chapter is to move from reality to fiction, deepen the theme, and be concise and clear.