Model essay reference point: learn the typesetting skills of "connecting the past with the future" (laying a good composition framework)
"Start with the pen and turn to the tail": start with the pen, show the topic from the pen, turn the pen to expand the topic and return to the topic.
(Start writing 1, paragraph 2) That's an unforgettable story my mother told me all my life. Life is a journey of caring. Even an umbrella is a warm love of parents for their children.
In a long life, there are many things to forget, but some things can't be forgotten, such as umbrellas in this life. (to start with a point is to start with a point. * * * Four lines, about 86 words)
(The third paragraph: lyrical language, which paves the way for brushwork and leads to the following narrative) For many years, I still often stand in the rain and reminisce about the story of the umbrella lingering in my heart. My thoughts are clear and bright, as if I saw an old figure coming towards me in the hazy drizzle. Then I understood that the umbrella is a kind of deep affection and a kind of deep love. Every time I walk on the rainy road, I will look at the distant mountains and trees and say to myself, did my mother send an umbrella again? In the wind and rain. (Transition in this paragraph, * * * 5 lines, about 128 words)
(paragraph 4: start writing and enter the main body of the article) That was the day when I went to middle school. Just before class was over, dark clouds suddenly enveloped the city. (Description of the environment, referring to the weather at that time) I packed my books and prepared to go home anxiously. (Psychological description) It began to rain. Looking at the dense rain in Mao Mao, I have long hesitated, and I will definitely get wet when I go home. As the twilight deepened, I crustily skin of head rushed into the rain. (another psychological description, paving the way for the following mother to send an umbrella)
(paragraph 5) trotting all the way, I vaguely saw a man coming towards me with an umbrella in front. I didn't know it was my mother until I walked in. My mother stood there waiting for me with a smile on her pale face. (A detailed description of my mother's demeanor and movements, "Stand and wait") I silently took the umbrella from my mother, as if I didn't even say a word of thanks. Along the way, my mother and I walked a quiet road in tandem. (A narrative describing the walking state of my mother and me) I just looked at the flying rain flower and thought about my heart, as if I forgot that my mother was in front and went home. Write about my self-care and my mother's selfless maternal love in the rain without complaint. The above two paragraphs are mainly narrative, but the narrative language is concise, explaining things clearly, paying attention to describing the environment, describing the mother's demeanor, and especially describing her own selfishness. The environment paves the way for the following. The performance of my mother and I is a contrast, showing my ignorance and unselfishness of maternal love (3 to 5, 3 paragraphs in the text ***373 words).
(paragraph 6: turn the pen, that is, write a short paragraph) Later, whenever it rains, my mother always appears silently in front of my eyes. Once, twice, three times ... I have always regarded this as a mother's duty. Every time my mother handed me the umbrella with heavy steps, she just took it and followed it silently, as if everything was what my mother should do. (Turn the pen to start the topic, that is, mother's umbrella is written on it more than once, and there are many times behind it. The details in paragraphs 3 to 5 of the text ensure that the article is meaningful, informative and the image of the mother is prominent. The omission of this paragraph makes the image of the mother not only prominent, but also tall because of the expansion of this paragraph (omitting 6 paragraphs ***3 lines and 94 words)
It rained one day, but my mother didn't come. Walking in the rain without seeing my mother, I couldn't help being angry with her. When I ran home, I saw my mother lying in bed with an umbrella beside her bed. My mother looked at me and said to me feebly, "I tried to give you an umbrella just now, but I fell on the bed without walking a few steps." After all, I am old. " I threw myself on the bed, tears trickled down, and looked at Bai Rushuang's mother, ashamed of my ignorance and mother's truth. My mother will always care about me silently, but I can't understand this unforgettable love. By comparing what my mother and I did, and then expressing our feelings, it is naturally touching. This passage tells me that my mother failed to send an umbrella again, in order to enrich the content and create ups and downs of the article, which seems like a mountain is not like peace! ) (this "ups and downs" * *192 words)
(Paragraph 8) Light, light rain, but mother came with an umbrella? Standing in the drizzle in a foreign land, I thought of my distant mother again, and remembered the umbrella that was fixed in my life and embedded in my heart forever. (At the end, take care of the last sentence of the first paragraph 3 with lyric sentences, then sublimate the theme with "freeze frame", point out "umbrella in life", get back to the topic, and end it perfectly) (There are more than 2 lines at the end, with ***68 words)
Imitation rule: 1, fill in one thing on the topic, write maternal love or paternal love like this article, and the event can be reasonably fictional. 2. Big framework: to realize the "link" of this article. 3. Write seven paragraphs. The first two paragraphs in parody can be merged into 1 paragraph.
4. The narrative language must be concise and clear, and the details of events unrelated to the performance center must be clearly explained.
No narration, strictly put an end to the narrative language of keeping a running account in my junior high school classmates' works.
5, the article should have a delicate description in narrative, including the description of the environment, the movements of the characters,
Expression, detail, psychological description. Draw well, so that the writing can be moving.
6. Have your own design and compare the content with your parents. Use contrast. 7. Create twists and turns in content.
8. The lyrics should be natural and the sentences should be concise, arranged at the end of paragraph 6. 9, there must be care before and after.
10. There must be a meaningful answer at the end.
1 1. Detailed distribution of the full text: omitted, omitted, detailed, detailed, omitted, omitted. (i.e.
4 detailed 3 omitted)
12, starting with no more than 4 lines, preferably 3 lines, ending with no more than 2 lines and ending with 2 lines.
The best.
12, with a total of no more than 800 words. (8 13 words in this article)
(Items 2, 4, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 12 in the above requirements, please take notes during the exercise, create your own exercises and enjoy your progress! )