The role of scenery description in the text: to render the atmosphere; Set off the mood of the characters; Hint plot development
(1) Fifteen miles down the mountain is also very inclined. We ran at one breath, really fast. There are several beautiful scenery on the road. In the dense forest, the silver-like spring water flows down the mountain, and it is clear to the bottom. -Laoshan Boundaries
(2)
On a dark night in a month, I couldn't see my fingers. At this time, on a dark road, there appeared a long Red Army team, marching in the snow and ice in the mountains and clouds.
The severe cold turned the cloud into an ice lump, and the wind howled like a wolf, trying to conquer this poorly equipped team.
—— Monument
Knowledge accumulation
Five key words for analyzing scenery description
Perspective, order, senses, emotions and rhetoric
1. Perspective: looking up and looking down (where is the foothold)
2. Order: up and down, far and near, inside and outside, high and low, small and large, whole (from ...
Look at all the mountains, and all the forests are dyed.
the river is full of water, and hundreds of people compete for the current.
the eagle strikes the sky, the fish is shallow, and
all kinds of frost days compete for freedom. Mao Zedong's
Spring in the Garden
3. Sensory: Vision
Hearing, Smell
Touch, Taste
After all, the end of the old calendar is the most like the end of the year. Needless to say, in villages and towns, the weather that is coming to the New Year also appears in the sky. There is always a flash in the middle of the gray-white heavy night cloud, followed by a dull sound, which is a firecracker to send the stove; The nearby fireworks are even more intense, the deafening sound has not stopped, and the air is already full of faint gunpowder incense. -Lu Xun's "Blessing"
4. Emotion: Scenes blend and scenes are born from the heart
Example 1
where petals have been shed like tears, and lonely birds have sung their grief.
Example 2
The greatest scene description in the history of literature-sholokhov's Silent Don
(Gregory fled with his girlfriend aksil Niya, and her girlfriend was hit by a stray bullet. Bleeding to death, after burying aksil Niya, he looked up and saw the sky)
The sun rose above the ravine in the morning mist with hot air. The sun shone on Gregory's hat-less head, shining his thick white hair and silver, and sliding across his pale, dull and terrible face. As if awakened from a nightmare, he looked up and saw the dark sky overhead and a sun shining with black light.
5. Rhetoric: Metaphor personification
Example 1: Wang Jianbing, the editor-in-chief of Meiwen magazine and the masterpiece of great writer
Selected passages from Zhouzhuang out of print
You can say that it is not beautiful, but you are natural and simple. Coarse gray coat, white skirt, decorated with some red and white flowers and green willow branches. The clear flowing water softens your skin, the key of Shuangqiao is properly hung at your waist, and the most important thing is the window of your eyes, which is half open and half closed in mid-spring and can't hide the charm of people. It's still the morning sun of the Ming Dynasty, which shines obliquely on your shoulders and gives you a half-dull and half-bright freehand brushwork.
Choose the right angle in the actual combat drill and analyze the text of this scene.
The river is like a green satin, shining in the moonlight. When the bamboo poles were jingled into the water, they stirred up ripples, and the boat passed smoothly on the green satin. Sometimes the grass beside the river rubs against the ship's rail, making a whispering rustle, and the willow branches on the shore hang down, brushing the hair of Dingdong and Shitiantian, like soft palms touching their heads. The night is silent, the flowers are faint, and the stone breaks into a dream again.
—— selected from Jin Yong's
Summary: Five key words for analyzing scenery description
Perspective, order, senses, mood and rhetoric
Intensive analysis textbook
1. The sky is full of stars and torches are lit up. Looking up from the foot of the mountain, I saw the torches arranged in many zigzag shapes, all the way to the sky, pressing up with the stars, and I couldn't tell whether they were torches or stars. Dazhen is a spectacle I have never seen in my life. (perspective, order, senses, rhetoric, emotions)
2. Go up step by step on the road of turning the word "zhi". Looking up, the torch is a little bit overhead in the sky; Looking down, it is simply a cliff, and the torch shines on people's faces, just under their feet. (perspective, order, senses, emotions)
3. In the middle of the night, I suddenly woke up, only to feel chilly, piercing my muscles and bones, and trembling all over. Roll up the blanket tighter and curl up, but I still can't sleep. The twinkling star in the sky is like a jewel on a black curtain. It is so close to us! The black mountain peaks stand in front of us like giants. The surrounding mountains surround the valley like a well. There are several fires burning above and below; Comrades who woke up from the cold whispered around the fire. In addition, it is silence. There are unpredictable sounds in the ears, which are very far away and very close, very loud and very finely cut, like spring silkworms chewing mulberry leaves, like wild horses galloping on the plains, like Xiangshan springs sobbing, like waves surging. I don't know when I fell asleep again. (perspective, order, senses, rhetoric, emotions)
4. After a short walk, I saw the road on the cliff mentioned last night, which is called Leigong Rock. It was really steep, almost a 9-degree vertical stone ladder, only a foot wide; Next to it is a cliff, which is not very deep, but it is scary enough. A lot of horses have gathered under the cliff, but they can't go there last night until the whole column is over today. Several horses once fell off a cliff and broke their ankles. (perspective, order, senses, emotions)
5. There are several beautiful scenery on the road. In the dense forest, the silver-like spring water flows down and is crystal clear. (Rhetoric, Emotion)
Writing Training
Please restore the following excellent composition fragment of the senior high school entrance examination as required.
Morning on campus
The curtain of the night slowly opened, and our campus woke up from a deep sleep. Silence enveloped the magnificent teaching building. Through the morning mist like a veil, I seem to be in a paradise. The grass leaves are covered with crystal dew, like dazzling diamonds, teetering. The breeze slowly caressed my cheek and naughtily swept up my hair, which made me happy. The sun rose and lit up the whole campus. In the classroom, some students are reading extra-curricular books, some are talking and laughing, and some are reading aloud ... A burst of laughter broke the silence of the campus, and the campus was full of vitality.
can you tell the author's perspective and the order of writing scenes?
This paper has used "vision", "hearing" and "touch". Can you add "smell" to make the campus morning better?
The underlined sentence is not beautiful enough. It is not the author's original words at all, but Lao Wu's tampering. What rhetoric do you think the author will use to describe the rising sun?
Original text:
The morning light slowly opened the curtain of the night, and our campus woke up from a deep sleep. Silence enveloped the magnificent teaching building. Through the morning mist like a veil, I seem to be in a paradise. The dawn of the whole campus is so warm and beautiful. On the grass, the smell of moist soil came to the nose, and the grass leaves were covered with crystal dew, like dazzling diamonds, teetering. The breeze slowly caressed my cheek and naughtily swept up my hair, which made me happy. The sun struggled to climb the hill and covered the houses with gold gauze, and the whole campus was dyed golden by this gorgeous morning sun. In the classroom, some students are reading extra-curricular books, some are talking and laughing, and some are reading aloud ... A burst of laughter broke the silence of the campus, and the campus was full of vitality.
the teacher demonstrates how to carry rhetoric through to the end-it is considerate to write scenes
the wind of the four seasons
the wind of summer. The summer heat made the waist of the earth soft, and the leaves opened their thirsty lips and begged nectar from the stone-hearted sky. Their taste is only when they know that they feel the same, and they all give a silent or audible cry. At this time, the wind came. The wind is considerate, and it walks with unnecessary body steps. It strode across the hot road, and the wheels running the marathon on the road were the most comfortable. It tramped through the fields with smoky throats, without neglecting a grouted plant. Sweat drops hanging in the sky and underground shrink back as soon as the wind comes.