The one I translated from Chinese freehand shorthand
I am a humorous boy, I can make you laugh with just one sentence. I am a boy who will not back down and never give up no matter what difficulties he encounters. I also have shortcomings. I am a boy who loves to cry. I only cry when I am frustrated. I am a careless boy, careless in everything I do. This is me. Comments from famous teachers: The idea of ??introducing one's own personality characteristics in the form of poetry is very novel. In the poem, the young author not only introduces his own strengths, but also his shortcomings, creating an image of a humorous, brave, cry-loving and somewhat careless boy. The poems are well organized and have a clear theme, but the rhythm is not very distinct and does not read like a poem. The young author still needs to think carefully and pay attention to the overall rhythm of the poem when choosing words and sentences.
It is recommended to change "You only cry when you are frustrated" to "You only cry when you are frustrated. I am a good boy, say a word can make you laugh. I am a boy would not back down, no matter what difficulties will not give up. I also have shortcomings . I am a loving crying boy, frustration, just cry. I am a careless boy, what is careless. This is me. The teacher commented: to write the introduction comes in the form of their own character, a very novel. The poem , the not only introduced the advantages of their own, also introduced their own shortcomings, to create a sense of humor, brave, love crying and careless boy image. Poetry is clear, a clear theme, but the rhythm is not very bright, to read without poetry style. The need to carefully, in wording and phrasing should pay attention to the rhythm of poetry. " A setback only cry" proposal to change the" setback will only