A bright red tail, a bay with a stream, a cloud, a burst of birds, a reed in the wind ... is a pleasing scenery;
A hymn of life, a silhouette of an activity, an elegant display, a public service advertisement … are all memorable scenery;
A philosopher said: Your soul is a chosen landscape.
Perhaps, you have more scenery in your eyes and heart. ...
Please write an article on the topic of "A Scenery". Requirements: ① Have true feelings and do not copy. ② Style is not limited, except poetry; (3) No less than 600 words; (4) There shall be no real place, school name or name in the text; ⑤ Writing should be correct, standardized and beautiful.
Topic comment
The composition with the theme of "scenery" is not unfamiliar in the senior high school entrance examination papers all over the country, such as "I am the scenery" or "You are the scenery" written by Zibo in 2004. In 2008, a selected composition in Ningbo was "Scenery in My Heart", which was basically in the same direction. No wonder some people feel too "old" and "vulgar" when the topic appears. Careful consideration, looking at the whole topic, it should be said that the composition of Nantong senior high school entrance examination in 2008 has the following distinct "highlights".
First, metaphor sets the topic, which complements poetic hints. "A Scenery" uses figurative rhetoric to set the topic, which is flexible and gives people a lot of imagination. The setting of the prompt is like a poem, which reads fresh and beautiful. The topic is a concise prompt, and the prompt is a poetic interpretation of the topic, which turns the metaphor of "scenery" into a concrete image and spreads it out in front of people to find the direction for candidates to examine the topic and choose materials. Prompt words skillfully remove obstacles for students to examine questions, which meets the basic requirements of "barrier-free examination" in writing examination in Chinese curriculum standards.
Second, the topic is broad, which broadens the horizon for the diversity of material selection. Using metaphors to ask questions gives people a lot of imagination and broadens students' horizons in selecting materials. The first three sentences of the prompt clearly tell students that the angle of material selection can come from nature, society and spirit (mind), and the three angles and levels are developed at different times, which causes students to accumulate life, read and feel, and choose the "scenery" in their eyes and hearts.
Third, take care of reality and inspire thinking for the diversity of ideas. Some people think it is difficult for candidates to come up with something new because the topic seems familiar. However, the author believes that it is not difficult to find from the tips that the proposer clearly points out that students should pay more attention to real life, whether it is "a bright red tail, a blue brook, a cloud, a burst of birds singing, a reed in the wind …" or "a hymn of life, a silhouette of an activity, a graceful display, a public service advertisement …". In fact, we should not only let students see these "landscapes", but also let students think, feel and aftertaste, refine them in thinking, feeling and aftertaste, and clarify their writing ideas. It should be said that students' different concerns naturally present multiple colors in their writing ideas.
Fourth, emphasize individuality and let the mind reflect the brilliance of reason. If the topic is popular, the so-called "old" and "vulgar", the focus of the examination is naturally to emphasize personality. "A thousand readers have a thousand Hamlets." Similarly, the same "eye view" may not necessarily produce the same "mind view". This is actually a difficult point for students to break through in this composition problem. In writing, what you see in your eyes should be integrated with your own feelings, reflecting the brilliance of reason and inspiring people. Some people say that this is too demanding for junior high school students. However, the author believes that this is a kind of guidance, which urges students to observe and pay attention to life, and at the same time, it also improves students' value judgment ability and aesthetic ability. In my opinion, the popularization of the topic is not to let students innovate, but to guide students to write their real life and their real feelings.
Looking at this proposition again, there are still some problems, mainly in the following aspects:
First, the generalization of "landscape" is easy to be far-fetched. Although the tip makes a specific supplement to the essence of the topic, it is inevitable that the topic is somewhat broad. Can all natural landscapes, social phenomena and spiritual feelings be named "scenery"? Will there be a phenomenon of hard pulling and dead pulling? A set of questions makes the topic far-fetched, which will inevitably simplify the theme, superficial, or deliberately pursue a profound.
Second, the topic is vulgar and the selection of materials is easy to substitute. "Scenery" and "scenery line" are two words with different denotations and connotations, so although they are familiar, it is easy to misunderstand if they are not carefully considered and scrutinized. Generalizing the understanding of "scenery", adding familiar topics and selecting old topics seems to be in the usual thinking track, which inevitably opens the door for composition substitution.
Third, poetic titles are easy to be empty and flashy. The topic is beautiful, which is the continuation of Nantong's composition proposition in recent years. For example, the title of "Fragrance of Life" in 2006 and "Starting with a Smile" in 2007 all gave people poetic beauty. In fact, the sight of the topic "A Scenery" will give people the impact of reverie, which is exactly the aesthetic value pursued by the proposer. Coupled with the poetic language of hints, it is easy to guide students to pursue an unremarkable cultural tendency and make a fuss about flashy language, resulting in empty articles and elusive themes.
In a sense, the composition proposition of Nantong 2008 senior high school entrance examination reflects the trend and characteristics of the current composition examination proposition, which naturally has some enlightenment to the current composition teaching.
First, we should have solid training in composition standardization. In the new curriculum reform, writing knowledge is diluted, such as the examination of topics, ideas and writing, teaching practice is ignored, and composition teaching is more random and disorderly. Reading headlines is the first step in designing articles. There are many examples of failing the composition because the exam is not in place. Problems such as unclear theme and unclear thinking have a lot to do with the lack of effective and standardized training in composition. The necessary composition norms should be gradually and solidly trained. The author believes that without adequate "style" training, it is difficult to achieve the "style" of composition, let alone achieve the "style" of composition, and move towards freedom and individuality of composition.
Second, guide students to pay attention to life, think about life and improve their aesthetic quality. Life is the source of writing. Only by describing your own life, showing the details of your life, and integrating your true feelings into it, can you write articles that touch yourself and others. The kind of article that fabricates stories, is divorced from one's own life, and even depends on body double's flowers to write, is bound to be melodramatic. Life is not a lack of "scenery", but a lack of eyes to find "scenery". There are many ways to give students a pair of discerning eyes, such as getting students into the habit of keeping a diary and recommending some classic books to students, so that students can broaden their horizons, enrich their souls and improve their aesthetic quality.
Third, increase reading and enrich students' accumulation. The author once wrote an article criticizing the flashy phenomenon of students' compositions (see Vigilance: Writing to the Flashy, No.6 Middle School Chinese Teaching in 2006), and thought that the flowery words in students' compositions were a kind of composition fault. After reflection, I still feel that this view is biased. The problem is not the flowery rhetoric in students' compositions, but the pursuit of flowery rhetoric while ignoring the content of the composition makes the theme erratic and elusive. In fact, junior high school students should be encouraged to accumulate good words, sentences and paragraphs and use them boldly, or directly quote and imitate writing. The lack of accumulation in junior high school naturally makes it difficult to improve Chinese literacy. Insufficient reading time and guidance are still outstanding problems.
It is difficult to judge whether a topic is good or bad. In fact, there is no need to judge the merits of a topic when it appears. The proposition of the senior high school entrance examination is also an examination and a writing process. The presentation of the finished product embodies the wisdom crystallization of the proposition group. Just like an article, we are interpreting it, which can be diverse or independent, trying to be close to the ideal of the proposer and more in line with the law of composition teaching.
model essay
A scenic line
I was lucky enough to go to Hunan with the tour group, which gave me a taste of different scenery and unique scenery-
It's already late autumn, but the maple leaves of Lushan Mountain didn't greet me with the poem "The mountains are all red and the forests are all dyed". Looking around, maple trees all over the mountains announced a huge "green" word to me. Maple leaves dressed in green have a unique charm: at close range, the breeze blows, and pieces of maple leaves flutter with the wind, "scratching" and applauding warmly like broad palms; From a distance, the maple forest looks like a deep sea. Lin Tao is surging, green waves are rolling, and she is still full of vitality, without any signs of loneliness. ...
I climbed up while watching. Halfway up the mountain, I was panting, but I still carried a heavy schoolbag. At this moment, a kind voice came from my ear: "This classmate, why don't you leave your schoolbag here until you come back?"
I turned my head and saw an old man with gray hair. He was wearing an old green military uniform, with a straight back and sunken eyes still bright and shining with love. Seeing many bags around him, I hesitated, handed the bag over and asked, "How much is it?" "You are not a big man, but you are very considerate ... we don't charge money in this business." As he spoke, his other hand reached out and saw a red armband on his arm with three yellow characters printed on it-"Duty Officer". "Oh, thank you, old man. I estimate that I will return around 12. " "Yes, no problem. However, I can remind you that if you want to climb to the top of the mountain, you must refuel! "
The old man's caring words gave me endless courage, and I tried to climb up again. ...
After having lunch at the top of the mountain, I had a rest and began to go down the mountain. Suddenly, a kind and familiar voice rang in my ear again: "This classmate, your schoolbag ..." "Oh!" I looked from a distance, and the old man was walking towards me with his schoolbag on his back. "Laofeng-"I saw behind him an old man in a green military uniform carrying an insulated rice cooker. "It's almost two o' clock. I didn't see you coming down the mountain for dinner, so I brought you the meal. "
When the old man took the rice cooker, I suddenly found that all the parcels that had been piled there had been taken away. I gratefully lifted my schoolbag: "Thank you, old man. Goodbye! " "You're welcome. Goodbye! "
Looking back again, I saw two old people in green uniforms standing under the maple tree in the distance, blending with the beautiful scenery of the maple forest and becoming a beautiful scenery of Lushan Mountain.
comment
In this examination composition, the beginning of the article is mainly about "maple scenery", which gives people the first impression that this article must be about "scenery". I didn't know until I saw it. Otherwise, this old man, the "duty officer" of Lushan Mountain, is the protagonist of the article ... When "I" looked back, I saw "two old men in green uniforms standing under the maple tree, blending in with the beautiful scenery of the maple forest" and becoming a beautiful landscape. The article is ingenious and fascinating, and it can be called a masterpiece in the examination room.
A scenic line
When I first read Shen Congwen, I felt a sense of heartache.
Before that, I had just finished watching the Water Margin, and the loyalty of Liangshan heroes really made my blood boil for several days. However, as soon as I opened Shen Congwen's Border Town, my heart was broken-a small town in western Hunan called Tea Cave was vividly displayed in front of me with beautiful and refined words: winding mountains, quiet streams, yellow walls, black tiles, peach blossoms nearby, a breeze blowing through green bamboo, rustling, and a milky mist shyly appearing in the twilight.
The scenery is soft and quiet, far away from the noise and glitz of the city, and there is a kind of detached and refined beauty, like idyllic poems floating from the depths of nymphs. This ancient, quiet and agile scenery of the border town gave birth to Cui Cui, a girl as indifferent as Koizumi, as a gentle silk thread, which touched the corner of my heart.
The following reading calmed me down. Page after page of the novel, an energetic old man supports the ferry every day, refuses to accept any money from the transitional people, but always enthusiastically gives them tobacco leaves and tea. His granddaughter, Cui Cui, grew up on a warm windy day with grandpa's flute. I was amazed at this paradise outlined by Shen Congwen. There is no noise, no secular spirit, and people are immersed in it.
Dragon Boat Festival is probably the most lively festival in Chadong City. Dragon boat, drowning and duck catching seem to immerse the whole town in happiness. So I had a beautiful encounter with Nuo: I was picked up by a person's song in my dream and picked a handful of Saxifraga on the cliff ... Unfortunately, their love disappeared before it started, which made me regret it for a long time. Fortunately, Mr. Shen Congwen left people hope at last: "Maybe he will never come back, maybe he will come back tomorrow." When I read this, my heart trembled slightly, like a cool breeze blowing in a sultry summer day, as if I had got some kind of Oracle: there is suffering in the world, but there is also hope.
Mr. Shen Congwen is really a great scholar. I even tried to imitate his writing and continue to write an ending, but failed. I can't write that kind of simple and comfortable scenery, that kind of sincere and beautiful mind. Xiangxi written by Shen Congwen has become a constant landscape in my heart, reminding me from time to time-
When you are noisy or upset, let your heart return to its original state.
Therefore, that scenery will be permanently deposited in my heart, I will always think of it, and watching it will always make my heart beat.
comment
This masterpiece has profound connotations. Candidates are immersed in the rhyme of Shen Congwen's Border Town, and can express this emotion in simple words, reminding people that "when you are noisy or upset, you might as well return to the original" and feel natural and profound.
A scenic line
Open the photo album of memory and taste the thick and mellow love-
Mom? muffler
Outside the window, the wind blows fast, as if tireless. Mother came up behind me gently and magically took out a scarf from behind. Wow! What a beautiful colorful scarf. It looks like a beautiful rainbow. The moment I took the scarf, I saw my mother's hand: the red hand was covered with chilblains, as if it had just been coated with medicine, and my fingers were swollen badly. My eyes are blurred, as if my mother knitted me a scarf in the soft light again.
Oh, a colorful scarf built a beautiful brocade screen for me in the cold winter.
Friends? Nerium oleander
Today is my birthday. I thought nobody knew. Although I can understand my parents' busyness, I can't help but feel a little lost. When I got home, I suddenly found a paper box at the door. I pushed open the door and opened the paper box. There is an orange flower inside, and there is a beautiful card below: "friend, I know you don't like other flowers, so I sent an orange flower." On the occasion of your sixteenth birthday, I sincerely extend my best wishes to you! " At this moment, a burst of orange flowers immediately penetrated into the heart and spleen.
Oh, an orange blossom adds a touch of warmth to my birthday mood!
Teacher? pay attention to
Near the entrance examination, everything is in such a hurry and I feel extremely bad. The teacher assigned homework. When I got home, I opened my exercise book. A piece of paper slipped down: "son, you seem to be in a bad mood recently." Is the review of the senior high school entrance examination too tense? " The teacher believes that you will hold on and survive the senior high school entrance examination. Remember: self-confidence is the cornerstone of success, and strength is the wing of flying. Wish you success! "Watch, I can't help crying.
Oh, a little note will also be my motivation.
A colorful scarf, an orange blossom and a small note are connected in series by love into a beautiful and eternal landscape!
comment
Carefully select materials. Three fragments describe three details of love. The three pictures are full of affection, friendship and teacher-student relationship, and an eternal and often new theme "love" runs through them.
Strong sense of deduction. The clever little author turned three fragments into three pictures and strung the three pictures into a landscape painting with the theme of love. The theme of this article is pertinent and profound.