The hair and rain in March moisten the spring scenery and add more green vitality.
First of all, I appreciate your love of poetry.
Your work is a link between the preceding and the following, with good structure and good meaning.
But to encourage you, you can study poetry more deeply.
Especially the instrument.
According to the rules, your poem has some defects:
The word "South" is flush, so it should be flush here.
The phrase "spring is coming" is too vulgar.
The word "Shu Qi" is flat. It should be flat and even here.
The word "rain" is flat and even. It should be flat here.
The word "spring" is flat and even. It should be flat and even here.
The concept of "An Sheng Ji" can't be found in ancient poetry.
The words "pro", "eye" and "machine" don't rhyme.
The following changes are for your reference:
What floor is the terrace of flowers and trees on?
March is full of decorations, adding greenery to life.