A gust of autumn wind blew, making Zhang Ji tremble with cold. He went back to the house and took out the cotton-padded jacket that his mother sewed for him before he left. I can't help thinking of my old mother and my long-lost hometown. Deep homesickness deeply troubled him.
I want to write a letter to my family when I pick up a pen, but I can't write it in a thousand words. There's so much to say and know. Zhang Ji finally began to write, enthusiastically telling his feelings of parting with his family. After the letter was written, Zhang Ji's mood was still unsettled for a long time. In his dream, he returned to his hometown and met his elderly mother.
The next day, at sunrise in the east, Zhang Ji couldn't wait to come to the messenger's office and handed the letter to the messenger. And repeatedly told him that he must send the letter home intact. Just as the messenger was about to leave, Zhang Ji, who was uneasy, hurriedly took the letter back from the messenger. Open it carefully and read it carefully over and over again, for fear that I have something unclear. This just carefully handed the letter to the messenger.
The messenger rode across the horse and galloped away. Zhang Ji watched him until he disappeared into the sky.
The vine is dead and the tree is old. At dusk, crows crow in the empty sky. It's noisy, but it makes me jealous. Crows have homes, too, but what about me? The river flows quietly and crosses the long bridge. In the hut, the whole family sits around and enjoys family happiness. I was walking on the old road with a thin horse, and the west wind blew against my face, making people feel chilly. The sun was setting and the day passed. The joy of my life is over, waiting for me, but I miss my punishment and I am deeply saddened. From then on, I was desperate.
2. Regarding the composition adapted from ancient poems, Li Bai's To Wang Lun is a well-known farewell poem.
The first two sentences are positive narratives, while the last two sentences are things rising, which turn intangible friendship into vivid images, ethereal and memorable, natural and true. "Chinese Curriculum Standard" points out that exercise teaching should "stimulate students' imagination and imagination, and encourage them to write imaginary things. "
This poem provides a foundation for students' free imagination. We might as well instruct students to rewrite this ancient poem into modern literature. Students should imagine the farewell scene between Li Bai and Wang Lun and taste the feelings between the lines of the poet according to the contents of ancient poems and their own life experience. The exercises written by students will be very interesting.
This extracurricular exercise design is suitable for primary school students in grades 5 and 6. Writing process: first, enter the poetic realm and taste reading 1. Students, you must have accumulated a lot of ancient poems. Can you recite a favorite ancient poem? Can you talk about your favorite poet? 2. Is there anyone who worships Li Bai? Can you recite some of his poems? It is said that Li Bai writes poems because he loves drinking and playing. Do you know which poem this is? 3. Appreciate the soundtrack animation of To Wang Lun, and the teacher tells the legend about this poem.
4. After enjoying this touching scene and listening to this beautiful legend, do you have anything to say? Can you read this poem in this mood? Guide students to read poetry and feel poetry. Second, put yourself in Wang Lun's shoes, imagine the experience of 1, and "Li Bai will want to go by boat" (1), and play an animation with music to freeze the picture.
Teacher's Guidance:1One spring more than 200 years ago, in Jingxian County, Anhui Province, Peach Blossom Pond, Peach Blossom Ferry and Peach Blossom Blossom Blossom were blooming, and the poet Li Bai was about to leave here. You are Li Bai. What do you see at the moment? what do you think? (2) The scenes that students may talk about are grass, peach blossoms, ponds, fish and green hills.
By comparing students' languages, teachers guide students to speak more concretely and vividly. Teacher's lens advance: Seeing this, the poet felt moved by the scene in front of him, and the willow on the embankment seemed to be mumbling and reluctant to go.
What kind of emotions are these scenes in the eyes of poets! Can you talk about it? (3) Playing the animation "Drinking and Appreciating the Moon", the teacher told me affectionately: Seeing this, Li Bai was filled with emotion and thoughts, and the scene of getting along with Wang Lun emerged in front of him: drinking-guiding students to imagine their own language, movements and demeanor. The teacher introduced the following situations in the camera for the students to imagine: in Li Bai's eyes, Wang Lun is a witty, studious and enterprising young man with similar interests, and they met late, so they can be said to have forgotten each other; In Wang Lun's eyes, although Li Bai's poems are famous all over the world, he is never arrogant. He is a charming and knowledgeable scholar and an amiable elder.
Appreciating the moon-Li Bai loves the moon very much and has written many wonderful poems about the moon, such as Silent Night Thinking, Moon Wandering in Gulang, Moon Song in Emei Mountain and so on. Students can be guided to apply them to this situation. Wang Lun recited these poems to express his admiration.
Play, play chess, fish, recite poems, climb mountains ... 2. "Suddenly smell the singing on the shore" (1) At this time, the boatman urged the poet Li Bai to board the boat. What will Li Bai say and do? (2) How does Wang Lun feel without Li Bai? What would you do? At this moment, you are Wang Lun. What can you sing? Can you write some lyrics? Please step on the beat and sing Wang Lun's cordial retention and best wishes! (3) Listening to this touching song, Li Bai couldn't help being excited. He jumped off the bow, stepped forward quickly and held Wang Lun's hand tightly ... What would they say? How come? (4) Since ancient times, many literati have left many touching farewell poems.
(Showing farewell poems) Will Li Bai and Wang Lun feel the same way at this parting moment? If you were Li Bai, what would you say? If you were Wang Lun, what would you say? "However, as long as China keeps our friendship, heaven will still be our neighbor."-Wang Bo "There is no reason to persuade you to drink more."
-Wang Wei "Oh, ask this river running eastward, whether it can go further than the love of friends! ? "-Li Bai" Mochow has no confidant in the road ahead. Who doesn't know Jun in the world? " -Gao Shi's "Liu Yang Dongmen Tree, Qingqing Sandwiching the Royal River". I've been climbing hard recently. I think I've separated. "
-Wang Zhihuan 3, "Peach Blossom Pond is deeper than thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun" was long before I met her, but after we parted, we finally had a parting. Li Bai got on the boat, and the boat drifted away, his eyes blurred with tears. He couldn't help chanting a poem-teachers and students shouted "To Wang Lun" in unison. Third, stimulate expression, rewrite ancient poetry 1, classmates, today, we came to Taohuatan and experienced a deep farewell scene together. Can we still be indifferent? Then let's get a pen and write down this touching scene! 2. Today, we will rewrite the poem To Wang Lun.
How are you going to write it? The teacher's lens guides the students to write from which angle and what kind of expression to use. What kind of topic are you going to draw up for your exercise? The teacher's camera guides the students to comment.
4. Write my mouth and my heart by hand, write down what we have just said, experienced and felt, and let this profound friendship flow and pour in our pen. Have confidence? 5. Students rewrite ancient poems, and teachers give individual guidance.
Fourth, show the works and exchange comments. 1. Who wants to read his composition to everyone? Teacher's camera comment. 2. After appreciating this classmate's composition, you can talk about what you appreciate most or are most moved, and you can also talk about your personal opinions or suggestions.
3. Teacher's summary: Students, today, we have crossed the boundaries of time and space, talked with the ancients and poets, and gained the nourishment of language, the edification of emotion and the cherish of friendship. Can you tell me how you feel in this class in one sentence? Design comments: I think it is a process of "word-meaning conversion" for students to rewrite ancient poems. Let's try to illustrate this exercise design as an example.
First, the transformation from "speech" to "meaning" as an ancient poem, how to transform "speech" into "meaning" in students' minds? In my opinion, teachers mainly guide students to penetrate the "two layers", that is, the surface layer and the inner layer of language. From the operational point of view, the first is "dialogue", which allows students to "talk" and think with poets with their own life experience and knowledge reserves.
3. How to rewrite ancient poems into articles? The ideological content of ancient poetry is basically unchanged, but the form of ancient poetry is changed into vernacular, the structure is changed and the language is reorganized.
Poetry:
Qingpingle country house
Author Xin Qiji, Song Dynasty
The thatched roof of the hut is low and small, and the stream is covered with green grass.
Drunk Wu local drunk, gentle voice, white-haired old man who is it?
The eldest son is weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream, and the second son is busy knitting chicken cages.
My favorite is my youngest son, who is lying in the grass, peeling the lotus just picked.
Rewrite the article:
In the afternoon, I walked slowly with a leisurely mood and accidentally saw a low hut. Behind the hut are green and straight bamboos and rolling mountains, revealing the quiet atmosphere of the countryside. There is a stream beside the hut. The river is clear and transparent, and all the fish in it can be seen clearly. The river looks sparkling in the sunlight.
A breeze blew, causing ripples on the river. There are several beautiful lotus flowers on the stream, some of which are in full bloom; Some are in bud; Everything else seems to be put down. White inside and pink inside, like a shy girl with a veil on her face. There are clumps of green grass beside the stream, which grow very luxuriantly. It is more beautiful and lovely against the backdrop of streams and lotus flowers.
There is an old couple with white hair in front of the hut. They just had a few drinks. From their red faces, we can see that they are all a little drunk. They are together, talking intimately in Wu dialect, and the second son next to them puts in a few words from time to time!
The old couple's eldest son is desperately weeding in the bean field on the east side of the stream. How hard he works! The second son is not idle, and is carefully weaving a chicken coop with bamboo and grass, very focused. The youngest son, not yet an adult, knows nothing. He could only lie on the side of the stream and tease the fish naughtily, peeling the lotus while eating and shaking his feet. Really cute!
What a happy family! I was deeply intoxicated, just standing there, unwilling to leave for a long time …
Extended data:
Override method:
1, change the style: the ideological content of the original is basically unchanged, and most of them just focus on changing the form of the original. For example, ancient poems are rewritten into words, poems are rewritten into narratives, and narratives are rewritten into expository texts; This novel has been adapted into a play.
2. Change the style: change the classical Chinese into vernacular Chinese; Change the structure, change the sequence of flashbacks, and reorganize the material;
3. Change the person: the first person is changed to the third person, and the third person is changed to the first person.
4. Change the sentence pattern: enlarge the sentence. Abbreviations, etc.
References:
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How about rewriting an ancient poem into a composition in the examination room? I don't know if this parent wants to take the college entrance examination or the senior high school entrance examination. If you want to use poetry, it is best to use famous sentences in poetry and the background or allusions of poetry as examples. If you insist on rewriting, it will be a little more difficult. If you take the senior high school entrance examination, I personally suggest that the topic composition should be in this form. Even if you make up stories, you should connect with life. Don't let the wild horse of thought gallop at will =! Or use poetry as a clue to write, and if necessary, appropriately modify one or two words in the poem (use another word or something). This form of clue will be very popular if it is used well. But no matter what the exam is, the most important thing is the word, which directly affects the mood of the marking teacher and the score of the composition, and then the topic will be deducted at the beginning. If possible, you should point to the topic everywhere to make the article more compact. But the topic at the beginning is the most important.
5. Who can adapt a composition according to the poem and rewrite Tianjingsha Qiu Si with the word 150?
The sky is gloomy after the rain. Crystal clear, no need to wash. The autumn chill after the rain is not empty. On this autumn evening, I couldn't help frowning and wrapping up my warm clothes.
The road is ahead, but where is the end? Where does love go?
Since ignorance has no solution, stop here. In the evening after the rain, let my tired soul rest for a while.
The wind is blowing, and the west wind is blowing. It is really late autumn.
The hair on the forehead stood up and spread out in the wind. It can't stop my eyes or my direction.
Dead leaves fall and dance like butterflies; Flowing on the water, it seems sad and happy. Leaves come from soil and water (all life comes from soil and water), grow longer than branches and love trees. After all, life is like this. Leave water and return to water. It doesn't seem to have changed, but for this time, this time! What's the point of this journey if it's not for the lush branches and the shade under the trees?
The fallen leaves return to their roots, but the tree is old. Will trees return to dust when they are old? In this season, we can't stop pursuing green leaves and yearning for spring.
The vine died, but it could not change his upward ambition. The body is dead, but the soul is immortal.
A gurgling stream, a hunchbacked bridge. With the passage of time and the change of history, even in this country, from one shore to the other, how many parting feelings have you gone through? How many ups and downs have you been through? How many successes and setbacks have you experienced? How much youth and hope have you given up? How many clothes did you bring home?
Crow's crow, crying endlessly. Is it homing or feeding back? Has the meaning of crow's life reached its extreme here?
Twilight blurred, smoke curled up. Someone put on a light, but the light is for people who come home late? Can there be father's misty smoke and mother's nagging in the dim and flickering light? Can you have a wife's desire and a child's childish voice?
The road is ahead, but the warmth ahead does not belong to me. My parents, my wife and children, my deep affection, all stood behind me silently for this wandering. For this journey of life, I put them in the softest and sweetest dream in my heart.
The west wind really started. The ponytail caressed the cheek. I got up, stroking my wandering companion all the way, and looking at the hair that grew up gradually, I felt a little sad: Ma, it's not that I don't feel bad, it's that this road is too far, but my heart is too persistent. ...
One step. The light in front still doesn't belong to me.
When can I arrive at my destination? At that time, did everything go back to the beginning? At that time, can I still have no regrets about this wandering life and be so persistent? Was the tenderness in my heart my last pursuit?
6. The beautiful West Lake is mostly surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Visiting the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, the warm spring breeze blew these ancient poems "titled Lin 'an House" into a composition.
Sleepy, how can you remember the lost northern territory and the reduced old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different. Lin 'an Mansion is a political satire poem by Lin Sheng, a poet in the Southern Song Dynasty, and it is also the author's only representative work. This poem is written for the dark reality of the Southern Song Dynasty. It poured out people's indignation and expressed the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
Most of the beautiful West Lake is surrounded by mountains. Overlapping green hills hold the West Lake in their arms, and there are countless pavilions carved with beams and painted buildings. The West Lake cruise ship sings and dances day and night. Traveling around the West Lake all day, drinking and having fun, the warm spring breeze makes these tourists sleepy, how can they remember the lost northern territory and the degraded old capital! In their eyes, Hangzhou is Bianzhou, no different.
This is a poem written on the wall of a hotel in Lin 'an. This is a political satire. The appellation of Lin 'an House shows the society at that time. In AD 1 126, the Jin people captured Bianliang, the capital of the Northern Song Dynasty, and captured two emperors, Huizong and Qinzong. The territory of the Central Plains was completely occupied by the Jin people. Zhao Gou fled to the south of the Yangtze River and ascended the throne in Lin 'an, which is known as the Southern Song Dynasty. Instead of accepting the painful lesson of national subjugation in the Northern Song Dynasty, the small court in the Southern Song Dynasty became angry from embarrassment and tried to strengthen itself. The rulers did not want to recover the lost land in the Central Plains, but begged for peace, surrendered to the outside world, and brutally persecuted Yue Fei and other patriots at home. Politically corrupt and incompetent, dignitaries indulge in debauchery and pleasure. This poem is written for this dark reality. It pours out the indignation pent up in the hearts of the broad masses of people, and also expresses the poet's deep concern for the fate of the country and the nation.
7. Rewriting a poem requires rewriting a poem into a composition. A misty fairy mountain tells us his ancient memories ... perhaps there is too much helplessness to bear. It has stood there for thousands of years, calmly facing everything with an inclusive heart.
As a result, the misty clouds rose from his peak, and the mountains and rivers played an eternal swan song: every fairy ganoderma lucidum and every plum wife crane were born for you. How can I tell when he walks in and passes through all these clouds? Perseverance; He walked into the profound tacit understanding of literati in past dynasties.
With a sickle in my hand, I left without hesitation to find my own day, a free day. Seclusion, a desirable word, how many vagrancies, how many prosperous honors and disgraces, all dissipated in this nothingness and merged into real freedom.
Maybe one day, under a vigorous pine tree, a mortal child who is looking for you carefully knocks on dimension door. It seems that everything will change because of this, but this is just a door left unlocked. No one will see you come back. You passed the world by, leaving visitors with only deep helplessness.
Who is reciting that unique ancient song: When I asked your student under a pine tree, "My teacher," he replied, "to collect medicine," but in which corner of the mountain, how can I tell through all these clouds? ?