Exercise requirements
1, rewrite an ancient poem you like into a narrative;
2. Write down the content described in ancient poems in a concrete and coherent way, and expand the imagination space appropriately without changing the original intention;
3, the topic is self-made, or it can be titled "Rewriting the ancient poem" xx "
Students talk about their understanding of the exercise requirements.
Student 1: I think the genre of this exercise has changed from poetry to narrative.
Health 2: As far as the content is concerned, it should be concrete and vivid, complete in narrative, and respect the original intention of poetry. The plot should be vivid, imaginative and innovative.
Student 3: The focus of lyric poetry by scenery is to describe scenery and express emotions; Narrative ancient poetry focuses on the description of characters' language, movements and appearance, and the narrative is complete.
Teacher: The students have a good understanding of the requirements of practice. The rewriting of ancient poetry is a brand-new package of ancient poetry from form to content, and it is a second creation on the basis of the original text, which makes the poetry sentences more concrete and easy to understand. (Writing on the blackboard: form: narrative content of ancient poetry: keeping original intention and imagining appropriately)
So how to rewrite ancient poetry? Let's do the second part: read examples and learn methods. (Students read together)
Third, set an example.
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Teacher: Please look at the first example. Rewrite the Twilight River song. This is a famous landscape poem. Based on what the poet saw by the riverside, the two small shots of the sunset sprinkling water and the new moon, and the wonders of dusk and the scenery of the moonlit night constitute a colorful and three-dimensional picture of Qiu Jiang. Beautiful artistic conception. So how did the little author rewrite it? Please look at the big screen.
(Projection shows poems with pictures and examples "Mujiang Sound")
Mujiangsong
-Rewrite "Mujiangyin"
As the sun sets, the afterglow of the setting sun spreads all over the earth.
The sun took off its dazzling coat and put on a bright red shawl. It is so soft and beautiful!
The clear river is like a mirror, shining in the corner of the light. When the breeze blows, water waves appear on the river, and the reflection of sunlight vibrates, just like a girl dancing in the water.
The weeping willows by the river put their long hair into the water, like a beautiful princess, twisting her slender waist and putting a green skirt on the shore, compared with the sunshine in the water. Unfortunately, they didn't name the winner, but reflected the river half red and half green, like a huge palette.
Although the flowers on the riverside are not so graceful, they always exude charming fragrance.
I stood on the rock and looked around. The mountains in the distance were looming in the fog, which was extremely mysterious. The brightly lit villages with snuff are like swarms of fireflies, and the hazy fog connects the river, the earth and the sky. Ah! September 3rd, what a beautiful night! Birds are singing in front of the mountain, and the fruit in the field is fragrant; Dewdrops are like crystal pearls; The hidden moon is like a beautiful bow, even the fallen leaves are full of praise, and the wind is singing hymns.
I love you this intoxicating Mujiang!
Teacher: Ancient poems describing scenery should focus on describing scenery and grasp its characteristics. When writing a scene, there should be true feelings between the lines and express true feelings. Emotion and scenery are inseparable, and it is an important means to create artistic conception to contain emotion in scenery, melt emotion in scenery and melt scenery in scenery. A good practice should avoid the scenery without emotion, let emotion become scenery, and scenery become emotional notes. Only when the two fit perfectly can the article be subtle and meaningful.
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Teacher: The students of landscape painting and ancient poetry all know its rewriting method, so how should narrative ancient poetry be rewritten? Now please look at the rewriting of To Wang Lun.
This is a narrative poem praising friendship. It is also a masterpiece in farewell poems. Since ancient times, the atmosphere of parting is sad, and there are few laughter and laughter. However, the poet used a unique way to create a heroic atmosphere. Express deep affection and farewell wishes among friends. Please look at the original text and the revised examples.
(The projection shows poems with pictures and an example "A gift for Wang Lun")
say goodbye to
-Rewrite A Gift for Wang Lun.
Li Bai is one of the greatest poets in the Tang Dynasty. I had a rough life experience and experienced the process from prosperity to decline in the Tang Dynasty.
Li Taibai is called "Romantic Poet" because he is generous, easy to swim and good at wine. At that time, a man named Wang Lun worshipped Li Bai very much. Let the son recite Li Bai's "A Word to Meng Haoran" from childhood. Knowing that Li Bai was going out to play on state affairs, he wrote a letter to Li Bai: How is your husband? There are ten miles of peach blossoms here; How about the wine, sir? There are ten thousand hotels here. Wang Lun
When Li Bai received this letter, he was elated and thought: Playing and drinking are my favorite things. Why not take this opportunity to relax? So he set off the next day. When he arrived at Wang Lun's house, Li Bai couldn't wait to ask, "Brother, where is Shili Peach Blossom?" Wang Lun smiled and pulled Li Bai to see that there was only one peach tree. Wang Lun said, "We only have a peach tree here. Every time it blooms, it will smell the fragrance of Shili, so it is called Shili Peach Blossom".
Li Bai asked again, "What about the 10,000 hotels? Why don't we go for a few drinks! " But Wang Lun still took Li Bailing to a small restaurant called "Wanjia Hotel". Li Bai is very confused. Wang Lun told Li Bai that the owner of this hotel was surnamed Wan, so it was called "Wanjia Hotel".
Li Bai was not only not angry, but also applauded again and again. Wang Lun was also very happy, and invited Li Bai to be a guest at home. The Wangs warmly welcomed him. Li Bai and Wang Lun talked at his parents and became close friends.
Li Bai lived in Wang Lun's house for half a year, and time flies. On this day, Li Bai said to Wang Lun, "Brother Wang Lun, I have lived in your house for half a year, and I will leave tomorrow to continue my immortal life." "Why? Is it because I don't treat my guests well that you don't want to stay any longer? " Wang Lun asked. Li Bai waved and explained, "No, your family regards me as a relative. How could I not like it? " ? I just want to travel around the world. "Wang Lun see can't say li bai, had to agree to let him go.
The next morning, Li Bai came to Taohuatan with endless nostalgia and regret. Li Bai clenched his fists with his hands and said with tears, "Brother, your friendship with me will never be forgotten by Li!" Before the words were finished, singing accompanied by footsteps sounded on the shore. Li Bai took a look, ah! It was the villagers who saw him off. Li Bai waved to the crowd and said loudly, "Take care, folks. I believe Li will come to see you again! " One of the people in the crowd said, "Great poet, take care, too. Wish you all the best. See you later. " At this time, a boat has docked on the shore, waiting for the great poet Li Bai to board. Li Bai stepped into the boat and said his last words to Wang Lun with deep affection: "Brother Wang Lun, although the Peach Blossom Pond is deep, it is not as deep as the friendship between you and me. Let's lift the boat of friendship and sail to the other side of each other's hearts. " Wang Lun finally lost control of his emotions and said with tears, "Take care! "
As the boat drifted away, looking at Li Bai's back, Wang Lun silently said, "Brother Li, when can we meet again?"
Teacher: Please read the original poem together. (Students read) Who would like to read this example to you? (lifelong reading)
Teacher: Please discuss in groups:
What do you think of the rewriting of this exercise? What is worth learning from? What are the disadvantages?
② Compared with the first example, what are the similarities and differences?
Comments on Student Reports (omitted)
Teacher: the rewriting of narrative ancient poetry should tell the story completely, with story plot, time, place and characters, that is, according to the six elements of narrative.
Fourth, the idea of material selection.
Through these two examples, students basically realized the rewriting method of ancient poetry. Let's enter the third link: choose ancient poems and conceive them skillfully.
Student: (Show it to the students on the big screen and read it together)
Teacher: The teacher provided you with the ancient poems you learned. Students can choose from here, or they can choose the ancient poems accumulated at ordinary times. (displaying ancient poems on the big screen)
Teacher: Which poem do you want to rewrite, how to rewrite it, how to write the key parts, and tell your deskmate what you think.
Student: (Choose ancient poems)
Teacher: Now please report your thoughts.
Health 1: I rewrote the ancient poem, thinking of my brothers in Shandong on vacation in the mountains. This poem expresses eternal love. When rewriting, write about the Double Ninth Festival first. Wang Wei's wandering in the street and seeing every family get together not only aroused his homesickness, but also wrote about his memories of the past, how to get along with his brothers and sisters day and night, and finally wrote about expressing his feelings. The focus is on the plot of climbing high and filling with dogwood.
Teacher: Good. This poem expresses a kind of affection that is impossible at any time, and it is easy to arouse everyone's * * *. Affection is also the simplest and most touching emotion of human beings, so we should stick to this theme when rewriting. Please express your opinion below.
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Health 2:. I want to focus on the picture of my mother sewing clothes for the homeless under the mother's lamp, and praise the great maternal love through some details.
Teacher: Yes, maternal love is the simplest and most sincere emotion in the world. For thousands of years, many poets and writers have been singing heartily. So when rewriting this poem, we should grasp the details to express this eternal theme. Express your feelings with "but how much love there is when nothing grows?" Express one's views.
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S3: The ancient poem I rewrote is a night-mooring near maple bridge. This poem is full of emotion and scenery, vivid and colorful. The poet strung together many landscapes with a wisp of melancholy, which harmoniously and hierarchically formed a parking map on the river night. In the rewriting of this poem, I want to add some story lines, with things and people, feelings and scenery. With the help of the bell of Hanshan Temple, the poet's sadness is set off.
Teacher: Yes, the bell echoed like a melody in the middle of the night, and the lingering sound curled up, setting off the quietness and profundity of the night and adding to the sadness of the sleepless wanderer. The poet's unspeakable feelings when lying down listening to the bell were beyond words. Express the poet Zhang Ji's feelings with your wonderful pen. Let everyone help her with advice.
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Health 4: This is a poem expressing the worries of the journey. I want to describe the time and place first, the protagonist of the story appears, and then describe the endless Yuan Ye. The distant sky seems to be hanging low in the trees and reflected in the bright moon of Qingjiang River, and then the poet's boat is moored on the smoky sandbar, and he sees the sunset and dusk, thus creating a new travel sadness. Walking through the scenery with a homesickness.
Teacher: Yes, cutting also cuts homesickness. Missing my hometown is the same complex for every wanderer who goes out. Homesickness is hard to sleep. Let's give her some advice.
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Health 5: The ancient poem I rewrote is boating in Guazhou. This is a famous lyric poem, which expresses the poet's deep affection for overlooking the south of the Yangtze River and missing his hometown. I want to focus on what the poet sees and thinks, and express the poet's deep yearning for his hometown.
Teacher: Yes. Homesickness is the truest feeling of every wanderer who is far from home. No matter how far you are in Wan Li, there is only one hometown. I don't know how many times the spring breeze blew through the south of the Yangtze River, and how many times the fields in the south of the Yangtze River and Shan Ye turned green. Now the spring breeze is still there, the moon is still there, and homesickness arises spontaneously, but the poet's long-term hope can only be expressed in the moon. So I suggest that when rewriting this poem, we should highlight the author's homesickness between the lines.
Health 6: The ancient poem I rewrote was Meng Haoran's farewell on his way to Yangzhou. This poem shows a poetic parting, a joyful parting and a yearning parting. The time and place of the characters are very specific, and friendship is expressed through the description of the scenery.
Teacher: This collection of poems integrates narration, scenery description and lyricism. Sincere and deep feelings, beautiful and moving artistic conception. This is also a masterpiece in farewell poems. When rewriting, express the feelings of parting between friends. Everyone makes suggestions.
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Health 7: The ancient poem I rewrote is Qingming. When rewriting, I first write the time, environment, weather, etc. Then, it explains that there are many activities in Tomb-Sweeping Day on this day, such as family reunion, grave sweeping or outing. Then write what Du Mu saw and felt. He was heartbroken when he saw passers-by mourning for their dead relatives. So he asked people for directions. Lead to the development of the story.
Teacher: To rewrite this poem, we should grasp the climatic characteristics of the Qingming Festival, the gloomy, rainy and drizzly scenery, set off the tragic environment, and then use the sadness of pedestrians to render it vividly. It implies the hero's homesickness, nostalgia, depression and lingering mood. Let's make suggestions.
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Teacher: The suggestions made by the students are very good. Students who didn't speak also talked about their understanding of favorite ancient poems in the group and expressed their unique ideas. Some students can't wait to try it. Let's quickly enter the fourth link: write a * * * evaluation draft (big screen display, read it together).
Verb (abbreviation of verb) written comment
1. Let the students describe the things in the poem, the scenery and the feelings in the poem with their own wonderful pens. (drafted by students)
2. Who wants to read your exercises to everyone? (Comment after listening)
3, student evaluation (omitted)
Default annotation outline:
Does (1) conform to the original intention of the poem?
(2) Is the imagination during re-creation reasonable?
(3) Is the story complete?
(4) How to use words and phrases? Are there any particularly good sentences? Good story?