A contemporary poet wrote in his poem:
I don't consider whether I can succeed/since I have chosen a distant place/I only care about hardships.
I don't think about whether I can win love/since I love roses/I dare to show my sincerity.
I don't think about whether there will be cold wind and rain behind me/since the goal is the horizon/all I can leave to the world is my back.
I don't think about whether the future is flat or muddy/as long as I love life/everything is expected.
Please choose a suitable angle and write a composition according to your understanding and experience of the above materials.
Requirements: Choose your own style and write your own topic (please write the topic on the answer sheet), not less than 800 words.
The material in this topic is selected from the representative work Love Life by the poet Wang Guozhen. Judging from the poem itself, it is a philosophical poem.
First of all, we should understand that the philosophical poem contained in the poem expresses why we love life with four affirmative answers. It seems similar, but each paragraph has its own interests. The four paragraphs respectively analyze and answer the four key words "success", "love", "struggle" and "future". What we love in the poem is not the final success and happy ending in the future, nor is it the acquisition of love and the realization of the goal. It is actually a process. It is a kind of pursuit, "going through thick and thin" and "expressing sincerity" ... these are all manifestations of love. Love life, not because you want it, but because you love it, and eventually you will get a sentence. You must have a goal in life. Although there are bumps and thorns on the road, as long as you persist, as long as you work hard and pay attention to the process, you will definitely see the rainbow after the storm.
Secondly, understanding the logical relationship between poetry and poetry is the premise, such as the first verse of poetry "choosing far" (having ideals); "I don't think about whether I can succeed", regardless of whether the result is successful or not, this is attitude; "I only care about suffering", and I will stick to it without hesitation. This is the premise of the fourth section "As long as I love life". "I don't want to think about whether the future is flat or muddy", that is, in the process of loving life, I am not afraid of bumps, setbacks, twists and turns and struggle tenaciously. This is my attitude; "Everything is expected", and this is the result. When choosing a point, two other aspects can't be ignored.
According to the hints, we can choose the deepest feelings in the poem to write a narrative, such as "choosing a distant place as the goal of life", "persistently pursuing a goal", "loving life", "pursuing a wonderful process without caring about the result" and so on. We can write a story about the difficulties we encountered in our study and life, and how we set a goal, go on unswervingly, and finally succeed. When writing an argumentative essay, you can express your feelings about "how can you see the rainbow without going through the storm" with examples of typical people in your life ... No matter which style you choose, it is also very important to suggest a novel and eye-catching title to give the marking teacher the first aesthetic feeling.
Never give up writing in the examination room.
Wang Anshi said in "A Journey to Baochan Mountain": "Extraordinary, magnificent and extraordinary world outlook often lies in the distance, so without will, it can't be achieved." Yes, the infinite scenery is on the dangerous peak, and there is no firm will to never give up. How can you "once you climb to the top of the mountain and peek, you will see that all the other mountains look short under the sky?" ? Climbing the mountain to see the scenery needs never to give up, and so does doing other things in life (the quotation at the beginning shows that the author is familiar with the textbook; When you do other things by climbing mountains and expanding, never give up.
Never leave, faithful wife Jet Li, a famous film and television actor in China, however, he is not the darling of fate. /kloc-When he was 0/8 years old, he made a film Shaolin Temple overnight, but he broke his leg the next year. It's hard to wait until the "Huang Feihong" series of movies sold well, his agent was shot again, and his career fell into a trough again ... When his career was not smooth again and again, Jet Li also had pain and hesitation, but he knew that the difficulty that drove him to nowhere was not the reason why he became strong. So he gritted his teeth and didn't give up. After falling, he continued to stand up and eventually became an internationally renowned actor. Imagine how he could have achieved so much if he gave up the challenge again and again. Only by holding a "never give up" attitude towards difficulties and making yourself more optimistic and strong can you become a faithful wife (this paragraph lists and analyzes the case of Jet Li and expounds the importance of "never give up" from the perspective of "successful results").
Never give up, even if you fail, it is glorious. I think, after nearly ten years of arduous trekking, Yu Chunshun, an explorer who traveled all over China on foot, left Lop Nur, the forbidden area of life. In the face of the cruel reality that the survival probability is almost equal to zero, Yu Chunshun did not flinch. Before leaving, he said to the reporter who interviewed him with him: "I may really fail, but I can't give up this dream." Even if I fail, I am also a failed hero! " It's a pity that his words came true, but his firm belief of fearlessness and never giving up made him stand tall as a capitalized "man" and cast a monument of a new era for our Chinese nation! (This paragraph lists and analyzes the case of Yu Chunshun, and explains that "never give up" is equally important from the perspective of "failure in the result")
British Prime Minister Churchill said: "There are three secrets to my success: the first is never to give up; The second is never, never give up; The third is never, never, never give up! " In just three sentences, what remains in the hearts of the world is an eternal power (short and powerful quote). Maybe we wanted to give up studying because of poor grades, but as long as we think of Wei Liu, China's Got Talent, our whole body is full of the power to forge ahead; Maybe we once wanted to indulge ourselves because of the bleak future, but as long as we think of the wheelchair philosopher Shi Tiesheng, we will raise the sail of confidence again (connecting with the reality of study and life, the inspiring role of celebrities makes us never give up)
If fate breaks the sail of hope, please don't despair, the other shore is still there; If fate withers the beautiful petals, please don't sink, the green leaves are still on the ideal road ahead, and I don't think about whether I can succeed. Since I have chosen a distant place, I only care about hardships and never give up! (Contact the poems in the materials given by the topic, end the whole article in literary language, and point out the topic)
General review basic level: From the content point of view, the article has detailed examples and clear views. In order to prove the viewpoint of "never give up", the second and third paragraphs of the article list the examples of Jet Li and Yu Chunshun, and demonstrate them from different angles, which complement each other and complement each other. When citing examples, the narrative is concise and the analysis is in place, revealing the internal relationship between arguments and arguments. The fourth paragraph of the article also quotes Churchill's words as an argument, which is a reason argument in terms of expression.
Development level: Starting from the first section of the given material poem, the article refines the argument of "never give up" and has a profound understanding. In terms of arguments, there are examples and famous sayings, and the materials combining Chinese and foreign materials are typical. In the method of argumentation, examples are combined with citations, and both positive and negative aspects are taken into account. Generally speaking, this article is a relatively standard argumentative paper.
Comprehensive score: 23 (content) +23 (expression) +8 (development) = 54 points.
Writing in the examination room is hard and difficult.
Class 2, Grade 2009, No.2 Middle School, Anlu City, Zhang Huimin
There is a poem that says, "I don't think about whether I can succeed." Since I chose the distance, I only care about the hardships. " Therefore, since I have chosen a distant place, I will not think about whether I can succeed. I only care about the hardships of reaching a distant place (quote the poem in the title feed, take local materials, and come straight to the point to make an argument)
When we choose to devote ourselves to science, we will not consider whether it is successful or not. Copernicus was willing to be tied to the gallows and burned to death in order to adhere to the "Heliocentrism"; In order to study explosives, Nobel's family paid the price of their lives, and he almost died. In order to extract the radioactive element radium, Madame Curie buried herself in the laboratory all day, not afraid of hardship, and never gave up day and night ... They all chose the distant place of science, and no one thought about whether they would succeed. No matter how many hardships and tears they have from beginning to end, they only care about hardships, thus leaving a series of dazzling footprints on the journey of human development (from the perspective of "dedication to science", Copernicus, Nobel, Madame Curie and others are quoted and analyzed)
When we choose to devote ourselves to art, we should not think about whether it is flowers or cold rain behind us, but only care about the hardships. "My life is to prepare for going on stage!" I still remember that Wei Haimin, a famous Peking Opera dancer in Taiwan Province Province, commented that Wei Haimin 10 was admitted to Guang Hai Theatre School in Taiwan Province Province. She has been attached to the Peking Opera stage for 40 years, from the brightest little star in the school, to Hua Dan in Tsing Yi, the head of Guang Hai National Repertory Theatre, and then to performing artists at home and abroad. With her diligence and sweat, she constantly surpassed herself on the road of art, and she didn't care whether it was painful or not, and she didn't care whether it was successful. Since she chose the distance of art, she should follow it with the passion of life, no matter how far the road is, she only cares about hardships. Because of this, Wei Haimin reached the peak of stage art (from the perspective of "dedication to art", Wei Haimin's case was listed and analyzed)
When we choose to devote ourselves to the motherland, we should not think about whether the road ahead is cold wind or thorns, but only care about the difficulties and hardships. Deng Jiaxian went through all the hardships for the cause of science and technology of the motherland and resolutely returned to the embrace of the motherland. He chose the deep desert, isolated from the world, and devoted himself to studying the nuclear cause. Due to long-term exposure to radioactive elements, he was severely irradiated, but even at the last moment of his life, he still remembered the numbers used to calculate atoms on the manuscript paper. Concerned about the interests of the motherland, since I chose to devote myself to the motherland, no matter how many difficulties and obstacles there are behind me, no matter the vicissitudes of time, I only care about the difficulties and hardships. Deng Jiaxian did it, and his life was really a tragic triumph! He devoted all his life energy to the motherland, and he explained the height of patriotism with the enthusiasm of life! (From the perspective of "serving the country faithfully", the case of Deng Jiaxian is listed and analyzed)
Today, when we choose to study for national rejuvenation, we must light the torch of life with the enthusiasm of youth, and don't think about whether the future is flat or muddy, success or failure. Since you have chosen a bright distance, you only care about hardships. Only in this way can we sail to a bright distance and let the ancient Chinese nation revive and grow in our hands (it is of great practical significance to express our determination in connection with reality).
No matter what distance we choose, don't think about whether we are successful or not, just consider the hardships, and believe that our future is not a dream (summarize the full text, look forward to the future at the beginning, deepen the center)
Basic level of overall evaluation: From the content point of view, the center of the article is prominent, which conforms to the meaning of the topic, and the cited examples enrich this article. According to the train of thought of "quotation-discussion-connection-conclusion", firstly, the poems in the topic materials are quoted to put forward the central argument, that is, "quotation". Then, the author draws up three sub-arguments from different angles according to the central argument by means of horizontal discussion, and briefly analyzes the materials and examples one by one. Finally, the author summarizes the three sub-arguments in one sentence, reiterates the central argument and looks forward to the future. This is the conclusion. From the expression point of view, the language of the article is fluent, the structure is clear and complete, and the stylistic features are distinct, so it is a well-behaved argumentative essay.
Development level: the content of the article is relatively substantial. In the choice of arguments, the author has achieved accuracy, typicality and meticulous application from multiple angles. The disadvantage of argument is that the method of argument seems to be somewhat single.
Comprehensive score: 24 (content) +22 (expression) +8 (development) = 54.
No regrets in three choices of composition in examination room
People have no regrets when they choose the right path.
-Inscription (the inscription is quite philosophical and reveals the main idea of the article)
There are thousands of roads; But the intersection of faith and hope will make you go on without regrets all your life (the beginning is simple, although there is the word "no regrets" to take care of the title, it has nothing to do with "choice")
Tao Yuanming chose the road of seclusion to nature, and he pursued the day of "supporting the old and taking care of the young, looking up at the distance". Doesn't he feel like saving the world? Is he just escaping from reality? Don't! He "naturally loves mountains" and hopes to live a life of "picking chrysanthemums under the east fence and seeing Nanshan leisurely". This is his choice. Even if his relatives and friends are puzzled, even if his life is difficult, even if the government warmly invites him, he still "draws a pot and makes his own decision", insists on his choice and proudly says he has no regrets (Tao Yuanming's case analysis is closely related to "choice" and "no regrets").
"Finally found it!" Yuan Longping happily lifted a rice plant, which is the world-famous hybrid rice. He, a college student who jumped out of the agricultural gate, returned to the farmland to study food. His behavior is not understood, but this is the way he chose. He worked silently for ten years, failed again and again, and started again and again. His persistence led to his success. Someone asked him if he regretted his choice, but his face was full of smiles.
"Don't give up, don't give up" seems to be the portrayal of Wang. He never gives up his dreams and hopes. The days of learning martial arts are very tiring, and the days of wandering around are very bitter. But he stuck to his dream. On the road he chose, he may not be the brightest star, but he chose his own road, continued his dream without regrets, and made brilliant achievements with his youth! (3) Wang's example. From the use case, there is not much change in material selection. There are ancient and modern, but there are none at home and abroad. Word editing can be combined into a parallel paragraph, which is suspected of enumerating examples. )
A flash in the pan always gives people regret that they can't last long, but this is the way it chooses. It uses gorgeous flowers to express the regret of life.
Populus euphratica stands in the desert, resisting wind and sand with its tall and straight body. It is lonely, but it is its choice. He showed us with persistence that beauty can be forged without regrets (take figures as examples and plants in nature as examples to expand the selection of materials and enhance persuasiveness)
There are thousands of roads; There is only one choice, whether the road ahead is flat or muddy, whether flowers are blooming or thorns are everywhere, whether laughter is constant or melancholy is long, it is your choice! Since you have chosen, don't care about success or failure, don't care about praise or criticism, don't care about sunny days or dark clouds, because you have no regrets! Choose according to your own needs and act without regret (pay attention to the first paragraph and inscription, and highlight the main idea)
With the persistence of dreams and the pursuit of the future, we will walk on the road and taste the ups and downs along the way. When we reach the end of the road, we can say loudly: No regrets! There is no mountain higher than man, and there is no road to the horizon without feet. Let the world judge your back! (use the poem in the title feed to deduct the material)
General evaluation of basic level: From the content, this article has real feelings. This is an argumentative essay. The author chooses two key words that have the deepest experience: "choice" and "no regret" as the main body of his discussion, and demonstrates them with examples. Examples are accurate, typical and closely related arguments. The disadvantage is that the characters are not selected from different levels and angles, the freshness is not enough, the argument method is relatively simple, and the persuasiveness is reduced. In terms of expression, the language of the article is fluent.
Development level: the language of the article is more literary. First, the whole sentence is used to form parallel sentences or antithetical sentences in many places, so that the whole text is integrated, scattered and ups and downs, and it is enjoyable to read. Second, the sentence is meaningful, such as "the person who chooses the right road has no regrets" and "there is no mountain higher than people, and there is no road without feet", which is rich in connotation and worth tasting.
Comprehensive score: 20 (content) +20 (expression)+10 (development) = 50 points.