How to write a long composition with eggs, trees and lamps
I took the eggs from the tree. The bird's eggs are cold. It's really interesting to hold it in your hand. Mom saw it and said, two eggs are two birds. Mother bird must be very anxious at the moment. I walked carefully to the tree where the eggs were, and gently put them back. I seem to hear birds singing, raise my head and look at the high blue sky. Teacher's comment: As a first-grade child, the little author has written this composition very well. The greatest advantage of the composition is that the words are vivid and accurate: the sentence "the bird's egg is cold" has both vision and touch, which makes readers have a very intuitive and profound impression; The words "Be careful", "Hold tight", "Grasp", "Gently" and "Return" accurately describe the movements and temperament of this young author. Lack of composition: the time and place of the event are not described, so the reason of the event is not clear enough, which is also an element that should be possessed in narrative, and young writers should pay attention to it when writing. "I seem to hear birds singing" was changed to "I seem to hear birds singing in the sky", thus finding a reason for "looking up at the blue sky".