The style of writing is really ordinary, lacking aura, the artistic conception is dull, the oppression is not good, the sentence is completely concise without poetry, the emotional expression is too naive, neither implicit nor euphemistic, and the sentence is ... even prose is not as good as ah ~ ~
But you can't just say shortcomings, I know you are embarrassed ~ ~ ~ haha ~ ~ ~
You can say that this sentence is sincere and simple. The intention of choosing a paper plane means childhood, and the takeoff of the plane means the disappearance of childhood. Throughout the whole article, although poetry expresses farewell to childhood, it is not gloomy at all. On the contrary, there is hope everywhere, expressing an enterprising intention, especially the pun at the end, full of unyielding hope, and at the same time, there is a feeling of being free from the current setbacks and sadness, which is commendable. The whole poem is very smooth, and it also implies that time is the clue to bid farewell to childhood, face reality and face the future.
P.s. I want to die. This poem is too childish. ..............